All Comments on 'Eleanor’s Creamy Awakening Ch. 01'

Hot af

I really like how you’ve fleshed out the scene, and a great level of detail— you set the scene without going overboard.

I can’t say for certain, but I suspect that the only reason that people didn’t score this higher is the length. I’ve noticed that tends to happen quite a bit, particularly when the story ends in the middle of the sexy times.

I can understand the reason for doing so, as it lets people’s imagination fill in what else happens, as everyone has different kinks, but you can also finish the romp, and make a comment that they’re resting up for round two or end it after they’re just finished catching their breath and are starting round two, rather than ending it when they’re changing positions

(Although the vagueness can also come across as ‘I just gave up on how to end this story’, so you have to be careful.)

I don’t know if anyone has done any analysis to confirm a correlation between shorter stories and lower ratings, and I hate to give hard numbers when you want to a story to end at a natural breaking point, but so your writing gets the higher ratings that it deserves, you might want to aim for closer to 3k words

I would love more description of Eleanor's face, eyes, lips, hair, skin tone and texture, body.