by DenverYo
Everyone is a critic, especially if you don't satisfy their particular fetish or desire. I think the story is great, I wouldn't change a thing. Well done !
FABULOUS. Yes, a little light on the sexual details, but still a great read. Your plot reminds me on another Literotica story - "The Bareback Club" by DenverYo. The pregnancy risk heightens the sexual tension and pleasure for the parties involved.
People actually want to have details of the hot sex here - first what, and then what, and as much detail as possible. Some writers of porn have said they write the story and then go back later to develop the details of each session.
Really loved this story. Funny how wife was teaching hubby that preg risk sex is risky. I loved it. My favorite kind of story. Thank You. More please!
You gloss over the sex so much it might as well not happen.
You also made the wife come off as a psycho bitch. If she'd actually used the condoms, and possibly eventually escalated to not using them, that would have worked a lot better.
Good idea, bad execution.