All Comments on 'Emily and Jo Ch. 01'

Your premise for the story is solid. However, your spelling and punctuation are very poor. This distracts from the story you are trying to tell.

I would highly recommend having someone edit your stories prior to publication. Hopefully it will help.

Good luck.

Nice story; home you lived it.

This is about as bad as it gets here.

"They did not see me. Who I'm I well I am their American lit professor Julia Pills. I came to their dorm room to help them with there studying they asked me to stop by. I watched them locked to each other's pussy they did not see me. So I just watched. It was actually quite erotica."

WHAT ABSOLUTE GARBAGE.

A moderator should remove this - it was obviously written by someone that is under age.

I will admit that I was unwilling to finish reading this story due to the sheer technical ineptitude with which it was written. From the first paragraph, the short, choppy sentences, poor punctuation, and spelling errors made it a chore. Halfway through the fifth, I was done. Anyone who writes this badly has to be aware of it. The fact that the author was too lazy to use an editor is both glaring and unforgivable.