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darthnader19darthnader19about 1 year ago

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 1 year ago

The tense of verbs within a sentence and/or paragraph should be similar. Actually, tense continuity should be consistent until time/location change.

An interesting piece, from your essay " . . . and left her hands marked on his pale skin" Did catch my attention. This is quite irregular and missing punctuation. I think you meant 'and left her hands marks on his pair skin.'

Keep writing, you have a wonderful imagination. Sourcing a Proof Reader, or an editor, would Polish your offerings while improving your texts.

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