All Comments on 'Disco Nights Ch. 01'

-----so far. DO NOT let the husband wimp out.

I hope the husband has a set balls.

This is an excellent cheating wives story. You have real talent as a story teller. Your words flow and you keep my interest. I look forward to the next chapter. If this is truly based on an actual event, I hope that doesn't mean you are through submitting after this tale. We have so few currently active cheating wives authors with your ability .

good style, eventhought not very erotic (literotica). but whatever, write the story the way you want it or happend and not the way somebody else wants. if they want it different they should write there own story

While like many others I hope you dont make the husband a wimp, please make the wife more than a two dimensional character. So many stories have the good man unjustly wronged getting his well deserved vengeance. It would be great to see you give her a reason beyond just being a cheating slut.

Nice touch to have him not be able to stick out the evening but send her a note. That was realistic feeling.

For a first time writer this story is a remarkable effort. I really am looking forward to reading any additional chapters.

This story is good enough to stand alone.

... and that you should not let the husband wimp out. That said, the two of them patching things up won't make him a wimp if it's handled the right way.

Good story and a fine first effort. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

Excellent start. Be sure to ignore the person who said one is enough. We Want More...

Can't wait for the next chapter!

You have a talent for telling a story. Keep up the work.

This story has the earmarks of beginning, and more importantly of becoming, an excellent story. This author knows how to write, and he writes in an easy to read, relaxed, style. I look forward to chapter 2 when it appears. RAG

Well written, especially in the sense that they aren't a lot of technical errors — i.e. typos, grammer, etc.

But plot is, well pedestrian, nothing new that hasn't been about 100 previous Loving Wives stories.

I hope the next chapter has already been submitted and will appear soon.

You can Write !-great story--- l small suggestion --Please do not wait long to submit next chapter --It is soooooooo much better to to read if you don't have wait between chapters -- Plus the continuity is so much better--

if the story is well written, is able to engage and draw in the readers, making them feel torn, sadden.... as if the story they are reading is a real life tragedy unfolding in front of their eyes. <p>

good stories and good story telling are not usually about pure black and white situations, although that happens more often than we know... for the most part, it is usually bad decisions, or deceitful behavior, that cause heart aches and tragedies, which even those causing them would rather not go through...but going through them, everyone involved has to... especially the children characters... and at the end, you see hallow, forlorn and sadden results as well as bitterness,,,, <p>

this story sounds like all those things will come to pass and there's nothing no one could do any about... and that's good story telling...<p>

unfortunately, the "I fuck 8 Black men, all without condoms and my husband loves me to death, 'cuze he's such a great and self confident man to allow me to be myself," ad nauseam gibberish are the ones that have permeate Lit. in recent years... they're not stories; nor are they good material for masturbation; they're just idiotic gibberish nonesense...

The two personalities are unevenly developed so we do not have the slightest idea what is going on in Lisa's soul. Her collapse suggests that she is in one of those fugue states where she maintains her two men in separate realities. To maintain the storytelling level is not going to be easy!

Good luck and Thanks.

Not your first writing effort to be sure but a very welcome one to those of us who value reality in story telling and consequence appropriate to the offense.<P>

Your next is looked forward to.

With High Regard

The KEY is what the Husband SAW... with his own eyes. Despite his obvious change in character and personality she never considered something might be wrong. She built a totally separate life.

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He has been told the affair has been going for several MONTHS... that she was a on sailing boast sex party for a weekend... but we dont know that.

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I cannot figure out why the wife/ cunt whore seem to be upset when she gets the note.

I'm not certain your chapter 2 can top this! What a fine job. I don't often hand out 100%; only when I think a story is both technically well-written and the plot is genuinely realistic. This one has it all. Please write some more soon.

This is a really excellent first submission by an author who takes an all too-familiar story, & by fleshing out the characters, make it a really, really compelling story so far. I liked the comment one person made about her being in a fugue state, although from what I understand about such states, she would not actually be in one. But, that said, her actions are almost incomprehensible from what we so far have gathered. Her betrayal, however, is so egregious that I personally could see no way for any kind of reconciliation; her "lover" had become just that, more than an affair, truly had become her lover, she had given her feelings, her affections, even if you will, her "love" as she seemingly understood that word. Oh Well, looking forward to the denouement. Thanks again, hope the next chapter are posted soon.

