by TexasFarmBoy
In the first chapter the new woman was said to be a blond , and a few paragraphs later she came into his office and had dark hair . Petty I know but it was still a good read.
I lost interest when Allen said ‘I should tell you about Jerry and I and it will take a while’.
Somewhere in theatre I have heard the phrase used to describe the presentation as, it is a comedy tonight. That phrase fits this story to a "T".
I have to say, this story was well-written, but that was a looong way to go for that ending. The story itself, at least for me, was too slow to the point that I almost quit it about half way through. And when the end finally came it was almost anticlimactic.
As I said though, it was written very well.
to see the schematic for this family design,
there are so many variables and
so many different controls.
I don't get people saying this is not a Romance. It is, it just has a twist in it's tail. There are no rules that a romance can't happen between three people. Maybe Novels would be a better fit for it, category wise, it is long enough.
Either way, it is well written, with good characterization and fluency, and a good story line. Well done.
Though well written, i expect a romantic story in the Romance section! I was really hoping up until the unexpected bite mark and continued reading proved you planned a group sex story all along. Literotica please, move this into a different category. One star for the author and Lit to share for this disappointment.
can you say double standard when it involves three people?
yes, it was very romantic, but in a poly sort of way.
even the Tags don't know how to categorize this fun romp. lol
TxFB, statistically speaking you have engineered the perfect story for your market share. Your writing style is ship-shape & Bristol fashion.
A ménage à trois becomes le ménage à quadrilatère.
With children would that be ménagerie?
Again you do what you do best. Write a beautiful story that makes me wanting more. But why o why won't you please finish 'New Beginnings: Bob and Jolynn'. It's been 2 years we've been waiting for chapter 2.
What a fun step away from the real world! Those of us who have had a workplace fantasy (or, in some cases, a reality) can really relate to the story development. Thanks for another outstanding effort.