All Comments on 'Dirty Naked Poker'

This story is just on the CUSP of being great.

The weird baby talk just drops you right out of the mood. It's weird fetish stuff that just doesn't fit the tone or setting.

Could we get an edit with that changed and see how it plays?

nobody would like to be in Sam's shoes.. I hope he will ravage with Emma in the next chapter

great story, and nice jokes! fun to read for sure!

Ooof… some of that language took me right out. Bruvvy wuvvy??? Yeesh…

Holy shit that’s hot.

Too long and convoluted.

Another fucking fantastic story from Spector!

You really need to check your spelling and grammar..

At times, hard to understand.

Pro Jason Anti Sam story is cringe. Sam Kate and Ashley were pricks but this simp story only had Sam receive any real cruelty or being looked down upon. Shouldve have had Jason 'the fuck his best mates girl' snake be the only boy in this cringe harem story.

This was 🥵 hot enough for 5 stars even though it was too long. Shortening this would be a benefit, but don’t ask me how to do it.

Bill S.

Pure, absolute 100% trash. Jerry Springer style. For selfish users with limited intelligence and low emotional IQ.

Overall loved the story. Liked the twists & turns of most expressions.

I too was p'd-off by the Ñ , but in the end I copied & pasted each Part into Word, and replaced all the Ñ's with " ... ". Much more readable after that.

However, you got your knickers in a twist about when Emma bared her boobies.

You said in Part 4 that "she was topless. Her teeny tits did their best to hang down."; but it's only in Part 5 that she actually bares them.

That was fun, hilarious even. Real shit except for the emotional declarations but whatever, right? 5 stars!

Would have given it 5 stars if not for the annoying N all the time.

The boat has a fireplace?

Had to quit. Couldn't deal with "N~".

And Jason scores a home run, oh wait poker...a royal flush in hearts, yeah that's it.

So very well written! Loved all the twists and turns. Truly looking forward to reading the next chapter. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.

Whoaaa! The author absolutely nailed it with this incredible literary work! The creative storyline flowed perfectly; laced with entertaining one liners and perfect debatable that brought your engaging characters to life! Thus creating a tale that was simply irresistible to put down, as well as being quite unpredictable! The sex scenes were also creatively designed to bring the characters to life in the readers mind! Part of me is offering up a standing ovation for the grand finale sex scene! Many thanks for offering this incredibly entertaining chronicle of lust!

Ciao,

Very imaginative and well told story. Great job!

This story sucked big time. Way to much build- up and fetish nonsense. Characters were as bland as the sex. If some read an author with good character development , great sex , and a compelling storyline, I suggest bluedragonauthor. I'll try a couple more of these stories. If If they are any thing like this, I won't even bother.

I agree with most of the comments, an incredible story.

As for the comment that says that Sam doesn't seem like a worse person than the protagonist, I'm sorry, but I don't agree. He was willing to cheat on his girlfriend from the start, and when he asked for anal it was simply to hurt Kate and Asley.

Sam is a jerk, and if the situation had been reversed, he would have fucked all the girls in front of Jason without giving a shit, despite telling him earlier that he was going to get out of the way, his behavior afterward shows clearly.

A failed relationship is not an excuse for Sam's behavior, and although all the characters have their flaws, Kate is a clear example, she is not being totally superficial in the end, she is looking for the best lover, one who is not willing to cheat on her and don't be afraid to eat her pussy the way she deserves, the same person who remained relatively loyal yet aloof even after being rejected in exchange for his best friend.

Jason deserves to have all those girls, if only because he will be able to love them, and while he will share them, I doubt he is a cheater.

nice story.

well done and good caharcter development as well as great sex.

Sam geting his anal was a mood killer as he is a dick.

the baby talk from Ema and Kate was too much as well.

everybody has their own thing, but it just doesnt do it for me.

thank you

The dialogue in the final scene wasn’t hot, it was distracting. Also, you put clothes back on Emma TWICE after she was nude.

Otherwise, it was an enjoyable story.

That was amazing. I am pretty sure you read that over and over, but it was AMAZING.

I actually deflated when Sam had his way, like the rest of the characters. Amazing feat of writing, man. Congratulations.

It was good, really good...up to a point, and then it was too much. Should have wrapped it up a few pages earlier.

It's not often I leave a comment, but this was so good. The prolonged arousal of characters really does it for me. I'm not sure what you used to type this, but it was quite easy to ignore the weird characters and joining of words. Can't wait to start chapter 2 in a minute.