Great start, really hooked me. Will be looking for the rest, I hated disco!

The plot is shaping up to be a mystery within the age old unfaithfulness tale. I like the elecment of the whistle blower and hope figures in the later chapters. Also, it appears that Lisa's parents know more than the hubby about all this. Where does Connie fit in? Great start

Very well written. I can't wait to read the rest. The hubby has a very level-headed approach...no hi-tech gadgetry, PIs, or entrapment. Just a simple "I know what you are doing" process. Hurry up with the next installment.

itmgr2010, I realize that everyone thinks

differently (and that this is only a story)

but I am always puzzled by the men that

would let their wives or girlfriends go out

drinking, dancing and clubbing with other

guys.

Why ..? Have men honestly descended this

low that this is considered appropriate

female behavior ..?

This is essentially cheating ... what

guy in his right mind would put up with

bullshit like this ..? (guy sitting at

home babysitting with their child

(maybe not ..?) while his wife is out

clubbing with other guys)

I'd like to think most guys would

have put their foot down a long time

ago ...

Pity about a wife who has everything but wants more.

I would have liked to see more than the abrupt ending. I hope your thinking about a chapter 2. Great job.

Very powerful, well written, really tugs at our emotions. Along with your other readers I'm looking forward to the continuation.

Thanks, ohio

Impressive beginning - you certainly captured my attention. Plot development was good and the characters well introduced. I'm looking forward to the continuation/conclusion to this tale. It's good to see the addition of a new talent in this genre.

Great writing & story line!

Will be impatiently waiting for the continuation.

Ignore all the "helpful" suggestions. It's your story & your doing fine with it.

Thanks!

I agree with the many complimentay comments above. I am interested in what is next for this couple, who were once so close and loving. I have no suggestions, just waiting on next installment.

It's simply amaizing.

According to some the world started with it and when we look through the history the world has emerged through it (From Cleopatra, Romeo – Juliet to this). But still we are feeling the depth of it so closely. Betrayal by the one who is most trusted by us is a very touching and delicate feeling. So I believe that the discussions that we carry out, stories we write should also be delicate and focus on the feelings than the materialistic or statistical factors like property dividing, etc. So you done a great job and easily surpass the most bullshit tellers.

We are desperately waiting to see the rest. No suggestions ……………………., just waiting with a beat in our hearts to see the rest.

Keep up the good work.

Well done. Great writing.

Quote from the preamble to CH1 "A time before HIV, Cell Phones, DNA testing or the Internet." Looks to me like AIDs and a definitive paternity test are out. Blood types might or might not be enough. Tantalising

This is a very well written story, specially for a beginner. That is regardless of where the story is going and what the husband is doing. Oftentimes we confuse the craft of writing with the content of the story. IMHO the author knows what he is doing. What I want to happen, or I would like to happen is something different. I like how the story has progressed so far. And I would like the husband to divorce Lisa even if the unborn baby is his. There is always child support and visitation rights. But whatever he decides to do with his characters this will still be a story worth reading. I only hope that the husband tosses out the whore wife. No amount of therapy can fix that woman and the damage has already been done.

Keep up the good work author.

Sorry. The previous comment was intended for chapter 2.

So many of these LW Literotica stories have the wife going out by herself over long periods with the husband either getting drunk with buddies or sitting home twiddling his thumbs. Then there is no communication between the two and the husband wistfully says later that they were living separate lives. Well since the story is set up for that, no wonder. Do many couples actually live this way? I can't relate to a marriage where wife regularly goes "dancing" by herself. This simply means it's a writing contrivance of the author to ultimately begin a self righteous adventure of revenge to make himself feel better for being a dunce all along. The author could do better. The two submitted stories are very similar and have good potential except for the overriding emphasis on revenge for having husband's pride hurt.

I suppose it is natural selection. Women pick a boyfriend or sometime even a mate and immediately start looking to trade up. Then once they are certain, they pounce.

Especially since he is married, Lisa is not certain but no doubt she is thinking about trading up.

Thanks for sharing.

with no morals or cares. TK U MLJ LV NV

Youth and hormones produce very bad marriages - this is another one -

4 stars. final rate remains to be.

and you have to take all into consideration, TK U MLJ LV NV

Damn! You sure know how to build the drama and wet the appetite. Five stars.

