by PassionStJohn
I regret finishing it. Not because I liked it but because she lost everything that made her character.
Let me guess: writer is a man. This may be ur fantasy n so be it. But you have much to learn about women. We want to be loved, respected, n yes have fun. But your character has no truth by losing her true self. Sorry, just not believable.
Really hope there is a second part. This was a good read. Really enjoyed what he was able to do.
I think their story could be explored further into a second chapter. I also think their relationship is fine even though there is manipulation. This is fiction and a book of fantasy so I don’t think there is any true harm done.
This story is disturbing to say the least. And the comments even more. I cannot understand how some can find it romantic.
I think at best it's a good horror story with a ''meh'' ending. It would have made more sense if he killed her or if she killed herself. Cause the Stockholm syndrome ''happy'' ending is just what make it trully horrible and uncofortable. When you write about rape commit to it, tell all the gruesome details and how it can break someone, but just ''she missed him to much after a week and now she is deeply in love with no conflicting feelings at all'' , is the easy and lazy route.
We know nothing about Bran apart from the fact that he is a cruel assh*le, so he is boring. And Marged could be really interesting but he brainwash any bit of personnality she can have, so we just pity her.
Overall i did not enjoy this story , even if i usually like rape, cause here it's not really treated as such and so it loose any interest, that's sad because the premise is nice.
MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE MORE
Please write more. My pussy aches for more of Bran.
This story is very well written.
Bran is so, so sexy. As for Marged, well, while turning into a very sensual submissive, she remains a woman, not a doormat. A great story with even better characters!
I love the way you blended fantasy and sex.
I'm looking forward to more of your stories.
I truly enjoy this and see myself as Bran when it comes to relationships I wish my little Moon (my mate) would realize this
Classic case. Woman falls in love with kidnapper after originally fighting them. Thank you, you wrote a story that fits my fantasies perfectly.
I'm usually not really into nonhuman stories. But this one was so well done, and with such appealing and absorbing characters. Really enjoyed it and would like to have it continue a bit as their relationship matures. And, then find the mayor.
I personally enjoyed the story. What other readers are failing to grasp in the story, is that she is not just a human woman who he would have used and tortured. She's a dragon as well. By nature dragon's are supposed to be cruel and vicious. He wanted to tame her so to speak, so she could be his mate. He awakened the beast inside of her, of course she would fall in love with him! He's the only one she met, that could handle her. She was never meant to be with a human man.
I loved it's! Hope there is more to their story!?! Keep writing, I can't wait to read more of your work.
Well wriiten. I do like occasional male domination stories but this is a little extreme. I mean if you want love it cannot ever be one sided. And the falling in love part was not believable at all.kinda forced. Like as if you had to make the girl fall in love so she felt an ache inside her? Seriously?
P.S - The main guy is kind only with words.
And we all know that actions speaks louder than words.
I love the thought of love and dragons. How he tamed her and by love caused her to love him back. Hope to see more from this writer
I'll admit, it is extremely well written but I felt a bit squeamish at the casual mentions of his previous lovers and their suicides (as someone else said). There is a fine line between writing erotica about ravishment fantasies and such but I think this one went a little bit too far.
It was well written, I'll give you that. And I come to this site for the rape stories, so it's not like that offends me. But, seriously, stockholm syndrome isn't love. And the rapist, who so casually refers to how the last girl he was training to sell into slavery leapt to her death to escape him, is not a romantic hero. Painting such an abusive relationship through rose-colored glasses actually killed the sexy factor for me, and I totally would have been into it, had you just been honest about what a bastard this guy is.
I will admit that I have enjoyed the occasional rapey mindbreak or mind control story, but when a story tries to justify, rationalize or marginalize rape -- even if it's only implied or a consequence of the author not being brave enough to portray the protagonist bad guy as the amoral asshole he should have been -- I'm immediately squicked out.
This story was fantastic! I loved it. It is a classic! Thank you!
DAMMIT MAN, I'm with Joe on this on this one. T think we all know that you are aware that our mouths are watering and our hormones are raging for " THE REST OF THE STOREY". You write so well PassionStJohn, don't let us down, Please XOXO Kim
I don't understand what is the point of breaking a person's will. It just doesn't make sense to me. It was a well written story, but to take a strong female with fire and break her down like that was disappointing.
Hello PassionSaintJohn.
The other writers who wrote to you were too kind! For God's sake, I estimate that you should be able to add at least three more installments! By the way, you are the first individual whom I have ever written to. That's how delightful your story is!
