All Comments on 'Don't Look Like a Seal Pt. 02'

Normally the longer stories don’t do much character building but you are doing an excellent job of giving each character their on unique voice.

I can’t wait to see the rest of their journey.

eom

Thanks for keeping the story going. Can’t wait until the next installment.

Love the crossover hints from New Girl

Great story looking for the next chapter

Enjoying all your stories but looking fwd to return of NG

Love your style of writing, I'd love be able to write like you, Please don't keep us hanging too long on the next chapter!! Not a cliff hanger but definitely an attention getter....the kind I enjoy

Loving this new story; looking forward to the next installment. Just reread New Girl while waiting. So good and looking forward to more of that as well. Keep up the good writing.

He asked, she stated, she shared, he remarked... all these superfluouse comments in the dialog need to be edited out. Nobody writes like this. The story is fun but your editor totally failed you, not just with the spelling mistakes. Really tedious reading. Dialog doesn't need so many variations of he/she said. We know it was said, we just read what he or she said or stated or shared! Ruining an otherwise good story, I shared.

Good story with all the banter and bad guys sneaking around and the subtitle flirting. Keep writing.

I agree... It's tedious reading... Way too much fluff... Way too much rambling dialogue that has nothing to do with advancing the plot... I don't think two pages of this has been actual plot... Way too much useless banter... As always... JMO

-jaye-

Good story but lets get some action going, enough of this lovey dovey stuff.

The constant banter is getting irritating... Absolutely nothing is happening other than the boring and dry banter...

-jaye-

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It's a good plot, has a lot of potential. But the banter is a little too much, and mostly pointless. I can understand banter between old buddies, but with everyone is a little too much, not very realistic. It's really time for the action to start. Still giving you 5 stars for the effort and the potentiality of the plot.