All Comments on 'Discoveries of a Young Man Pt. 03'

Premise still good.

But sex too abrupt. Again. Still.

See comments from chapter 2.

You could use an ecitor/proofreader. You wrote: "...Did Mel lust lick me?" You meant JUST, not LUST.

Four stars for the third time.

Building to a wonderful climax takes skill. You have this. Anons don't write and just criticize. Keep writing. Cheers.

***Thanks for the read.

Thanks for the kind words, raraewriter!

The story was among the hottest and best on here! WELL DONE! Very real and could easily have happened to me or someone else. YES. Do more please.

Nice one Looking forward to where it goes

Absolutely loved it!!! Can’t wait for more…

if you are going to make him a sub....I am out......maybe others will be into it...not me. would have given a 5 but not for a male sub. hopefully the next chapter gets rid of that. Equals or nothing. Will hold off rating until I see where you go.

HOT !!!!!

Loved him being a sub !!

Loved Mel "forcing" herself on him.... would love to be in his place...

You just had to spoil it by him licking her arse

And just when things where looking good

He's a sub

Disappointing

OMG that was Hot . Such a great chapter . I Loved it . College kid takes care of a woman that is staved for attention and he needs the experience . Well Done . Can't wait to read more

Sub or no Sub love the way you write. 5 stars.