All Comments on 'Double Trouble'

Nice fun. Kept my interest throughout Good progression and logic trail. Satisfying if somewhat predictable flip ending. The flow was smooth and sufficiently believable that I was able to suspend disbelief.

All in all thoroughly enjoyable read. 5 well deserved stars.

That was great. Loved the surprises as he came clean to them and introduced his daughter and niece.

2 stars - no emotions, no feelings, just dry dialog like a police report - needs a rewrite

Great time reading. I'm really glad (now - was jealous earlier) that you went on that cruise! Thank you!

Good story!

4

Kinda rushed, but I dug it.

Good fun read.

*****I love storylines like that. Now to find out who is leaking company secrets?🤔 Thanks for sharing.

I liked it, but it was very, very dry. Just going thru the motions like an old black and white PI TV show.

Scores 3/5

A really nice tale. Well done! It was nice to view from the perspective of the PI.

Good story but what about paying the piper?

It was a wonderfully told tale, well written as usual with a nice twist at the end.

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Cheers

Brilliant story and writing. I can't wait to read more of your work.

crap story

Proof read please: Using some word twice(you you) next to each other. Poor logical progression: He would have had a contract hence he would not have been stiffed by the brothers. Also, he'd not have given them their finding. Way to much alcohol consumption; judgement would have suffered, hence, non-professional. Several other PIs also had cameras working and these were never spoofed. Skip the silly ending, "Life is good." It diminishes the story line impact.

That said, rather good story. Reasonable story line progression. Interesting characters and logical and believable ending.

As usual, the critics never fail to hide behind the "Anonymous" label when posting. I liked the story line, and surprises near the end. I gave you 5 for the effort.