Now, divorce your spouse, render your resignation from your employment, and eat sparingly, until this tale is fully complete! I'm 68, and I wish to finish this tale before I pass, which the physicians have said is less than a year!
Don't let me down! I taught high school English for 33 years and , believe me when I say that, with work, you are truly on your way to being an excellent writer! Hang in there, and this work IS real entertaining and engrossing!
Best of luck, and don't forget my advice to you!
Sincerely,
Joe.
You made a wonderful story but i kinda wish you would continue the story plot i would gladly read every one you make thank you for the good read and pls pls consider making several more chapters to this story thank you ^_____^
I've already read it multiple times and it is an amazing story. Wish there was a chapter 2 to see what becomes of them and her finding out about her dragon side. Well-written!
a good read. imho the character development was a bit hurried, but over all, i really liked it...5 stars
i love this story but it saddens me she did not find a way to get away from him at least once. He was so sure he could tame her but she had no way of fighting. i thought perhaps she would get hurt and he would have to not touch her or force himself on her but have to give her time to adjust or at least start to like him. i would absolutely love to see you write more. your talent is beautiful :) thank you for this story
The story was great! One of the best I've read in awhile! You must make more!! I would love to read what else could happen to her.
Everyone like it's so great. For him. One of the greatest feeling a sub has is the power to stop..the sub is just as powerful as the Dom. But none of this is here just a rapist Dragon getting his rocks off.....lame and sad
I love your fantastic imagination, and how you chose to let the hero win the heart of the maiden...Anyone woman would be very lucky to experience such intense physical pleasure and then love at the same time. I wish it would happen to me. I like this sort of non-force pleasure and deep attachment, deep love and caring....Yes, please write more...Thank you. NHU
Did she transform or will she stay moral...does her life span stay the same...did she meet her father. ..does set revenge on the mayor? I'm happy that she found love but it's not over....There needs to be one to this tale. A trilogy of sorts. Wishing you would continue because you just left us wanting more.
Please please please continue!!! Loved it!!! I knew she would jut because hey it's a story, but it was so good :) liked it a lot :)
I found this story very compelling, and enjoyed it very much, but like Owlet said it is slightly disturbing. I was thinking along the same lines as Owlet in regards to the addiction to pleasure and Stockholm Syndrome. Really all they did together was eat, sleep, and fuck; I didn't really buy that either loved the other, they had no opportunity to get to know each other. The story was definitely a turn on, but their relationship could use a little more development and, as others have said, a little grammatical editing wouldn't hurt. I think I would enjoy it even more if it was fleshed out into a chapter story, so the characters would have the opportunity to actually fall in love with each other. It would take more work, but judging on how much I enjoyed this story as it is I'm sure you could write a wonderful extended plot given the time and inclination.
When dozens of tumblr tier pseudofeminists complain about your story, you know you've done something right.
Was anyone really expecting a woman to be treated with kid gloves in a medieval fantasy story?
Was anyone actually surprised that there were plenty of BDSM themes in a story where the protagonist is chained up for 95 percent of its duration?
Was anyone really shocked by nipple piercings when we live in an age where teenagers stretch their earlobes with one inch tubes?
Was anyone really disgusted by mild BDSM in a story that happens to be on a site with a category dedicated to full-fledged rape scenarios?
The comment section is for constructive criticism. If you liked absolutely nothing about the story and yet were stupid enough to read it in its entirety, give it one star and go back to tumblr.
Hoping that you listen to your fans and write a sequel. This could easily be turned into a book I would be willing to purchase and read more than once
YAY!!!!!
That was INCREDIBLE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I hope there is sequel!!!!!
I think you should write a sequel to this story. I feel as if you left it open with intentions to write another chapter, but never got to it. Please write another part to this story!
I liked it but I guess for me if its a force story I like the girl to fight and refuse the whole way I hate the sappy im a female and I should give in to be happy and love and what not idk I just think its a better story ending cuz if someone is forced yhuu wouldnt go oh god now I love yhuu again great story loved the detail just not a fan of the I now love yhuu without any anger endings lol
Like previously mentioned, there were a few but very minor grammatical errors. I loved this story! Please write more.
Good story but cruel he's just using her oh well guess its a semi-happy story which is new
Though there were a few errors, nothing devastating and you've enchanted me with this story. Please do continue!
Great story! I think you could make this into several stories!!! Please!!!
