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All Comments on 'Dinner Out'

by BlueEyed5ftAngel

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 16 years ago
I got confused early on

So I quit reading---Of course maybe it's me

AnonymousAnonymousabout 16 years ago
Rules of writing

Either keep it in the first person or the third. Do not keep switching between points of view. It makes the story quite confusing.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 16 years ago
good but...

got confusing when you kept switching the P.O.V. needs some work.

BlueEyed5ftAngelBlueEyed5ftAngelabout 16 years agoAuthor
I apologize then

After reading your comments I apologize for making the story so simple. It was a conversation people!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 16 years ago
Hot!

Pay attention people. Subtle can be erotic too. VL

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