Great story.

Jason is a great guy and friend. Must have been shy and timid with girls in school. But always cared about others.

Sam is just a cheeky prick. Stayed close to Jason in high school because of his kindness and unassuming nature. And right away he took advantage of his friend's weakness, not wanting to hurt his friend, claiming "rights" to the girl Jason liked. Though he probably didn't have a relationship with her at the time. And then stayed close to Jason to show his superiority over him. Here I fuck that Ketty. And you and your big dick are flying by. He's a bad lover, but he doesn't learn but tells the girl she's bad herself and insults her in front of Jason. Asshole.

Even in a card game he tries to humiliate Jason.

Kate just made a mistake. She must have believed Sam that Jason wasn't interested in her as a partner and agreed to go out with him. But subconsciously she feels it's a mistake and won't let him without a condom. Not even a hand job. Subconsciously she associates Sem with a condom as an inanimate rubber phalom that cannot give her satisfaction. She is not fregid. She cum from masturbation and with Ashley. But she can't with her mistake, she can't with Sem.

Emma is a real loving sister. She knows her brother well. Knows his weaknesses and therefore does not allow him to make a mistake again, to miss the girl he loves again. Go and get yours, you will understand everything.

But Emma also loves Jason. And she wants to take what's hers, too. It's just not the time yet.

It's Jason's time.

Amazing!!! 😀

Oh my god. This was one of the best stories I've ever read, ever. This was such a good read I actually enjoyed the dialogue more than the erotic parts. This was such a funny, exciting, enchanting story, I want to read it as actual literature. Brilliant work as ever!

great story. it really is. it's just a bit..........flowery in places

I adored to use of conflict and tension here. It might be the best I have seen in any literotica story. This the kind of energy I need to bring into the project I'm currently working on. Nice character development too. Everyone felt suitably unique and the interactions were organic.

Pretty fuckin hot but hard to read with all the weird characters everywhere.

if you read the comments on your older stories. This one is just over the top good! I saw it was ten pages (groan) but it grabbed hold of me and wouldn't let go! Great story, S.D.! Headed over to read part two!

Well written, great characters, amazing plot twists and turns, lots of conflict as well as lots of hot sex. One of my favorite stories of all time.

Great build up to a great climax! Excellent character development though a fairly short story. Wonderfully done!

The story was good , but whatever word processor you use is fucking up your story. All the strange characters ( Ñ ) showing up in your story just fucked it up. Proofread your story in a different program before posting.

Anony Mous

Don't know about the story - I couldn't cope with all the " Ñ " liberally sprayed through the first few paragraphs.

You've tried the writing - now learn to proof-read!

20/10, Boy what happened next!!!

holee!

magnificent, your best yet

Thanks for the story. Lots of hot moments. I really enjoyed the characterization, dialogue, behaviors, and descriptions of Emma and Ashley in particular. The speaker was a little too juvenile for my tastes at times, though I read his worse moments charitably as tongue-in-cheek. Kate and Sam hurting each other with the game was painful to behold in a fun way. I want to see the fallout from that though I'm hoping against hope that there's some kind of neutral-to-happy ending. Sam may be a shit lover but he doesn't seem like any worse of a person than the speaker (whose main redeeming quality in comparison seems to be dick size?). It's sad to see friendships ruined, and, while I don't mind the drama—and it does lend itself indelibly to the conflict and urgency of the chapter—I'd really like to see a mature resolution.

I have to agree with other commenters that some of the childish dirty talk was immersion-breaking... but for the most part you have spun a compelling and fluid yarn. I look forward to chapter 2.

who believes that you cannot exist and have an enjoyable life without drugs.

What am amazing story!

A simple proofread would have caught the "N's" place of the spaces, and a few other minor typos. Remarkable none the less.

Loved it! Yes the N stuff was weird but i am dyslexic enough to read right through it.

This line was awesome! "I had to kiss my best friend, on the lips," Kristen was close to tears now, "I'm going to hell because of this stupid game. I didn't get to back out. What makes you think you can?"

great way to push the narrative along. Great! One thing i did not like: "It's late. I'm tired. We're all tired. My buzz is almost gone...." Yeah, tired post drunk is super not sexy for me, and we weren't even halfway through the story

The good: Fun humor. Sexy descriptions of characters. Some hot sex scenes. Well written throughout and had a genuinely likable pov character.

