by Fugue123
This story is going along wonderfully and I'm enjoying it a great deal. Good job!
Short chapters? yes or no? sometimes shorter chapters are better because if it were more than five pages I long with others would not read it and miss out on a good story.
The best solution for "cheap little thrills in these little 2 page windup's" (if the story is good) is to wait until the story is complete and only then read it.
There is no panic about having to read a story when it is posted.
There is no shortage of great "complete" stories here on the Lit !
Love how the son is slowing seducing his mother with satanic dollar bills lol! Can't wait to see the entire story! Please don't take too long!
Started interesting , but it ended up not being as good as it seemed it was going
why can't this story be 10 pages long. just give us the full story ? i'm sure if you did this would be 4.5+ story. 10 pages would give it a better climax at the end instead of the cheap little thrills in these little 2 page windup's. 3/5
Seems you have put more effort into this chapter. It really shows. Please keep it up.
It rare that a story plot does not include elements of others but your stands out as one of those. Excellent please continue.
What a great story line, a very good idea, well written. The story is developing slowly which is good for me, the only criticism for me is that I would love it if each chapter was that bit longer.
keep on writing!
Better and better... I am REALLY enjoying this. You definitely have some mad writing skills. Loved the description of her mind having a "glitter explosion" and thn reassembling herself bit by bit. Perfectly captured her rapture. Cannot waitto see how he spends the remaining dollars. Well done! 5 Stars.