I personally loved this story. I don't know why people get offended so easily though. I mean come on chill the heck out, if you don't like it don't read it. Also if you don't like stories with women as chattel, there are plenty of stories with male slaves ;)
Usually I give low star ratings to stories that are poorly written, but that is not the case with Dragon Master. I'm generally opposed to anything more than mild bondage, but this was a compelling story. Ultimately it's not my thing, but very well done.
As a fan of dragons and a love of BDSM this was a treat for me. Wish it had been more drawn out in her traning :-)
I agree totally with Owlet. ALl this female domination, rape, coersion, kidnapping and submission is getting really old really fast. I understand that's is some people's fantasies, but I'm getting more than a little annoyed that women are always the brunt of this pervy fantasies. How would the story's 'hero' like it his member had candle wax dripped on it and then mutliated with a piercing?
Thought we were evolved past using women as chattel or property.
It is not a man being cruel to a woman but a dragon taking it out on a human for all the centuries of demonization that went on in the human media against Dragons !! This is Dagonism !!
This not sexist but the script of a third world arranged marriage -- where the girl realizes in spite of the media-fueled ball-breaking , castrative animosity she had towards the male sex he's fun ,attractive , sexy &nice to be around with &duly proceeds to fall in love with Hubby !!
My feelings about your story are quite ambivalent. It is well written - technically anyway - with just the right amount of description to make the tale come alive without drifting off into purple prose territory. Also, thank you for not describing the heroine's breasts with her bra size or giving us the exact inchage of the dragon's cock.
But (and here it comes)...
The emotional responses are ... disturbing, to say the least. Another reviewer called your story sexist, but I think that's actually off the mark. I'm curious - were you deliberately trying to write a chilling story, or was that an accident? Because as beautifully crafted as it is, I find myself with a bitter taste in my mouth.
Nothing against a D/s relationship. As a sexually submissive woman I actually enjoy stories about them very much. But what you described here is an abusive relationship. I find Bran rather disturbing, especially what you wrote about his background (training sex slaves to sell without any regard towards them); and I also found his treatment of Marged very disturbing. Essentially he rapes her (yes, what he does to her is rape, even if he makes her feel pleasure), manipulates her by addicting her to said pleasure and his presence (as she's deprived of all other human contact), and calmly waits for the Stockholm Syndrome to kick in. Which it does. With a venegance.
That is not romantic. Not in any sense of the word.
The focal point of any halfway functional D/s relationship is trust. I see none of that here. Even though Bran comes to accept Marged as his "mate", he does nothing to earn said trust. And he doesn't seem to trust her either - he never gives her a choice. He doesn't respect her. What Marged wants and feels is completely irrelevant to him, and he simply brainwashes her into becoming his perfect little woman without any regard for her desires and emotional needs. There is also the question why Marged would fall in love with him at all - nothing suggests that he's a likeable person, or even fun to talk to and hang out with.
Well, this is it in a nutshell.
owlet
I love how you allow the readers to be able to apply their own imagination along with yours. You've given us a wonderful plot with details that we can add here and there on our own, such as the measurements of the lady and the lord. Excellent, please keep writing more.
It was great, I really appreciated this story. It was probably the best I read so far. I am excited to read more from you!
This is a love story. The way she fought him and the interplay, was well done. The fact she just didn't give in easily made it worthwhile. This was a well crafted story. I didn't find any editorial errors that caught my attention.
Someone made a comment about sexist, well, sex is sexist. Also, the stories on this site are of all types.
When it's time for your next story to be edited, please consider me to be your editor.
Though the last comment (by an anonymous source on 11/25/11) had a point about some things, I believe they could have phrased their critism more constructivly. You were a bit abrupt with the sexual aspect of the story. You never went into great detail about describing her (how tall/short, the color of her eyes, the shade of pink of her nipples) or in describing him. As this is a sex story, would it not be a good thing to tell us the measurments of his penis?
Otherwise, I thouroghly enjoyed this story and look forward to many more. I would be happy to edit for in order to create better "prose" (as the anonomous coward worded it).
I shall go to your page now and view other submissions (I so hope you have many more).
P.S. I found none of your story sexist. You were only writing of dom/sub subject line. But maybe you should put a warning before your stories for the squeemish if you have forced pleasure involved.
Thank you so much for the entertainment.
Him stabbing a needle through her nipples is major turn off.
The nylons and high heels are out of place in the medieval setting you started.