The bad: Distracting "Ñ" character throughout story. Took too long to deliver. "peenie" and "peepee" are not at all reasonable words for a sexually excited H.S. graduate... more to the point they were a real turn-off when the ultimate sex scene she shouldn't talk like a 4 yr old during sex, it's disturbing and dropped any hope of a finish from this story.

... except for the Ñ that kept popping up (copy this to word and do an adv. find and replace. That will correct that problem.) and needed proofreading, this was a great story.

It's hard to categorize a story that has different ... fetishes... but I'm not concerned with that.

I had no problem with the length of the story. I prefer a longer story at a time instead of having to go thru several 2 -3 page sections. That is annoying to me and I don't know why authors do that.

I got confused... a bit... during the card play, but that's probably because I'm old.

I'm headed to the next chapter. Thanks for sharing.

I don't think people say things like "peepees in my puss" while they're cumming. It's pretty silly stuff

found the story engaging and despite being 10 pages it moved at an excellent pace keeping interest. Nice balance of humor, excitement, and anticipation. Looking forward to reading chapter 2 in next couple days.

thanks again

First, i agree with most of the comments (criticisms and kudos) made in Anonymous' "Almost" commentary, though with less bite and greater intent to help you improve.

I forced myself to read the entire story, though in all honesty, that shouldn't have been necessary. There are literally millions of sites and resources that will give us humorous stories that are well-written and have well-developed characters. We come to Literotica for the salacious and erotic escapes from reality THESE stories provide. This chapter took far to long to get there.

But you ARE a very good writer and while this story did not merit a 5 star rating, it deserved more than a 3.

I'm torn as to whether I will take the time to read your 2nd chapter. If I do, I won't likely make it beyond page 2 if it is written as this one was.

Please keep on writing and sharing with us but keep the constructive criticisms in mind. :-)

X-Man

You are a good writer: the comedy and words flow like a charm, you also have an undestanding of how to arise lust and get the reader invested in your characters, but... what stops you from being a great writer to me is too fucking much preamble and not enough delivery.

Firstly this is in no way an Incest/Taboo story, the protagonist and Emma did not really do anything and i know you were trying to extend it to a second part but thats just not good, you did not delivered to your reader: they where not here for Kate.

Secondly you drag on and on the suspense for too long, 10 pages?! And you want me to read a second part??!!! Without delivering for point 1????!!!! Hell no. Its good to build off intrigue but you hauled the tension for so long that it dissipated by the end, the last three pages felt like a chore or homework.

Thirdly you put too much strees on suspension of disbelief, i had have my very little share of wild romps not unlike the one in your story and i have seen them fucking break no matter the amount of booze for far lighter shit than what this bunch just faced, emotions are crazy and powerful, its just not credible.

And lastly all the sympathy one can develop to the protagonist just vanishes as he just keeps putting himself over everybody (does not matter what his sis said at the ending, he was not being the perfect host); has the pretty old cliche of the perfect cock and is not really moving things forward, its as if he was just the receptacle of luck as if some unseen but definitely pervasive hand just wrote his story.

All in all its a good story, a three star story and i congratulate you and hope you keep writing as good (however i will personally not read it if it has more than 5 pages).

Cheers!

Format errors aside, I thought it was a great read. Love Jason's running commentary too. One point of criticism would be to lessen the commentary during the sexy stuff, It's good when they play the game and stuff but I'd rather NOT read a paragraph of it in the middle of the eating out, dry hump, and fucking. Leaking faucets, lamps and big "on" switches have there place. Also, you could have found a better place for the Kate Jason back story. Early on I thought she was just Sam's girlfriend and it took too long to find out she was more. Lastly since this is in the Incest category their should have been more there. I get he has the hots for his sister even if he doesn't want to admit it even to himself, but some looks, some light touching, and naughty talk does not make it incest. I'm sure it will be remedied in the next chapter and it's best to keep them all in same category but just the same maybe you could have found a way to insert more than you did.

Haters gonna hate but I for one thought it was an excellent submission. I think you were going for the tense vibe as the game went on, that it became less about getting laid and more about pushing their individual agendas. And the humor was well worth sifting through some of the glaring formatting errors. Thanks for writing.

10 fucking pages and not a single instance of brother and sister fucking or sucking each other. And the only instance where they’re talking dirty to each other made no sense because up until then nothing suggested they would do anything like that in front of the others. This story was a giant waste of time. I don’t even give a fuck if they do have sex in the 2nd part; it’s not worth it.

This group swims all day in bikinis (I assume) but 3 pages about them taking their socks off? Sorry, life is too short.

