by Hog57
There were some mistakes but this isn’t English class. I was entertained.
@Turning502019: So it doesn't matter outside English class?
Not a bad story. Not really believable in any part, but very enjoyable. But I really would recommend seriously proofreading, or (probably) finding someone good to do that for you.
Liked the story, but the weird writing style combined with your own set of grammar and punctuation rules made it difficult to enjoy properly.