by Mr. Unsexy
To all of you considering writing stories in parts.... Have something happen in each chapter before you cliff hang to the next.
It doesn't make any difference if the story ever gets finished or not. The rating should be on what you just finished reading, not what you are looking forward to in the future. This is well written, and deserves top marks.
I love the fact that it ended so abruptly... those of us with imaginations can finish it ourselves, and anxiously wait to see if he writes the ending. I think this guy's pen name is DEFINATELY a red herring. HOT HOT HOT.
Excellent story. I disagree with the person who saw this as an unfinished story to be told in parts, and complained that this part ended too soon. That is Writing. Good for you for writing about a stupid act artistically and not just standard porn. While it might be interesting to see the next bit to this story, it ends right where it should for us to imagine.
Omg!! I got sooo wet just reading this. I was that girl..feeling all of that..mmmm.. oh..yes..Definately prime material to share with that special friend. I am anxiously waiting for the conclusion (although I did come up with one of my own)!!!
I think every guy's had this dream, when your at a party, and you wake up in the middle of the night , cock aching, and you just want to sneak to that girl....very well written!
that is my fantasy RIGHT THERE. holy god... i want to be that girl SO BAD. :[ wanna sneak in my window and feel me up? ;]
That was incredible. I loved it. Now I want to know what happens next. You know the dream has to be fresh in her mind. Was she dreaming of him or someone else? I'm ready for the sequel.
Gosh, what on earth will happen next? I can't imagine. Haven't a clue....
loved it man. so disappointed when i reached the end. hope the second part is out fast!