All Comments on 'Erasing Julie Ch. 03'

Kind of fun going through this sequence of stories set in the American Northwest A lot of similar themes throughout, the cheated husband, the hook up with an older woman the kind of fun yet outlandish turn of events in most of these, especially this one here with the reincarnation. A shame the baby she was carrying was only there as her final disrespect to Gus, too difficult to write into this somehow. Was this child also a reincarnation and of who and of course these two idiots fucked that all up.

Anyway just a thought, I know all these are old and no ones looking here, sometimes i comment just to organize my own thoughts about a story. But it does lean towards a different LW sub-genre here. LW Afterlife! Think about it. I actually haven't read one of these afterkife stories that work for me (Even Janes Diary ending witht he afterlife sucked the ,,,,, "life" out of that epic. The onoy one that worked so far was the one where two people dying of COIVD int he same hospital were int he midst of a divorce when they got sick. That was pretty heavy. anyway...if you are around come back! :-)

What a crock. A deathbed apology is just a load of meaningless shit. She dies lying about her pregnancy to manipulate and guilt her children. Then after death she torments her husband to make her afterlife better. Can this woman not be evil for one second? She has the karma of a demon and will come back as a snail.

Forgveness is for the forgiver not the Forgiven. I thought the device of the karmic ghost was sending that message. But the device becomes a vengeful demon by returning with the poor man’s grandchild.

The wife’s behavior is demonic. Instead of leaving her husband, she cheats in the most greavious way.

WTF???

You launched yourself right straight into Goober Land with this part of your story.

because anything less than 100% leaves scars to to invite memories, TK U MLJ LV NV

I looked ahead to the comments for part 3, just to check if this ended in a nauseating RaaC.

After the warnings given, I stopped reading this chapter at the point where Gus defaced her tombstone and pissed on Julie's grave.

The End.

And that was one of the best BtB stories I've ever read!

The selfish whore dies in agony, having lost everything in her life, not even able to beg forgiveness from the man she so cruelly betrayed. Gus gets 100% of their assets and can now spend the rest of his life a wealthy man... sleeping with beautiful women half his age.

You had a great story going right up until that Mexico crap and then the accident and ending. Such a shame I really enjoyed the first part. Not sure what you were going for with all that. Went from a five to a two.

good till it got weighed down by deus ex machina

Katmai

Your story was extremely well written, your characters were well portrayed and had suffiicient depth to make a reader respond to them. That being said I have to voice my concern that you did not allow the husband to retain justification of what almost every other reader would have concluded that his wish to erase Julie from his life completely was totally justiified. Just because she "wised up" on death's door and with her pregancy, was not sufficient effort at least in my view that provided a satisfying resolution to her relationship with her betrayed husband. Now karma apparently operated as far as Gus was concerned, but what about karma surrounding Julie's wilful betrayal of him. I guess for me it came across that Gus would be the poor sap that would have to "do the right thing" karmic wise re forgiveness. You see, as a reader I don't buy that one-sided crap for one God damned minute. Gus was the innocent victim in this entire debacle...yet somehow he must shoulder the blame and responsibility for cleaning up the karmic mess??!! You spent so much of the story content showing your readers just how self-entitled and egocentric she was in getting her own needs satisfied. Now at the end point we are supposed to believe that Julie's shit will follow Gus for the remainder of his life? Sorry, Katmai but after an excellent first two chapters this last one descended into supernatural absurdity, which tended to devalue Gus's very real and justified feelings of bretrayal and disrespect. And apart from being dead, Julie gets the karmic free pass from the grave! Sorry but I can't buy into that woo-woo bs.

... until the last few paragraphs. So, is he going to ruin lives by hating his granddaughter?

Well, chapter three was just utter shit. The whole guilting Gus to forgive and release his filthy slut wife is pathetic.

Good story, but it all went south in Mexico. That broke the story and it never recovered. Still gave you the five it deserved. Hope you write another story someday. Randi.

"Shelly was well aware of how rare a man of Gus's caliber was." Or NOT! In addition to the Karmic garbage and such, a hateful vindictive person, who rejoiced in another human being's death and desecrated their grave, is one detestable subhuman being! A person like that could never claim a high moral ground under any religious or social pretext, except, maybe, in a parallel universe of other horrible human beings like himself!

Oh, fuck this. You took a decent story that could have ended realistically and you completely boned it. You made the protagonist a disgusting, spiteful piece of shit, you inserted a supernatural element that was unwarranted and didn't make any sense, and you ended this pile of crap with a massive whimper.

