All Comments on 'Erotic Sex Club Encounter'

Simone8, if you are going to continue, please get an editor. There were so many errors and sentences with words missed out that it was difficult to read. Plus, if you use slang such as "sick" in a different usage to normal, don't over-do it.

The English language has plenty of more correct words to use that better describes what your characture is feeling without you inventing your own.

However, for a first effort, it shows promise. Good luck and have fun.

I want to read more! Love these characters, super hot and sexy.

'nuff said. had me hard from 1st page to last. definitely going to share this one with my wife, being watched and carried away by the lust of it is her biggest turn on