All Comments on 'Eirin Ch. 06'

You are an outstanding author. Rarely do I see any stories anywhere nearly as developed in characters, plot twists, visual details etc. Nice plot twists. This is one of my favorite stories. Please continue your excellent work. Thank you for sharing this story with the world!

This is a good story, but could be improved by taking account of the legal realities regarding two points:

- it would appear that the story is set prior to 1878. At that time, a woman could not own land in her own name. Any interest in land would either held by trustees either through a marriage settlement or by her father until her marriage and he husband thereafter. The marriage settlement was invented in the 13th century to protect a wife's capital from a wastrel husband, limiting his entitlement to, at most, the income of that capital;

- a female could never become entitled to an entail in the heirs male: a male heir became entitled to the income on birth, but subject to the precise terms of the entail might never become entitled to the capital.

Loved the story. But . . . First, the statement of 5 km. The metric system originated in Revolutionary France in 1795. It was adopted in the UK in 1965. The Armed forces did not use it until NATO came along in 1948 when the alliance needed a uniform standard.

Second and even greater flaw was the isolation of both characters. As nobles, both Erin and Lord Hawthorne were creature within an elaborate ecosystem of family, economic and political relationships. Erin alone would have a nanny who would have been with her pretty much 24/7. Additionally, there probably an spinster or widowed aunt or older cousin living in the household to manage it and serve as a hostess for her father the Duke. As soon as her father died, the new Duke would have shown up that is if he was not already learning the ropes and living in the house. Additionally, there would have been men of business, estate managers and secretaries living in the house. The estate managers and secretaries would probably younger sons or otherwise related to the Upper 10,000. Then the are the political relationships. A duke was a major political, social and economic figure, a combination billionaire, senator and society leader whether he wanted to be or not.

Phillip and his scheming daughter would not have come within a country mile of the Duke as a seemingly unknown creature.

Then there is the question of transportation. The Royal Mail and its system of highly developed roads, changing stations and inns. was well established by the 1790's. A noble would have traveled 10 or 15miles and then changed horses at one of the inns. His own horses would be picked up the next day and taken on to London or returned to the estate.when

The old Duke would not have a Partner as Phillip was described. He would have had many partners in

loved it!

Thank you for the lovely read. I do adore a good historical romance. Fiesty at the beginning with so much intrege to keep me clued to the pages till the end. Great work.

The story (until Eirin gives in to marry her rapist) is fabulous, but the way Eirin's anguish, pain and continued humiliation of months changed to love for her rapist in a matter of 1.5 pages was too forced to give a not so happy ending of a rapist and victim starting a family with pregnancy - it is just out of flow and coerced ending.

Yet to find a story where the women leaves her rapist or kidnapper for good. Its unreal the kind of same endings all these stories are forced to come to, authors need to be create better and powerful endings and readers also need to appreciate such stories. Given Eirin became a wealthy, powerful, authoritative Countess, would have loved to see the ending with her leaving Lord to live her life like her parents the Duke and Countess would have imagined with head held high and managing her estates and helping others. While deciding not to marry, she could've met a nice Duke who would've loved her truly and told her that he sees no blemish in her or her past, since what the Lord did falls to his accountability not hers. They could've married with kids and become talk of the town while this Lord could've lived in misery and guilt ending up killing himself or as an acquaintance who always bore pain his heart for his folly or gotten married to some woman of his liking...whatever, his life ending would be least interesting.

Loved how Eirin's character developed to an impassive, analytical, strong woman in this and last chapter, a good outcome of all the abuse she faced post her father's death. This made the ending even more forced and hurried.

This Lord was utterly hopeless, he is one of the leads I utterly despise even in non-consent stories, reason -

1. He knew Eirin would say yes to marry him because "afterall, what else was there for her? She would never be able to marry anyone else with a title."

2. He thinks he will just say sorry one night to beg her to stay with him post sex and this will make the rape and abuse turn into love and everything sunshine.

