All Comments on 'Egypt, When The Walls Fell'

Incredibly well written and beautifully restrained. Looking forward to more.

I look forward to more (and neat Star Trek reference, too).

Awesome keep this series going! Hope to see pt. 2

please continue with the next part..I wish i had an older sister like you..

You don't often find a fun/interesting story on this site that's also literary. Yes, keep going!

plz, post mooorrrrreeeee!!!! i had da greatest mastubation while reading ur story. did me a lot of GGGOOODDD!!! hope dere's gonna b more intense action!!!!!1 loking 4ward 2 more!!!! :D

This was really well written; too bad it's also unfinished.

I can't believe no one has ever commented on this story! Your writing is superb. I suppose it's possibly to do with the length of it. Maybe. If you ever continued or even finished it, I hope you will consider posting it.

I very much enjoyed this first chapter of your story, and I very much hope that you will consider posting the rest of it. It's an excellent teaser thathe draws me in and makes me intensely interested in what the mutual history of these siblings that you allude to in a number of places might be. Don't leave my curiosity hanging, please!

Please continue.

While your storyline premise is good, you need a total rewrite. The third person doesn't work well and does not make for a compelling read. Please know I wanted to like your story; it isn't compelling based on the third person. I urge you to rewrite. Four stars for the storyline because I cannot give you a 3.5 (C+) - it could be a five.