All Comments on 'Enslaved by Marilyn Ch. 07'

You need to work on dialogue and figure out a believable way of people talking to each other.

At times I wish that there was more detail but I really have enjoyed everything so far. It has come together nicely and I can't wait to see where all it goes.

Thank you for sharing it.

Then explain how he suddenly remembered that he had both pride and self respect. He stood up and beat Mrs Clarke to a pulp then went looking for Marilyn. She too felt his wraith and ended up in the hospital. Neither woman saw or spoke to him ever again. End to stupidity