3. Hated Maria aswell who Eirin judged well "her loyalties lie with the Lord"

4. Lord tells Maria, "I know, but I'm good for her too. She doesn't realize it yet, but she will." WTF

5. "I didn't understand why you would have turned down my marriage proposal; I have money and estates, a title and the power that goes with it." ROFL!! Brains is what he is missing.

THIS COMMENT IS FOR CHAPTERS 1-6. MY HEART WAS POUNDING, COULD NOT PUT THE LAPTOP DOWN. AWESOME STORIES WITH DETAILED CHARACTERS, SCARED ME, MADE ME CRY, AND ALSO FEEL JOY FOR THE ENDING. I READ NONCON. STORIES ALL THE TIME, THIS IS EXCELLENT.

THANK YOU!!

I love dark romances and non-con stories. I have read HUNDREDS. This is the absolute perfect story. Each character had depth, and you truly see who they are even though this was a short story and not a full length novel. You could easily turn this in to a book and it would be exceptional. I have so many wonderful things to say about this story. If you ever publish it as a novel, please let us know. I would buy it immediately.

Disgusted that these horrifically flawed abusive people where in any way made out to be good guys.

One of the best series I ever read in this site. Thank you for sharing your talent here!

...how much time Maria and Hawthorn spend wondering why Eirin won’t accept his proposal, and even lecturing her about it. Even if events previous didn’t make it clear what wretched people they were, that obliviousness surely does.

I am literally in tears over this. I was so beautifully written, and pulled at your emotions the entire time. I just stayed up until 7am reading it all! It could have gone on for 100 more pages, and I would have loved each page more than the last.

Initially, I was so upset when Eirin said she absolutely would not marry Lord Hawthorn. I couldn’t believe it, but at the same time it seemed to typical her. Her strong attitude it so admirable, but at the same time I found myself pleading with her to just fall into Lord Hawthorn the way he desperately needed her to.

I don’t remember when I last got so attached to a story, and so attached to the characters.

You truly need to be a published author!

I would read every story over and over again!

This..... Was so beautifully written.... I teared up.... The last chapter was so vivid and sweet.. I wish there was a little extra to them just travelling the town and her bonding with Maria. Maria's character was a perfect tie and mediator between the two and she was definitely necessary. i wish there was a little more that he could have done for her like... A little extra like the chess. Like say they share another specific hobby that tied in with thier past and love... Almost like if they just cuddles and read together but anyways. That's just me craving more sweetness to a story that's somehow also about non_consent. It was just perfect! Another read that I recommend for just inspiration is "taking of Lena" or Lana.... Sadly they never wrote a good ending like yours but throughout she had the same heartbreaking character love development..

Thank you for completing the story, and most importantly, for delivering such an amazing story of love with a sophisticated use of language.

Love, love, love this story. Legit made me tear up quite a few times. Love.it!

This was the most literary and wonderful read I have found on this site; there is so much trash. While I still have a hard time accepting that the brutal cretan and the gentle, luscious lover are one and the same I am willing to suspend my disbelief. Thank you so much. Please write more stories!

hey Meg1:))Though an usual unapologetic rape to deep love and tender caring story...felt like I was reading Ivan Hoe or some such classic!!Dukes and Ladies tales are often so enjoyable!!:)

felt Eirin's hurt,humiliation and body and soul agony and torment in so many paragraphs of your addictive writing!!:((:)

But two things girl.....:) one, why do you all make rape seem as forgettable as a very casual stroll on the beach,by the female victims?...Lord Hawthorn did go lots of extra miles towards your ending chapters in making it up to the innocent victim Eirin....but Eirin seems to forget her rape kinda at the batting of an eyelid toward the beginning chapters!!!!...like she might almost ask 'why make such a big deal out of my rape?!!!'huh!!!....

and towards the end of the story,why is making his girl continuously pregnant a huge demo of male love,so typically?..she is a woman for gods sakes with a tender body....not a baby making machine...and pregs are physically rather taxing!!;)in uneducated aborigine or pygmy tribes i'd understand;)but educated Lords and Ladies?!!!;)

otherwise an amazing,awesome story!! :))

I have read a TON of stories like this on lit. This one is, by far, one of the best ones here. Not only because you actually finished it, unlike so many others here, but also because it was a well thought out and emotional story. I even found myself tearing up a few times. Very good job. You should write more.

