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She cheated and never really was Mom!!!

Now she wants in their Life!

And wimp is arguing with kids on her behalf. What a role model for grandkids!!!

Hate bad to Carry around. Indifference is best

Nice one, good plot and crafted well

@Dylan1, BOTH kids weren't placed with the grandparents, only Jennifer, due to the pending emancipation petition.

It seems to me that the inheritance became a marital asset before the hearing, and that the judge did the MC a terrible disservice by declaring the marriage annulled.

The only good kind of cuck stories. Very nice 5 stars

Legal ongoings are dumb and not how things would work in a fair country but the story was good and the ending satisfying. 4 out of 5

Okay I really enjoyed the story but things bugged me about it. The thing is, fixing them would not have made story worse. May would have little impact.

1. Why would a judge rule that he had no parental rights so instead grant one child to be in the custody of the not-grandparents? Had to be his parents since hers died.

2. Would the dad really have no rights? DNA doesn't change what's on the birth certificate. I guess they could petition that separately but with the teenage children and the legal father against it ... wouldn't it be tough?

3. If he wasn't the father, couldn't he sue the bio dad for child support if he was stripped of his legal rights?

4. If they were married when she got the trust shouldn't that be part of the asset division if there's no prenup? If so the judge screwed him making it an annulment.

5. Send like she went to an awful lot of trouble to screw him when she had 10M in the bank. Why? The kids are pissed at her, which seems to bother her so why not be nice to try to send halfway decent to the children?

There's more but you get the idea.... I think all of this could be integrated and not damage your plot devices to advance the story... And the distraction cause by three issues would be gone while the story could remain fundamentally the same.

Still a really fun read even with the bullshit about all whores being in California.

Interesting concept for a story. I was thinking the author went with the annulment, in order to void the inheritance. But at the end of the day, the ex wife got everything, even a redress of the asset split. I really enjoyed this authors other story about the baseball player. But as much as that one left you fulfilled, this one leaves you empty. 3 stars.

Now to point out a few things why you were actually mostly correct there is a few things you're were wrong about 1 the guy would actually have more standing then you tried to make people think he would more than likely the birth certificate of the kids would have the ex husband of the story listed as the father which in the laws eyes makes him the dad adding to the fact he is the 1 that raised them there whole life also plays a part as well as what the kids had to say 2 the judge anlued the marriage by law the trust could not be given due to the fact its like the marriage took place so in fact she would have had to pay it all back 3 once the judge ruled how everything would be split that was done with it wouldn't be over turned by another judge cause there would have been no evidence shown the judge played favorites so another judge would have not heard the case 4 the kids would have standing due to them being the kids as the money automatically would have went to them if something would have happened to the mother after she was awarded the trust depending upon the state the ex could have sued her for fraudulent acts against the state by way of there marriage and he could have won which means she would have had pay him a certain amount of money lost her trust fund and she would have went to prison that last part depends upon the state the rest of it is federal

To AllNigher you're right on a few things DNA doesn't change the birth certificate which automatically makes him there legal dad and even if a judge would have stripped him of that right which is very unlikely especially after what the children had to say while he couldn't sue for child support exactly he could sue the birth farther to be reimbursed for everything he spent on the kids and get it he also could have sued the wife for fraudulent actions that would have been a tougher order depending upon the state as far as all the whores being in California well apparently the writer has never been to new york other than that there is whores everywhere there is a few other things that wouldn't have went the way he said it did you are correct they were still married when she got her trust however no that wouldn't have been part of the marriage assets due to the fact the divorce was filled before she received it so it would have stood separately as fucked as it sounds the annulment was the correct way to go through another judge overturning how the asset was split wouldn't have happened it would have never made it in front of another judge

3 stars - not much to like about this story or most of the characters.

WHERE ARE THE TAGS??????

4 stars on the writing & story telling but not so much for Amber & Jimmy, or for the appeals court. The question I have is who's name's on the birth certificate? If it's the "husband's", wouldn't he have rights to the children, especially Todd? I'm also confused why the appeals court gave the wife a much larger percent of everything, as she's clearly in the wrong.

Then there's Amanda being made to live with her grandparents at least until 18. My understanding is that at 17, she's old enough to live with whom she wants to- in this case, her "father".

Lastly, during the meeting with Amber, who wanted her "ex" to talk to Amanda, after all that happened, the only answer for her is a "Fuck you! You're reaping what you sowed". Why he even said, whether he meant it or not, that he'd speak to his daughter is beyond me.

Like I wrote, the story gets 4 stars, but Amber & the courts get 2. Then, of course, we should be rating on the writing. Bob

If Justin wanted revenge why did not go after a claim against the Birth Certificate. In most State it is a five jail sentence and 10000 dollar fine. Both Jimmy and Amber would be in jail.

Perhaps a good twist would have been letting the sisters know that the marriage had been annulled? That way, if they were greedy enough, they could have petitioned the court to invalidate the "never wife's" trust and split it between the two of them. That would have been a great revenge against the wife!

And another thing...could the MC have sued Jimmy for back child support? Plus. if the MC's name was on each child's birth certificate, could he have sued the wife for fraud?

Pretty good but it felt abbreviated. Tough to nail the endings on these types of stories.

The original trust would have had a contingency for what happened to the money in the event of one or more of the beneficiaries not fulfilling the conditions. The beneficiary of that contingency would have had 10 million reasons to contest it.

Also 'marriage' is a very strict legal concept, simply living with someone does not qualify and 'common law' means diddly squat.

What Amber did was an act of fraud In order to benefit from a will/trust. That's a criminal act, not a civil one.