Still a favorite. Still love it. Still five stars.

Always the same crap she/he cheated and up for wimp!!! Why doesnt he confront her??

. . . to a story with a lot of potential for emotion and angst. Waiting for chapter two.

Why would she have that reaction at the end? She clearly doesn't love her husband or daughter, otherwise she wouldn't have cheated. And not just a single occurrence but a long intimate emotional affair that she was not worried about keeping secret from anybody but her husband. Clearly she does care about him, knew it was wrong and did it anyway.

All women are sluts when they think they can get away with it.

Your narrative shows you either were in the Army in the late '60's--'70's, or did an incredible amount of research! The used VW beetles, new junior enlisted not eligible for Govt. Quarters, everyone had hash, etc. etc.

Thanks for your service.

And the rest of the story was great, too!

Old JAG.

Believeable, well written and compelling, with a husband experiencing the anguish of betrayal and the full gamut of emotional turmoil as he tries to deal with a broken heart and a shattered future.

5*

Nobody can forget what they see with their own eyes, it will be remembered till the day you die.The bible teaches that you have to forgive but it doesn't teach that you must forget, because that's not possible. After 35 years I've fo0rgive , but I haven't forgotten, and she's no longer in my life. Many authors think that after some therapy the problem will fix the marriage, it can't erase the memory. This man is better off moving on, his suspicions will eat away at his mind and soul.

What a great story. Very good on the military details, and just as good on the rest of the story. I really enjoyed it.

Let the crucifixions commence!

No fault divorces should be OPTIONAL... but never MANDATORY. Why does our legal system enable whichever partner criminally broke the marriage contract? Not allowing prosecution for adultery is enabling the criminal who cheated by letting them off the hook and not having their crime be ON THE RECORD.

So far, this is a truly great story but I have noticed a few errors.

Here's one....

Pg. 3 chptr. 1 you wrote: ((( the first number matched Dan Burris's number

I drove to the Burris address and parked a few houses down.

A well dressed man got out who fit the description of Dan Harris (HARRIS??) and walked into the house. ))) ... A glaring error that a read through by the author and a casual proof reader should have picked up on.

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Ho ho ho

This is a great story after one chapter. I hate these cheating bitches like Lisa, and hate even more the Dans of the world. How long did she think she could get away with cheating? I hope he destroys both of them.

Two pages of intro was to much, but it promises more towards the end. Hopefully the promise is fulfilled

Kinda by the numbers tbh.

Feel as if I'm a friend of Alan's and Lisa's so I await the sad end that is on the horizon.

Oh yes, I will be reading chapter 2.

It's standard LW exposition. She is cheating followed by 2 pages of bullshit backstory that serves no purpose other than word count. The rating system on here is a joke.

Did we really need all the rubbish intro, that in itself made it a one star. The rest could be most Living Wife stories on lit. Hopefully it will get better

AngelRider and Helen have pointed out the obvious flaws in this tale.... Well written actually, but loaded with irrelevant clutter. 2*

I applaud the author for the solid story he is trying to deliver, even so there are some of the usual bias found mostly when a husband writes about his cheating wife. Hope it improves with later parts.

Is it any wonder the good writers up and disappear from the site! In any story you need to have the build up of characters and set the stage, how it is done is just as important as the cuck, btb, reconciliation or what ever other ending is desired. it does not deserve a 5 but to balance some inequity that's my vote when really its only a 3.6.

3 stars - just the 'same old - same old' BTB story.

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So, I'm curious, is girls' night something that women, specifically married women, in America actually do? Or is this some anachronism from decades and decades ago, because so many of the literotica writers seem to be 60+?

I just find it astounding that any writer would think that a reader would buy the premise of a wife going out to dance or club every week without her husband and he would just allow it? It's just too hard to really believe.

I mean getting together with the girls occasionally for dinner, sure, but a clubbing, coming home very late, etc? Fuck no.

It's just such an unbelievable plot device it always takes me out of the story.

He's a moron. I know nobody that would say, "Yes, honey go out and dance the night away every week with a whole slew of different me."

Who cares!!