So enjoyed Eirin. Please come back or let your readers now if you are writing else where.

I truely loved it. Ty and we need more stories. Ps this is the first comment i`ve ever given. More more more...please.

Liked it, the beginning was hard to digest but the story is nicely built, and in all love stories, they end up married, with children, happily ever after.

i have loved reading this story beautifully detailed and always moving forward i shall look for more that you write xx thank you for a lovely story

i truly loved reading this series.

i guess in philip and melissas case karma can be a hard taskmaster.

have you ever read any of lisa kleypas novels? well they were like practically the same to your story... ;) if you havent try some... it will give you more ideas... just sayin

I wonder why you never write more stories. You are an amazing writer. Please do write more often. This is maybe my third time reading this story and I enjoyed it nonetheless !!:) ♥

Your story is realy good....I like it don't get me wrong, it is just that I would have liked a diferent ending....one where there is true justice...for everyone..one where Eirin get her money , her dignity an her life back...where the Lord gets to feel pain and sorrow and ends up all alone and miserable for the rest of his life because he RAPED HER!!! and reduce her to a whore!! I would have loved fot her to spid on his face and shoved any angement ring up his ass, and tell him that she hope to God she wasn't pregnant with his child...and just to destroy him tell him that if that was the case she would drown his bastard child in a bucked of piss! Even do you would clearify that she would never do that......I just keep on hoping for female characters that are human..that can hate ...and be real. A woman cannot forgive a person that violated her and with such violence..for female characters that just like real women don't beg to come...because we are not mindless sex objects, We are beautiful, smart, caring, and there is so much more...and where there are scenes where a woman begs to come...I feel a heart ache........nice story I was just hoping a diferent ending to it.

Loved the story, thought the fact that she took him back after raping her and abusing her, taking over her life, was kind of unrealistic, but I suppose it's a romance, aren't they all. Your writing style is fabulous, you describe situations and happenings in way that expresses all the intricacies in a situation, without becoming bogged down in the details. If you haven't you need to consider writing a novel. If you are worried about publishing, with ebooks, you can self publish. I would by your book, if it was this good, even knowing I probably wouldn't like the ending. Trust, there are a lot of ebooks that aren't even free out there that suck, you actually have talent, you could make a lot of money. Even if you have to self publish, I guarantee you send your final product to a publisher, you will get signed. Idea, send this to a publisher.

when he brutally raped her? Props to you for doing a Regency Period story but the hero's consistent brutality was too much for me to consider him redeemed so quickly at the end.

great story romance and sex yup!

Had a rough start with some needed proof reading but your story played out beautifully! I teared up when he was sorry. Characters were well written! Please continue!

Meg1

You are an author, the story needs some clean up but if you filled out th characters a little more, you could sell this as a book.

Great story! If you could expand it just a little, I feel that this could be turned into a book. Great story line, interesting characters and just a great overall read. You are talented.

I was seriously gonna cry when he started his "am so sorry i hurt u, am so sorry, am so sorry" that was freaking sweet awwww....

What can i say that hasnt already been said! the last time i read it only the first three chapters had been posted! SOOOOO happy i came back after all these years to finnish it! Bravo Meg, the was spectacular

this has to be a record!i have read plenty of stories on this site and though some of them were quite good,this one is on a whole other level.the battle going on inside Eirin and her reactions to what she had to face has been described so well.it brought tears to my eyes,it was so emotional.i hope you keep on writing,whether on this site or anywhere else does not matter.best wishes!

This is an excellent story, truly worthy of a publication with a little editing. I am very impressed at the way you managed to pull in the reader and develop characters so beautifully in such a short story. Your imagery is excellent and you made the perspectives of every character seem so real and understandable. You have a real talent for writing, I hope you stick with it and I look forward to any future Literotica submissions.

