All Comments on 'Emerald City'

i dunno if it is me, but the constant flashback and flash forward left me dizzy. this technique has its purpose, but i believe you overdid it.

and you might consider making it a loving wives tale, since you spent as much time on that as on the mature woman.

Maybe a little too much flowery prose, but I liked it and I’m no writer.

Thanks for the story.

I didn't expect to be good, I mean really good like for it's story content.

The husband lost it for a little bit after finding his whore of a wife fucking around, but finally put that behind him with the assistance of two beautiful older women. A great story with a great ending.

I found the reading to be a bit tedious however. I have not read any of your other works so I don't know if this is always your style or not. I can only say, if it is, lighten up.

Thank you for your effort.

Charleybear

Enjoyed this intellectual writing. The author must be midwestern as I am familiar with all of his adages.

I think these two sex fiends will solve his lackanooki problem and get him caught up in one night.

Ur really good with putting a story together and transporting a reader to your world, emotions and longings.

This was a cute story.

I appreciate sublime humor, subtle plotlines, and oblique cultural references. I will give OP a few from the third category, but his attempt at humor fell apart quicker than a cardboard wristwatch. The problem was shoving too much imagery and overly-clever commentary into every sentence. It sounded like Pachelbel's Nightmare played on the bagpipes at 5x speed. This writing was trying so desperately to achieve too many objectives that it failed miserably. Ipecac STAT.