The two go out on Friday. But not together. Happy hour! Hopefully you enjoyed and friends with players!! Don't dance take dance lessons. I remember Disco and a lot of guys dancing were not very good.

You chose now take the consequences

Quit reading when went to happy hour with the duche bags.

Money tight and driving when buzzed.

The two influenced him to think of strange. Started hoping wife would get a whole lot of strange and then give him AIDS

Might just be me of course, but I really thought that this should be re-written as a 750 word story, which would still leave plenty of room for some emphatic repetition, -but without putting the majority of your audience to sleep! It's not a bad story, but it was only the other readers' snoring that kept me awake through it!

Otherwise it showed some promise, Please don't patronize your readers, a great many may find your endless repetitions irksome and boring, -lose their attention and you've lost them, readers can be fickle!

Remember the old Marketing cliché: "KISS-KISS" - it is a cliché for a very good reason!

Don't be downhearted though, -you've got a good writing style, just keep it punchy, -pithy and punchy!

Do NOT over-tell, if you feel compelled to write more, do it where it is needed. Remember Lit IS a WORLDWIDE website, not a Mid-west-USA intranet! Most folks on the dark side of the ocean understand about hurt, heartache and cheating, but are totally oblivious to your U.S.-Centric parochial mid-west cowboy cultural, administrative, institutional, linguistic and judicial references that mean diddly-squat to `us exotic aliens' from the 95% of the World that is NOT contained in that disassociate union of states!

Good Luck!

No!!!

Another stupid story.

Hangs with shit heads and gets what he deserves!!!!

Why do idiot MCs go out for Boy's night and feel surprised when wife goes out and screws around. Make any effort to do things together?

Dance and do something you like the next week But together. I saw More people who could not dance very well dancing during the 60s,70s,and 80s than the ones who could dance well. BUT they danced together and had fun. No empathy for idiots who don't grow up and still have boys night out

Reading the comments i sometimes wonder where these people get their brains from duh its fiction ment to entertain. Good start lets see where it goes ?

Wouldn't the husband be worried when the wife goes out habitually and then keeps coming back later and later? Would be just as much a concern if there was a gender swap.

I bit long winded at the start. But it got into stride in the middle. His thought process is legit, makes it natural. He never had trust issues, he got some now.

Why write a very good story and not finish it?

Oh god this has wimp "I love Lisa and forgive her" shit all over it!

Did they even have Femdom agitprop in the Seventies? Damn straight, they did. Women’s Lib began in the Sixties. They’ve been working on this a long time.

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I was hoping for him to get cuckolded.

Hangs with sleeze guys and happy hour instead of going out with wife.

Know a lot of guys don't dance worth shit. They still go dancing. Good people don't give a shit how bad you dance as long as you're all having fun. Been through jitterbug, disco etc and some good at others no But have fun and don't give a shit what I look like

5 big stars! Great Writing, Great Story. Very good job of describing the total destruction that a cheating wife has on her spouse and family. Her entire secret life was a knife in the back of her husband. He was destroyed, she killed their marriage with her secret life. Destroyed her husband who love only her. Good effort! Buster2U

Took longer to fill in the early years than seemed to be worth the time but was very accurate about the time period. A tour in Germany in those days was interesting and since the DM to USD rate was s good and the cost of living was low back then a lot of lower ranked enlisted could enjoy a 18 month European vacation.

needs man end. Soon?

OK story but the Viet Nam War ENDED in 1975 and the draft ended in January of 1973.

Is she going to talk her way out of it? Has hubby got a backbone? Will bullshit win the day? Is it BTB or RAAC?

So many questions but the writing is good enough to stick with it.

Great opening. To the earlier Anonymous comment this was inspired by stories from that period. Sent me back to my arrival at Lackland AFB, and AF BMTS. Arrive late at night and pile off the bus to see a short guy in a Smokey the Bear hat standing on barracks steps who starts yelling. "My name is Sergeant Kurtz and the first word out of your mouth will be SIR or I'll knock your fuckin' head against the wall". My first thought was: I want to go home to my mommie. Can't wait to read the next chapter.

I can see where there might be one more chapter, but two more, that seems like stretching it a bit. Hopefully it won't be a waste of time reading the next chapters. This one had a lot of back story, maybe a little more than needed, but not too bad.