You coud have spent more time describing their actual sex but basically just wrote: he filled her and then fucked her hard... What lovely prose!
You should have been trying to make her submit to love, not submit her body. This is an incredibly sexist story that's demeaning to the female mind. The dragon man was such a great concept but you ruined it.
im about to start cooing at how romantic and erotic this was. I believe this is my overall favorite story and i crave more. Being the spanking fanatic that i am, i would of loved to see a spanking scene thrown in there. Haters be damned. I found myself giggling and filled with numerous emotions while reading this.
I was very interested in this story. Not many dragon stories on this site that I have seen so far. I know most don't care for the idea of rape but I find it rather thrilling. There are a few errors in the story but other than that the story was utterly perfect. Would of loved to hear about when he took her to the forest and chased her. *Giggles* But perhaps that is for another story.
Was completely turned off by this story of rape and torture...doesn't matter whether or not it was eventually enjoyed...disgusting
The story never seemed to stop being interesting and I was hooked on reading it. When I got to the end I was disappointed that there wasn't more.
Most of romantic sex stories are written about ordinary people with strong sexual desires and perversions. I was delighted when this story took me to the fantasy world with sexual scenes. I like when my imagination works through all story, rather than just sexual intercourse. Thank you for this art piece.
Thank you for writing this. I enjoyed watching the characters grow in their roles. When you feel the time is right and you find patience to finish the destiny of the two characters. I am very interested to see where this adventure leads. I enjoyed how you have woven the demands of some BDSM into it and its piqued my interest on the subject.
I just loved the story, but there was one thing I didn't like. You really need to edit it. Some examples are, "her hard length into her" "a willing an eager participant" and "not trying to escape buy searching the skies". Other then a few errors like that, it was a great story and I hope to read more of your works.
This was a great read, beautifully written! I hope you decide to continue this story.
Very great story! Hope there will be more to come! There is so much more than can be told!
I'm also very intrigued by this. I loved it and would be thrilled to hear more.
This is the first time I have ever read a story of this genre from start to finish and I have to say I loved it! It is definately not my usual reading material but I will be reading more of Your work!! ThankYou!! (intrigued 48 yrs old UK female!!) xXx
Loved it!! Had been looking for good stories esp mythological stuff & this was just the ticket! Please, please do give us another chapter at least!
You did this wonderfully. I never thought I would find a dragon story, let alone such a good one. Continue it please? Marged and Bran deserve another chapter.
i love the story line, the character, everything, it kept me on the edge. great job
love the story line and the love, but there is nothing on his part in the love.
it is halfway good. but it feels like he is the orcastrator of her pleashure,
and one sidded sex isan't sexy to me
It made me feel like a young woman again, just being introduced to erotic stories on the web without making me feel guilty for reading it. The details of the world were fleshed out and believable... and the story makes me wish that you would turn this into a series of books.
I have always had a keen interest in the mythical and mysterious. This is fabulous work.
So great so wonderful this one is not my personal favorite to play to. The spelling doesn't bother me and the characters so wonderful. I know that this was the end but to me and everyone else its the beginning. I know that if you wrote another chapter my pussy would love you so to speak lol.
I loved this story. Bran is amazing. The power he has is very erotic. I can't wait for the next story. The only things that took away from the story were the spelling and grammar mistakes. But that is trivial compared to the talent that this story reflects. Bring on the next chapter! Your fans are waiting!
I am a personal fan of fantasy erotica and this story is so far my favorite. I love all of your work and this one is the cherry on the sundae.
Great stuff! First one of your stories I have read but looking forward to reading the others.
I liked the way the story built. The author has a good sense of what dominance and submission are really about. My only suggestion: proof read a little more carefully. Typos and spelling mistakes distract from an otherwise lovely story.
Beautiful imagery. The anticipation of the torture was exquiste and the cure for the pain and wounds inflicted was genius. Wouldn't I like to be a dragon lady too. I don't think your story needed much in the way of editing. It was well executed and a very enjoyable read. Yummy! Give us more dragon erotica please.
I loved this! It was the best story I have ever read on this site!
Thanks for the story it was wonderful, the characters where wonderful and the polt was strong...only one small ciritique, spend a ittle more time editing after you have finnished writing your masterpiece, there seem to be a few hers where there should be his.
Love it.
Like the part when Marged waited and waited to be eaten alive only that the dragon man kept looking at her. She has a fiery tongue that makes your heroine more adorably vocal instead of those other heroine that always seems to be at loss of words.