Great characters, clever story and wonderful writing. Great job...I am looking forward to the next one.

By the end of the story I still did not like Hawthorns character. It is as though you tried to have the reader sympathize for him in the end but I could not. Maybe he was too cruel in the beginning? Or maybe he did not do enough in his apologies.

My favourite literotica story!

I read this story a while back and lost it in the sea of Literotica when I couldn't remember its title and none of my keyword searches turned it up. I'm so happy I found it again; it truly is amazing. I agree with the other comment, with some proofreading this story truly is publishable. Sometimes I wish the other stories on Literotica had such enthralling plots!

With a bit of proofreading for grammatical errors I feel that your work is worthy of publication. Please consider it as this particular story shows great promise. Will be reading any further submissions. (Just a bit of advise that I have found holds true: If you believe you are only worth or capable of limited things or believe you are worthy of loftier things you will achieve which ever one you CHOOSE to BELIEVE. Be careful never to say negative things such as cannot as your brain turns what you say into beliefs. Be careful about those you surround yourself as what they say can also cause you to develop negative beliefs. Learn to control your destiny by controlling what you believe.)

I have to agree with some of the other comments. Your writing is fantastic and more like a romance writer in a bookstore than the majority of the writers here. Well done on a fantastic piece of writing, and I hope you work on taking it further. Thank you for a great story!

Oh good god. This enthralling story made me cry laugh and yearn for more. Please please please write more! It was so very divine!

I have no words as to this piece of writing. It was beautiful, enthralling, magical and completely addicting. I couldn't bear to put my computer down for class or sleep until I finished this final chapter. So absolutely amazing! I would buy this if it were a book for purchase! You should most certainly have your work published! You could certainly make a good deal of money! I have read historic romances along the lines of this that were published and weren't half as amazing as this! Perfection! Complete and utter perfection! If you ever need an editor, let me know! I will gladly read and edit your work for you, for just the sheer joy of doing it! You are brilliant and I look forward to reading more from you!

I agree with another comment. You should publish your stories. You are a very talented writer. Your characters are very well developed and it is easy to get lost in the story. Well done.

Not the sort of story I expected to find on this site, was more like a paperback bodice ripper. I enjoyed all 6 chapters immensely. Thank You!

I really loved reading the series. You are a great writer!

Made me cry, thank you, please write more:), btw I loved that her brain matches mine:D

Started reading and couldn't put it down. Looking forward to more.

This was awesome! I started reading this yesterday and could not stop! You would make an amazing avon author. If you would like the site, please email me and I will forward it to you.

This was beautifully written, a wonderful storyline, and extremely more in depth and thought out than a lot of the material I have read on literotica. Please continue writing! You are very talented~

I am glad I found this after it was all posted, because I don't think I could have waited for each installment. I really enjoyed the whole story, couldn't stop reading it.

Well done.

awww that was so sweet.

Great story, well written, and totally engrossing!

I usually read this site as a guilty pleasure at night but I couldnt put this down and risked somebody noticing me read it today because even while I went into public to attend to some errands, I kept this open and read it at every chance I had. Thank you for being on eof the best authors this site's had to offer. I hope to see more from you.

This whole story was fantastic--just the perfect balance of submission and resistance from Eirin and dominance/gentleness from Lord Hawthorn. The anachronism about the sponge did bother me a little, and the storyline was a little rushed with not as much depth of emotion as it could have had, but overall it was one of my favorites. Please keep writing. :)

This was really, really good. Thanks for sharing it :)

hpd t rad mr th stris

I just wanted to let you no BEST story ive read on here thank you!

I loved the whole series I started reading it at 2pm and couldn't stop reading. I cried, laughed and smiled. Thank you for writing a great story.

I spent an evening with this story and loved it! You really told a wonderful tale. The romantic in me was crying at the end, truly the best series of stories I have read on this site. Thank you for writing this.

