All Comments on 'Disposable Hero Ch. 01 Pt. 06'

I enjoyed reading more of your story. Thank you for sharing it with us.

Looking forward to more

I congratulate you for your imagination. The plot is five stars. The development of the story is magnificent. I'd like the installments a little bit longer, but nothing to worry about.

Having said that, your writting is awful, I can hardly understand what you are trying to say. Have you tried to read it, at least once, before posting it? If you cannot find an editor, try to proofread it yourself. I know it is not the best solution, but I'm convinced it'll work for you.

One last thing: Keep writing, please.

Why did Henri kiss Belar at the end, or allow her to kiss him? She openly ridicules him and he kisses her...why? At the beginning of the second page, Henri makes this speech about being unbreakable. However at the end, Henri witnesses Belar ridiculing him, then kisses her, knowing that Zilvra despises her. This doesn't sound like a guy who is unbreakable.... If Henri is trying to get Zilvra to trust him more, why would he kiss Belar?

It's a really good story. I hope to see more development in Henri's character soon.

Thanks for posting!

Henri didn't kiss Belar, she kissed him for two reasons; one to screw with her sister and the second because she wanted to.