Great story and I can't wait for part 2. I don't care what classification it is in. I'm just glad I found it. I don't like the getting preggers idea though.

Really hot story but not sure it should have been tagged as incest. Read the authors forward but whilst the siblings Jason and Emma had an obvious attraction to each other there wasn't any sex between them, so technically not an incest story.

Still fucking a hot story.....

Wow.

I'd lost this years ago and found this on story spinner.

THANK YOU!

Everything about this is so, fucking hot. Also the characters make sense. The story makes sense. The reactions make sense.

In short, you're a legend keep it up.

I read a lot of stories. Probably more than is healthy. Some were okay, some were really good. And now they're all ruined. None can hold a torch to this. I could eulogies about the story, the writing, the humour. I could expound on the depth of character that all of the protagonists have been given. I won't though. I'll just offer my deepest and most sincere thanks for this wonderful, wonderful story. Thanks. :)

A decade of visiting Literotica, and I find the best story. Even. Heck I haven't ever commented till now. Nor have a read anything more then 3 pages. You are brilliant.

I mean, seriously, how shallow and heartless could a girl get. I feel sorry 4 Sam tho. Kate deserves death by hanging. God! I felt depressed at the end but nice story and writing technique man. U r a star

Seriously, this one is awesome.

This is one of- no my number one favorite short stories.

It might have been a long story, but it kept my interest. And kept me stroking for all 10 pages. That doesn't happen often. Thanks..

This is the best story I've ever read on this site.

I don't like to read long stories generally so thanks for warning us up front that it was long. I kept reading to see how you handled all the different personalities and you did that very well. It really couldn't have been any shorter. The buildup kept us on the edge of our seats and our hands in our crotches. I still have sore balls! That's a compliment. Yes, the spelling and grammar was annoying but I learned how to ignore it. Please use real commas next time and review several times before posting. Hey, anyone who can work "Biv-Whacked" into a porn story deserves a "5". Can't wait to read the next chapter.

I wish I could give this story a ten. It is hard to believe this is a first story by this author. I like how you have created many different and interesting characters. Most of all, I enjoyed your humor that was just right and just enough. I look forward to chapter Two and future stories that I hope you will write.

I loved the slow build-up and the fantastic ending to this chapter. Thanks for sharing!

RecHiker

I really liked the depth of this story. Great attention to detail, and lots of well timed hilarity. My only criticism us the amount of grammar errors. They really slowed the reading down. Killer story otherwise.

Hey there,

Really enjoyed this first part, seeing the second one on the front page brought me in. I think you hit some really great notes and themes in the Strip Poker style of story that other people (including myself) deal with a little more lightly. The indecision, the varied character ideas of sex, the frustration and even guilt; they were all very well done. I'll be reading Part 2 with great interest.

I guess my two notes of criticism would be that, firstly, I really suggest getting an editor for grammar/spelling. Your content and plot is on point for Lit, but there were a lot of little things like missing S's on She (turning them into He) and a few formatting issues that were distracting. Even with an editor these things slip through, but it can really help cut down. If you already were using an editor, well, maybe a third pair of eyes that is specifically looking for the little things.

My second item was originally Kate's sudden development of a pregnancy fetish (or whatever you want to call it - the not using a condom/risking pregnancy.) I felt like it was too dramatic a turn and it wasn't supported, but as I wrote it I realized that it wasn't the turn itself but rather the dialogue in the scene. The same applies to the Emma hand-holding scene. I suggest toning it down just a bit - not too much mind - and letting your characters be a bit more private in the moment as well. The really dirty stuff, the 'I want my brother' or 'Come inside me' kind of revelations, are private and scary and would fit better as a whisper in the ear once or twice as punctuation instead of rambling/yelling.

Overall, great story. Looking forward to reading Part 2. If you want to talk shop on writing give me a shout.

~Break.

Hey there folks.

This is just a quick note (for those who check such things) that part 2 is FINALLY finished and should be posted soon!

Thanks to everyone for all the kind words and constructive criticisms. I hope you'll enjoy the conclusion to Dirty Sexy Poker

- Spec

Plz bring up rd 2 with all that plus the aftermath of rd 1

More of this great, great story please !

I await the sequal with baited breath this was an awesome story he never got his sister by the rest was worth it the suspense was awesome the writing was great I saw myself on the boat it was awesome

When is the next one

Seriously... one word... DAMN!!!