I spent the entire evening reading this series. You did a very good job with Eirin and her reactions, and even Lord Hawthorn's way of being two steps behind every time she reacted to something. Very believable. I'll be sure to recommend this story to my boyfriend. Kudos!

I really enjoyed this story. I do think that with some revisions it could make a great romance novel!!

I agree with the other commenter, in that rape a very touchy situation, and if you did choose to revise the story you might soften that part a bit? His actions at the beginning seemed unreasonable and made his character almost impossible to identify with. Just a thought. Also, I kept waiting for Lord Hawthorne to realize that part of why Eirin would not marry him was the fact that he treated her like a whore for three months, like a possession instead of a person. I'm not sure he really came to that understanding, even though at the end he knew he hadn't treated her properly.

Also, Maria's character confused me at times, because she seemed to understand both sides at different times, but never both at once. What she said to both Hawthorne and Eirin (first about disliking that he bought Eirin as a whore, then telling Eirin she was being horrible and ought to be nice to him because he loved her) fit well in the story, but seemed incongruous.

Overall, though, I really loved this story. I hope you seriously consider working it over and submitting it to a publisher, and I hope to see more wonderful work from you!

You should turn this into a full-fledged novell. It has everything Romance readers long for. Your writing style is superb!

I was so enthralled with the story I didn't rate any of the other chapters, but I love it, every bit of it. Romance, the whole rape/seduction thing, the historical feel. I like the way you go back and cover the other person's point-of-view of the same scene. And SEXY!!!! Well-done, I look forward to seeing more of your work!!!

Congratulations on finding a beautiful ending to a story with such a sad starting point. I am truly impressed.

I wouldn't forgive Lord Hawthorn, though. There is no justification for rape, in any situation, for any reason. Nor any way that it could be forgivable.

today. You write with a passion that is absolutely riveting. I was impressed with the fire and the life you gave your characters. I hope to read more from you soon.

I was drawn in by the story and found that i couldnt stop reading. Your writing is engaging and the story telling was so rich. Having said that, i find that i have issues with the "happy ending". i found myself very angry at the "sweet" ending where the characters admit that they are "made for each other" and are in love. sometimes a story doesnt need a cliche ending to make the story great. I find it hard to believe that once the heroine has the opportunity to find her own strength she instead fully realizes her own version of stockholm syndrome. So the Lord had a difficult childhood and had been wronged, i dont think it should excuse his urge to torture and rape. i guess i dont understand.

u shld do the author contest for harlequin or something. u have a wonderful talent and shld profit from it!

This is an excellent piece of work, u r talented indeed

this was so good i wanted more if thats sounds strange

please keep writing u have great talents

I couldn't stop reading this story from beginning to end! I was entirely engrossed. You created an extraordinary piece of work for a first time writer. I hope to read more stories from you in the future.

This is one of the most touching stories I have read on this site, your writing is perfect I shed tears for Erin and growled at Philip amd Melissa actions and how they treated Erin,

I was happy the ending was so perfect proves that love and trust conqueres all

Keep up the good work well Done

i was glued to the story and u have an amazing writing style. definately one of my fav's

Wow. This was so much more than what I ever expected from this site. I read every installment of this piece in one sitting, purely for enjoyment of the story. Your characters are multi-dimensional and rich, and the plot was intruiging and sensual. Fantastic job, please keep writing!

I was glued to this story to its end. Fabulous....I'm not a reader, I only started reading the stories here for the sex. I soon found out with stories like this that I enjoy reading period. This one really touched my heart and I sure hope you continue with your gift to write. I experienced so many emotions through this story I had not been in touch with. It helped me understand so much about myself and my stern ways with my family. I too need to come to realize my love for them. Thank you for the gift.

i couldn't stop from reading it.It was so good. I even cried.

I just read through this series all at once. Your writing style is wonderful, eloquent and beautiful. The character development and background was perfect. Even the ending, with the pain of what Philip and his daughter did. I'm sure that you are an amazing person in real life, it shows in your writing. I would love to meet you. If you would like someone to proofread or help in any way with your stories, let me know, I'm more than willing to help.

