by morenowagain
Thank you for sharing a clear and obvious talent with us - this was a delight to read.
Real intense. Great potential. The best parts were where it slowed down. The big jumps across years were a little jarring. More coming (but not cuming) ahead I hope.
I don't believe you're a woman. I enjoyed the second half of this more than the beginning. Some changes to make--No high heels, the man's eyes should be brown and his hair should be black, she should keep her pubic hair, (hairless women can't dominate men, not physically possible) and she should be made more likable somehow. Maybe make her less of a typical New York City acting woman (all they care about is fashion and money and superficial junk). Maybe I don't like her because she'll listen to a man talk about sex with his exes, or maybe it's because she's rich enough to be able to afford to go to Columbia (there's a difference between getting in, and being able to afford it). I went to my State university because it was paid for.
For those who enjoyed Part I of "Domination:" Part II should be appearing soon.
Part II has been posted: http://www.literotica.com/s/domination-ch-02-1?page=2
Enjoy!