By far the hottest piece of erotica I've ever read and I've read my fair share

I've been reading here for years but never commented before. Had to this time though to say great job! Aside from minor issues one of the best pieces of erotica I've read.

the only annoying thing about the story is how much of a cunt SAM is thinks he can go fuck girls himself but when its the other way round spits his dummy out... that guy should leave in the morning!

That story was fucking awesome! I really do hope you continue writing!

I hope chapter 2 will be as good as chapter 1.

This story is awesome, congratulations.

That was a fucking story... I had work to do tonight to... Looks like I'll be getting up early..excellent job..

I've been a reader here for a few years. In that time, I've read some great stories but never before have I felt compelled to make comment. This story, however..

Brilliant piece of writing. Loved it

Top job

Dear lord... that was fantastic. Make it so. Make it so now! We beg you.

I can't wait for the next chapter.

Excellent story and writting.

I don't comment on stories, or rate them, as most are OK but nothing worth thinking about once the pages stop. This piece though was amazing. You don't draw it out needlessly, but it wasn't rushed. There was a mix of emotions, high and low, but you switched between them without either being ignored. I don't know when Part 2 will be posted, but I will sacrifice whatever any god demands to see it published.

There has to be a second chapter. When when when will it come out? I've been waiting for months hoping it happens. Just cut down on the baby talk

and yet i took *days* to read it. You know when you burn through stories like wildfire and then something comes along that's so engrossing, you stop yourself, you pace out finishing it? You do it so you can savor it, so it will last longer. I didn't even realize I was doing it untill the last 4 pages.

I could have done with better descriptions of flesh revealed as they went through the game, maybee a detail or so more about the underwear each were wearing to put me 'as the reader' right there in the story. Perhaps something about facial expressions or a slight re-work of the overall game to better illuminate the 'strategy' of each person, and the blind-spot to them each. I'd love to hear a touch of back-story to Kate's icy relationship with sam, a brush-stroke of reason behind emma's smug expression in the final page, or maybe read on in voyeuristic glee as Ashly carries a plot to take what she was denied. Perhaps at a remote place where they anchor and sneak into a hot-tub at a sea-side thing a friend works at.

This story floundered, it sizzled, it was coy, the characters were evil, and resigned, and determined, and clueless (and some of them adorable for spates), and it swung back and forth between just the right touch of tease and denial and raunch.

... The only thing wrong about it, is that this is the only thing you've ever written.

The attention to detail. The build up. The amount of thought put into it. All remarkable. I rarely comment on submissions. This is absolutely worthy of the praise it's getting. Hopefully chapter 2 isn`t far off. Thank you

This is a top notch dirty story. The only thing that got me was the baby talk. I find it incredibly unsexy, maybe it's just me but in a lifetime of hookups, relationships, one night stands and dirty parties, I've never ONCE heard someone talk like that and seriously think it was hot.

Outside of that one complaint, this was amazing.

You Said it, is was a lengthy build up, but what a build up. I really like the way you insert funny comments into the story line, it really enhances the theme.

Very well done, enjoyable to the very end. A second part HAS to be in the offering.

Thanks

Handyman2

It's now June 13th and I've been checking for a sequel everyday since chapter one came out. Don't leave us hanging much longer.

Extremely well done story! One of the few stories that doesn't just tell us, it shows us, in loving detail, and where the narrator's interjections not only don't stop the story, they enhance it. Also, one of the few (only?) erotic stories I've ever read that I found laugh out loud funny. Loved the characters, and loved the frequent ambiguity in their actions and reactions. And love that there's soooo much more to explore in Round 2!

Very well told story. You have a definite gift for erotica. I hope you continue to write.

Great stuff, a lengthy build up to an unexpected and amazing conclusion! I hope to see more along these lines, or heck, fresh surprises may be even better, should you continue to write this one!

I look forward to Part 2.

Great story. Nice set up with good, brief characterizations. The action was great. The story flowed easily from the characters and set up. I'm impressed, this was great and left me happy, and wanting more. Nice job!

Very, very hot finish. Felt like it took forever to get there, but sometimes those are the best. Can't wait for part II.

It's taken long enough: Where's chapter 2?!?!?!?!

I need a cigarette and Jason needs his sister!

Damn a story has never made me cum so hard or cum so many times. I'm literally light headed from the 7th orgasm in only a couple hours. MOAR!!!;)

Loved it cant wait for round 2!

ruined by being way to long,and a load of crap ratings game he had with himself and please there's 4 woman 2 men & it took page 8 to 10 for anything real to happen drinking al night yet they don't get drunk get sober in fact