All Comments on 'Emma Ch. 01'

The writing in itself is OK.

However, this is a site for erotica and I do think stories need to contain more than the mere facts that there exists both boys and girls and that underneath our clothes we are naked. There also needs to be some kind of interaction between the boys and girls, but in this installment the whole point seems to be that there was no (reciprocal) interaction - with one question mark left hanging in the air in the last sentence.

I guess this must be the most minimalistic erotica ever written.

Well, you indicate that there are more chapters to come and things may pick up. However, if you want readers to follow you to the next part of the story you ought to at least convay more of erotic mindset than what you did now.

In short: Chapter 1 was (much) too short!

Easily, the biggest load of garbage I’ve seen on Literotica

Everything so realistic. Loved "or was I disappointed."

Happens to so many. Loved " or was I disappointed. "

Interesting start but not much story to really comment on as yet. Will watch to see how it develops.

W T H . Not even a story. Barely a concept. At this length of chapters there be no action till chapter 5.

Writing about a nearly naked teen girl making a trip from the bathroom to her bedroom is not what most people would call an erotic story.

Here I see some character development and some buildup to what could be an interesting story, but that's it. Develop a complete story, then post.

“Presents” or “Presence”

Looking forward to the great discovery. Keep it coming.

Not bear feet; unless you have claws.