by The Winter Kiss
Good story, wish my girl friends or my wife was as willing to add a little spice to our sexual couplings. Good story, and do not let the ever present critics, that bring up the most mundane errors, deter you from writing another story.
You have to laugh when someone complains of
"poor writting and full of spelling errors. please doubble check your work."
and makes two spelling mistakes himself.
However, I do tend to agree that there was a lot of carelessness in the story and it should have been proof read before being submitted. It shows respect for your audience. Otherwise, not bad.
I thought it was nice short story. I kind of wish there had been a little bit more build up, there's not really any conflict. But it achieves its purpose.
I don't get the other user's comments. Its fantasy, who cares about birth control, obviously this is not supposed to be considered a real situation. And the spelling and grammer were good enough for me, its not an english paper
Maybe Bryce knocked her up? There was no mention of birth control....