by dgowre
I like how you tell stories with detail yet you don't have too much. This story was one of those.
I've enjoyed your others. This one....not so much. This is not how two women would speak to each other.
Agree that the dialogue isn't realistic, and there was no mention of these women discovering and commenting on the way they smell and taste. Did appreciate the inclusion of their breathing into each other, which I do with my closest lez lovers.