All Comments on 'Ellen's Story'

Very good story, but the punctuation on the speaking parts was poor. Keep writing this is the vein of stories I most enjoy.

May I please show you the correct way to punctuate dialog? Every time you had dialog it was incorrect.

For example you wrote:

"Get in the car and I'll follow you home he said, and drive slow!" the correct punctuation is:

"Get in the car and I'll follow you home," he said, "and drive slow!"