I've never been so angry at an author. What an embarrassment.

Thanks Powersworder.

2 1/2 good chapters before you fucked it up! 2*

Agree with other commenters. It was a great start, but the drug cartel seemed oddly out of place, and the ghost and karma angle drove the story into a ditch.

loved every page, great ending, sorry this is anonymous P.G.uk

This was a well written story, but, the storyline in the last chapter where he was held in a blackmail hell from a ghost who basically said, forgive me and move on or I will haunt you into an early grave and then basically be your groundhog day for eternity, this really ruined the story as it punished him for something this wife did to him and his marriage. The the overtop scene was where he was holding his first granddaughter whose middle name was his cheating slut dead wife first name and then the "Hello Gus", this scene turned the story into some kind of crazy Voodoo crap that I wonder, "What the fuck was the author trying to say" that because he chose to move on by releasing all the hate he was now going to be haunted through eternity through the granddaughter until he forgave her what she did. This twist in the storyline was so convoluted and left totally unresolved and ruined the story for me. It should have just ended by BTB and him riding off into sunset with Shelly. 5 stars for the writing by -5 for where the storyline ended up. The ending was truly a disappointment.

"He was never supposed to see those!" - So, of COURSE she didn't delete them.

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I don't mind him not giving a fuck about Julie dying, but his kids are losing their mother, he should be there for them.

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I was all set to praise the non-RAAC killing her off, then this lost me with the supernatural ending. The haunting should at least have ended at the wedding when he "released."

Too bad; for the BTB crowd (which really should be everyone in this story; Julie was an awful person) the first two chapters are just abt perfect. But this entire last chapter (well, except for pissing on Julie's grave) is an epic fail. 1*

The ending of this story is an example of Forgiveness Shaming and Blaming. When individuals, families or groups send the message that forgiveness is the end goal and something someone should or must do, it can often be detrimental and further emotionally damaging to people in pain. Forcing forgiveness on someone who's been serious hurt and damaged by someone else can make them feel like they're being victimized all over again.

You have a right to feel your feelings. All of them. You have a right to not forgive someone or something that’s hurt you. Whatever you feel about that right now is okay. Your healing process is your own and you don’t have to be anywhere other than where you are. You are not responsible for making anyone else feel comfortable by feeling something other than what you feel. You get to have your experience.

More Edgar Allan Poe than Loving Wives that must really confuse the hell out of the BTB brigade. Wife is a selfish, manipulative bitch who is well and truly burnt and then the even viler, vindictive husband is haunted by her ghost. I feel sorry for the kids and the poor deluded woman who married the prick. But I like the way this author thinks.

LA

1 star because of the bullshit forgiveness blackmail. There's no forgiveness for a cheater ever. It ruined the entire story.

Dun dun dunnnnn

Kids should have erased Gus from their lives when he refused to see Julie on her deathbed

The first two parts were great. Part three started well but then this ghost nonsense appeared and killed the story dead. He was divorcing his wife for her infidelities. She got killed. It should have ended there, or even gone into a little bit of what happened to everyone - her lover enjoying being used as a cum dump in gaol, the children seeing what infidelity causes and being good spouses, Gus moving on and having a productive happy life. Julie should be dead and stay that way. End of her. Enough of her.

Shame, just like Monty this author seems to always go one bridge (story) too far.

Liked the first two but the last one was garbage

A great story destroyed by an author's overreach. A 1

I loved the story. The ending was a bit... weird, but unlike most LW storied, the protagonist won 100% - he didn't lose money in divorce, he didn't lose kids or their affection because "mommy needs you", and he got a new better woman in trade. No idea why people didn't like this part.

As far as the ghost - if you don't like it, just accept the therapist's recommendation. Consider it a trick his mind is playing on him.

Well this author certainly knows how to torpedo his own story. Silliness.

I probably have a minority opinion here but I thought turning the LW story into a ghost story was very inventive and I thoroughly enjoyed it. Fact or fantasy it doesn't really matter does it? Chalk one up for the BTB crowd. 5/5 for me.

Thanks for the Ghost End 👍

A fantastic story, the end included. Gus and Julie needed those last encounters, Gus especially. His hatred of Julie would have manifested itself in poor health mentally and physically eventually.

5/5

Lovely story.

Great end.

