All Comments on 'Dual Heritage Ch. 05'

I’m so confused. Please fix the chapters. Seems like we’re still missing chapter 3. I can’t read 4 or 5 because there is a huge gap. Some kind of attack???

Also, an update on your profile explaining things would be a big help also. It’s something you can do without pulling chapters you’ve submitted.

Proofreading would help with continuity. Right at the end here they are talking while cleaning up, then Ria is heaping more pasta on her plate. This happens multiple times in your chapters.

Get an editor!!! Your story has potential, but you mix up things in the timeline; you jump back and repeat several paragraphs more than once.

It's fixed still a good story

There's magic in the air!