All Comments on 'Evening Surprise'

Seems like a personal outcry rather than an erotic coupling. Reads like a sad cuckold.

Very unpleseant suprise for readers.

not finshed in my opinion. No reconciliation though.

With no spine, how do you go in your every day work. Or maybe:

Where is your carrer? Surely someone like you (intellectually challenged) shouldn't be on his own?

Making fun of disabled people is just not cool!

PS: I wish I can give you negative score!

Throw the bitch out.

You should consider writing it.

So far you haven't.

What on earth is this pile of rubbish it’s not even erotic neither who would want to write stories about how he’s wife is being screwed I would of kicked them out and divorce her not say how much she is enjoying it then do nothing what kind of writer puts rubbish out like this please it’s not even in the correct category nothing erotic coupling about it if you’re going to try and write something like this go check out other people stuff cause this was an embarrassment of a story not even worth a star read other people stories and ask there advice otherwise just stop writing these embarrassing stories just can’t believe there’s some people who liked it I don’t know what they even saw in this embarrassing story but hey so please go get advice from other writers

you asked - well I certainly wasn't.

Why submit this as a finished piece? Why submit it as anything? You know we will hate her and be confused for his situation. I think he should kick her and her boyfriend out as soon as possible and go find someone who will respect him and treat him good. At one point he says "I'm getting home a little earlier than usual, which is always fine as far as my wife's concerned," then "my wife probably replaced with this gentleman a long time ago." Obviously, he's not reading the situation correctly for a long time. He and she need to see a counselor to get things figured out.

It's different, short and to the point, I can't believe his wife didn't know the problem. My only gripes is there was no end, only a begining

My Second reading, after giving it more thought, the actions are more in keeping with a loving husband than the ones who get an hard on. Or just as bad, walk out cool as a cucumber and plan their divorce strategy like a war field General. hardly any feelings or emotion.

Agreed. No ending. He was in shock. He isn't now. If he won't divorce her then stay away from her.

Its not for me

Ok so don’t go home anymore, it’s not fucking rocket science.

This is too incomplete for me.

Then dont

Not bad. Probably how a lot of guys would react. More realistic than most.

I never get to home again because I'd be in goal charged with a double homicide ...... !!!

Not would I !

sorry story

juvenile

You have got to be kidding! What the fuck kind of story and ending is that? Good thing it was short since I didn’t waste more of my time on this trash.

A very SILLY waste of time! Don't bother with this, -you WILL regret wasting precious seconds here"

Watching paint dry might be more productive! You have been warned!

Written by an idiot adult with a juvenile mind because a young person would have more substance