Wonder why this author stopped writing.

The whole ghost thing didn’t work for me. Others seem to enjoy it, but it added nothing and derailed the story for at least this reader.

The whole ghost thing didn’t work for me. Others seem to enjoy it, but it added nothing and derailed the story for at least this reader.

Unlike some others, I was enjoying the story. Even the ghost thing. The abrupt ending spoiled the story. Endings like that make me feel I wasted my time reading the story. I rated the first two installments highly. The last not so much.

Got too weird for me in this last chapter.

Spoiled a good story.

When it got to the supernatural and ghosts I lost a lot of interest. Up to then it was a good story.

Perhaps a rewrite for the ending?

Okay...I didn't understand some parts of this trilogy. Especially regarding Julie

It was very clear, over and over in the first two parts, that she didn't actually love Gus. She was "fond of" him and their life was comfortable. But she didn't love him or even find him sexually attractive

With that being said, what was with the melodramatic bullshit in this last part? All the crocodile tears and declarations of love? Was she still deluding herself somehow, or simply trying to both prevent herself from looking worse than she already did and somehow salvage her comfortable lifestyle?

I wasn't a fan of Julie's "ghost" popping up over and over either, though I'd rather imagine that was Gus' guilt for not showing up at her deathbed than a literal manifestation of Julie's spirit. She certainly had no right to be haunting him, if the latter was true, given her hideous behaviour

What did redeem the story for me (though I can't say I didn't yell "HA!" when Julie died and Gus didn't show up) was Gus finally making peace with himself. He was probably haunted by the notion that to be a good person means to forgive, even if it's undeserved. That's NOT always the fucking case, and Julie was an example. He stood up, told the world what a horrible person Julie was, that he'd never forgive her, but he was done wasting his own time drowning in her memories

That brought this story up from a mediocre 3 to a 4 for me. The trilogy did have flaws regardless, not least of which was my bugbear of Julie's 180 switch in personality, but the ending was satisfying enough....The lack of that final star came in part from that last paragraph, too. NOT THAT SHIT AGAIN!

I admit I have dug myself into some deep holes while writing a story. I only hope to stay out of the wormhole you dove into and only got out of by invocation of ghost to resolve a bad marriage

Great story until the end. The ghost part would have been OK if she and Gus had gotten closure with his public release and she had moved on. Having her show up again at his son's baby's birth put what was until then a good story right over into Bride of Chucky territory. This piece should be in horror, not LW Great job on the first 2 chapters, but I really think you should rewrite the ending.

Great story until the end. Gus really needed to forgive his wife and move on with Shelly

That ending didn't suck, it just brought home that 'forgivness is divine'.

Your story touched something deep and dark in me. Something that ate any light near it. Something I think I will be seeing before I am ready to. It's not the lies that eat you after the divorce is years behind you, it's the hate. Unless you release that hate, your hate for someone else will become self-loathing and self-hatred. It is unnatural to loathe and hate yourself. You keep that person close, some small part of them that remained with you. You have to forgive whatever they did to you, whether its real or imagined. Get rid of them totally, or be willing to have them take up residence in our mind and dreams. This revelation was far easier to realize and put down that to do. I hate my first wife, she took my sons and poisoned them against me. I'm so fucking glad she's dead, turned into paste in an accident.

I wanted to drive a road compacter, a steam roller over her body, turn her into the paste they buried. My sons died hating me, thanks to her. They both we Army Rangers, they both died in different parts of the Sandbox. They hated me because she told them that I put in for postings they could not go to. For 6 years and for 4 years they had her hate, when I lost my leg they never reached out or contacted me. When I was discharged I waited half a day for SOMEONE to pick me up. That never happened. I left the VA hospital in my own wheelchair and under my own steam.

Everything I sent them was returned, they backed over whatever I sent them. Now my family is dead, even though I remarried there were no children. One son died in Iraq, the other in Afghanistan. I hate that bitch, and I see her, smirking at me. With my hate for her I give her power in my life and over me. However, I cannot forgive her.

Thoroughly enjoyed this story until the last few paragraphs when you went off the deep end and it became one of those stories that should be relegated to the file for wasted hours of reading!! Didn’t even mind too much with your throwing in a ghost but it really went off the rails when a spooky baby was brought out!! Thought this was a the LW category not horror!!!

Great story but if you think about it the wife's quick death made the whole story pointless.

Loved the ending.

The story would be better without the Mexican rapists.