The MC would have been able to claim CS off of the AP which is a surprising amount of money.

Also, going from the story, as they were still 'married', so she was able to claim the trust, the MC would have had a claim on that money. It was money that came into the marriage, just as lottery winnings would be counted, and it is money that could only have been claimed due to the marriage.

The father as specified on the birth certificate has legal standing and therefore has rights. The kids would have stayed with the MC, especially as they're both old enough to have had their wishes taken into consideration.

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The story makes no sense, Amber would have been free to divorce the MC and marry Jimmy as soon as her parents died, that's only five years into the marriage. So why didn't she? What was the benefit from waiting? Especially as the younger the kids were when introduced to their real father the more likely they'd be to accept him.

If I were Jimmy I'd be wondering why she wasted 12 years having regular sex etc with someone she claims not to like, let alone love.

If she stayed with the MC just because of their lifestyle and money, she must have known for practically her whole marriage that she'd be supporting Jimmy once they got married.

I have to say that this is one of the worst dna based caught my cheating wife stories because it's just so full of holes.

Someone has never been to Texas or Florida, you can't take a step in either state without tripping over a whore. I'd also include Nevada, but almost everyone knows that Nevade is practically empty aside from a couple of mega brothels called Reno and Las Vegas.

Great story! Thank you. 5 stars

somewhere east of Omaha

Great story but one hell of a fucked up word we live in. 5 BIG ASS FUCKING HUGE FLAMING NOVA STARS!

It's an okay story, definitely nowhere near my favorite you've written. I feel like the ending was way too rushed but also after everything this guy went through to have everyone throwing ultimatums like his dad threatening to take his kids away over the panic attack or whatever? Like yeah me and Pops would be scrapping. His new wife threatening to "find someone else" if he didn't do what she wanted, Jennifer threatening to not come to Christmas if her mom was there, like understandable underneath it all but the wording makes it aggravating.

More or less what RanDog025 said.

I accept you said it was your story and you admitted you knew nothing about the law, but ffs you could have tried to be consistent.

If the never husband was barred by dint of dna from looking after the kids so would the never grandparents.

The court case was absurd. The idea of an appeal coming back with a 40/60% split is questionable at best. It would be based upon two people never married, so a clear case of simple accountancy and not the kind of accommodations and leaway you'd expect in a divorce.

That the ex is now considerably wealthier would also play a negative roll, especially considering how the fraud played out.

Honestly though, if the terms of the trust were not met and it could be shown that there was a conspiracy to fraudulently access the funds she was not entitled to... the terms of the trust itself would layout what was to happen to the funds in the event of the terms not being met, so it would be those beneficiaries that would make any claim. If no beneficiaries were mentioned which would be insane, it'd actually be the state.

Also, the second she gave up Todd, which she wouldn't have been allowed to do on the same grounds that barred the daughter from living with the MC, she would have lost the rights to the house as she wouldn't be the primary care giver.

There was no call for punishment for paternity fraud, or claims for the years of child support backpayments due from the AP. But also a 60% repayment from the wife for his input into the cost of the children. There is also the case for ongoing CS payments till the kids are out of education, and demands for college fees etc.

OK, as the daughter was emancipated no ongoing claims would be allowed, but definately the backdated ones.

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The world is big, many different jurisdictions, so it's fine to make shit up. But you absolutely have to be consistent.

You might not like the law, and think it's unfair from your subjective position, but it has logic and consistency to it. It's not some random arbitary thing that judges get to decide on.

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Which leads on to a bigger question. Why would the never wife give a flying toss about chump change and a poor person's house when she's got 10million sitting in a bank waiting for her. Why would she even care or waste her time?

I read a study that said that 30% of all children born in a marriage in the U.S., the husband was not the biological father. In other words, they were the product of an affair by the wife. So very plausible story line.

But I have to say that the new Wifes declaration that if he didn't marry her, she would go find another? Really? That would have me running for the hills. When someone says that it's like telling you they're settling for you, don't love you and you're easily replaceable, in their mind. Yeah, no thank you.

A fair few tropes and too many loose ends in this one, didn't like it at all.

Just kind of a depressing story. No real justice in the telling. Amber lost access to the daughter she never bothered to raise, and eventually may or may not have split with Jimmy, but there was no remorse, no repercussions, nothing. She didn't even end up having to pay as much as the judge declared in the annulment.

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On the whole, it was completely unsatisfying. 2*

One of things that the judge could have done but didn't. Was have Amber and Jimmy reimburse her former husband for raising her children.

The main character couldn't tell people Jenny and Todd were not his kids, "Because of what it would do to the kids"? What would it have done to the kids? They already knew the main character wasn't their father. What else would happen to the two kids if everyone else knew? Would friends and family have enclosed them in love and support? Might they have found strength in the safe, loving support of friends and family.

I can't decide if StoneyWebb is stupid enough to believe that weird statement or if he merely decided to make his main character sound clueless and stupid by saying something so destructive to the the kids' well being. Those two kids were left dangling in the wind by their Dad's pathetic attempt to make himself sound like a noble hero to the readers. Except this reader thought the man's decision not to tell the truth about his kids' parentage made him sound like a self-righteousness, stuck up prig.

Annulment=no marriage=no alimony or maintenance. In some states, property is divided based on income. In other words, the higher paid person gets more of the assets since none of that money ever belonged to the other person. Also, no judge can ever force a teenager to stay in a house against their will. How you say? Todd takes a frying pan and smashed it into his mother's face. He would be out of that house and with his Dad immediately. Just saying. If there's a will, there's a way.

The second half of this story is plain stupid.