What more could be said! This was the perfect ending to a perfect love story.

I lovedddddd this story at first I thought it was going to be a story of a girl tht is abused constantly but it turned into an amazing love story! I think you should write novels

For a first time submission, you have done a wonderful job. Cant wait to read more masterpiece from you. THANK YOU!

i love this story. its my favorite andive read it twice. keep up the great work!

Thanks for sharing this truly enjoyable and engaging story. It reminded me of the days when I would read romance novels, and your story brought me both laughter and tears.

Really, really good job, meg. I certainly hope that you keep right on writing.

:)

K

meg. dis was a story made of utter passion. it iz a masterpiece fit 2 b called a workk of art. itz perfection a undescribable one. nd i gotta hand it 2 u. itz been one of da bezt stories ive eva read. i woud luv 2 read more nd hope u will continue 2 fascinate us [readerz] with ur magnificent writing. (sincerelyy, love)

I havent read a really good romance in a very long time. Thanks so much for the awesome story. You are a wonderful writer and I just hope we see more out of you. AWESOME!!

good stuff

This was a fantastic story! I come here to read sex stories but I couldn't help but get drawn in by this one's romance and read the entire thing! Great story, great plot, great detail!

Constructively...I feel the switching between his and her viewpoints in the earlier installments was slightly confusing and did break the mood a bit. Perhaps seperate sections, one from his veiw one from hers? Also there were a couple gramatical errors/typos that made me have to read a sentence twice.

Please--keep writing! This was set apart from other submissions by it's great plot and I'm about to hurry off to find your other ones!

Loved this story. It was well written and kept me up late as I just couldn't stop once I had started. Can't wait to see what else you have written and hope you will be publishing more soon!

I wished you could've made this into a book... It was so touching that I cried as I followed through the story... let me know if you had published, even if it is an ebook... It is relatively easy to publish in ebook format! I can assure you the story is much, much, much better than most of the ebooks or printed books I had...

I started your stories just a few days ago, and after reading just the first part was frustrated that I didn't have time to finish reading right away. But each night I would go to the site so I could read more before I was interrupted once again. So, tonight I finally finished the story and loved it. I actually cared about the characters, and that, in my mind, is the sign of a true writer. Everything was neatly tied up and it has given me encouragement that I should submit my own writings. Not nearly as good as yours, but I am learning.

Loved the whole story. It is well written and you definately become attached to the charicters. You did well! I am glad that it ends with a happily ever after, I love those kinds! The only suggestion is that I would have liked for him to be refered to as Christopher from the time that she decided to give him a chance. Calling him by his title, even after they are married (not her calling him, but the story reffering to him that way), seems still very distant. As if they are not one, and there is still something being held back. Calling him by his given name is more intimate, and therefore would be a perfict crown to their eventual union.

There is my two cents. Hope that you keep writing, you are on my favorite list!

I found your story last night and couldn't stop reading. I absolutely love it. It's...so touching. I'm a big fan of all "Cinderella" type stories, and yours will probably be my favourite from now on.

was disappointed with this one. good story, but man! I skiped several paragraphs without missing anything. it lacked all the hotness the others had, big time! the philiup n melissa part was entirely too big.... you could have wrapped it up in a few paragraphs... did like the story as a whole. but the final story was anticlimatic for me. I was bored by the time it got down to the sex. what happened to the passion???

I found your story last night, right before I fell asleep. The very first thing I did this morning was to finish the story. Wow! Please post again. And if you are published, make us aware - I will buy your book.

Well done, this really tore at my heart.

An excellent story that was very well crafted. As good a bodice ripper as I have ever read.

I hope to read more of your work and I also hope you get published in your own right. You are a fantastic talent. Absolutely Fantastic!

I enjoyed every moment of this story. Keep writing.

a great future to you. thank you.

You are very talented author and Eirin was a utterly enjoyable story. I look forward to your next cast of characters and their adventures. Thank you.

Great story! It has everything I like in my romance fiction. Thanks so much for sharing it! =D Awesome work!