All Comments on 'Dominated into a Real Life Fantasy'

It was easy to imagine myself as Ashley. Hooray for Jimmy! :D

Good premise.

But altogether too mechanical. Too automatic. Too rushed.

Needed a lot of teasing of his cock and his balls.

Needed her forcing him to describe what he wanted to do to/with her body. And what he'd imagined/fantasized about her doing to/with him.

Needed her forcing him to tell her what kind of porn he watched. And what he liked about it.

Needed her determining his sexual experiernce. Was he a virgin? If so, how far had he gotten with a girl/woman? If not, how many times had he had sex. Straight vanilla? When was the last time?

Did he like the woman being in charge?

Three stars.

I was enjoying this story that started off in past tense but on the last page you changed to present tense and back again.

Before continuing with a story read it to where you got to so at least you get the flow and the tense right.