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AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago
Pretty good, but need more characterization

Each of the characters have their own personality, but they're not very well developed. We were told that Ella's parents don't care for her, and their behavior proves that, but other than that, they are mysteries. I'd suggest adding some physical description of their behavior, for example, keep glancing at their watch, or pushing hair away from their eyes. Some added traits that make each character more 3-D and well-rounded. Other than that, it's an intriguing story and I am interested in finding out more.

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SouthernPassion53SouthernPassion53over 3 years ago

Good story. Looking forward to reading more.

StrixalucoStrixalucoabout 2 years ago

It doesn't make sense. Why would they have being blaming Ella, when they KNEW she had a wolf originally?

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