All Comments on 'Eventide'

Finish this story!

This story is one of the best I’ve read on here. Honestly, the only thing I would have liked to see was him confessing he’d always been in love with her vs just sexually attracted to her. That’s where I thought it was initially going. It doesn’t really take away from anything though and would have just been a bonus to this great story

I loved this such an intense story of sibling love and lust, a young couple with rather too much time on their hands and too much of an opportunity for mischief, we've all been there but most of us too frightened to take advantage of the opportunity and each other, perhaps knowing we are living our own lives again but vicariously through the characters on these pages so well crafted by a gifted author. Well done Wanda we needed this thank you. Full marks for imagination and the skill to present it so ably demonstrated here.

Very nice. You have a gift for hot, believable dialog. Thanks for sharing this.

Not gonna lie, I thought I was reading Elysium for a bit there except with the names changed. A lot of the dialogue, even some of the specifics and euphemisms, are pretty much the same. Not that I'm complaining or anything; just wanted to point it out as some others may criticize harshly for it.

It's brutal that she was cheated on by some twit and in the worst way (cliché as hell by the way, says I love you but fucks the best friend). Honestly no wonder she's so closed off. That kind of betrayal, it leaves a deep mark, and I don't think it ever really fades. Not completely. Over 15 years since I suffered a betrayal like that and mine wasn't anywhere near as serious as that involvement, yet it still stings to this day, still confuses me, still makes me wonder why.

Then to find out about Shelley, her one-time lesbian adventure, her maybe-it-could-have-been. Oh god, the pain deepens. Again, no wonder she's so closed off. I'm surprised she's still functioning as well as she is after all that heartbreak and loss.

In the end, she finds happiness with the one person that truly loves her and won't ever hurt her; her twin, her other half. A lovely conclusion to the great build up.

My one real complaint is that your stories seem to end too soon and in a similar suggestive but open-ended manner. It would be nice to go a little bit further beyond the consummation of the build up. Just so we can see if they actually do get a future together or not. That's how I feel about it at least.

Beautiful. Beautiful people, beautiful story. I loved the simple ending.

I love your stories! Your writing is beautiful. You bring your characters to life in an amazing way. You make even this kind of stories not seem cheap or vulgar, like many others of this kind. Thank you for sharing your gift or writing erotic stories with us!

This was hot as hell.

This the very best story I've read in a long time, apart from all the others. But all the others we also written by you, onehitwanda! Well, so far I have only finished one other, Alexis, and that just pips this slightly, because there is so much originality and dry humour in the writing. But the characters here are just as believable, the dialogue just as realistic and the erotic buildup just as powerful. I've dipped into a couple of others and they've already got me hooked. Thanks to you, I've already learned why I've never had really great sex – I clearly drank too much tea and not enough wine!

I loved it. You are a gifted storyteller. A visualist. I too was there and when your finger slipped inside you so did mine, as I too have enjoyed the love of my brother…

Thank you for sharing this story

You are my favorite writer now! Your storytelling is splendid--I could see it all, feel the psychic pain of Shannon, feel the power of their consummation, and picture the healing of their souls. Absolutely beautiful! Thank you.

too similar to Eltsuim for me sometimes the same lines and conversations in the 2 stories you have a good way of writing but need to change the background from hot sister and chief brother get kinky and have sex

Sorry

Yeah I agree with the comments below it was dragging plus I’d love another chapter or two. For me this story is far from being complete. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Feels different from your previous stories which were excellent.....this was dragging....

For me the story contains a couple of stumbling blocks. Remember how Shannon describes her previous sexual encounters? Later, when asked why she isn't looking for a girlfriend, she answers something like 'because I like penetration to much'. Doesn't make sense at all. Another statement that is odd: 'I care for the person more than for the body it's housed in. This reminds me of one of several politically motivated, widely spread nonsense theories of a certain crowd. No offence, I don't jugde "alternative lifestyles" or " life choices", but I detest demagoguery. The personality ("the soul") and the body of a person are not two seperate entities, coexisting more or less independently. They are a unit and they influence each other both in direct ways as well as via reflection and feedback through social interactions. On many levels. I'm glad Onehitwanda refrained from using new age phrases in most of her other stories as far as I have read them.

The same way I'm glad of not being confronted with cliches like 'most men find lesbian tendencies extremely hot'. Even if that'd be the case, in a story about special people or people in special circumstances its not very ingenious to describe parts of their personality or their motivation by falling back on questionable generalizations. Rant modus off.

That was really hot! ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

Mfkndragon...

31c, not 31f.

And don't forget there is centimetres and metres as well as feet and inches. Imagine how some giggle when reading other's claims that they are 9 long and we read it as 9cm!

Please tell me the 31 was a mis type lmao last I checked 31 in any country is cold maybe warmer some days but still cold too cold to be in any water outside lmao

I read and read, finally finished and totally enjoyed. I went to rate but I had already rated it a 5. Why did I not remember reading, rating and adding to my favorites. Maybe that was because it was so erotic. Top 5⭐... No continuation 🤔

Very well written.

Not at all what I expected. Given the ratings of this older story I thought it would be so much more. Sadly it doesn't live up to the hype. I'll try another, maybe that will be better, part of the problem is the story is so wordy and boring.

fucking amazing!

Fabulous story! Don't suppose we'll get a sequel someday? It doesn't need one but I can never say no to more well written story progression.

Beautiful bro & SISTER LOVE STORY CULMINATED ,PAGE FIVE WITH A PROMISE FROM HER TO SLEEP NAKED FOR HIM 2 FINGER HER PUSSY or GENTLY PUSH HIS COCK IN 2 HER BALD NAKED CUNT !!

VERY VERY HOT STORY !! 🙏🇮🇳🇬🇧💞🙏🕉️❤️🌹👃👅👌👍🤟🙏

Exellent. Good story development, drama, suspense, conclusion. Superlative writing.

I've read through this multiple times. I will read it again. This one is competing for my personal favorite.

Hard to find stories with more than just carnal pleasure. Good shit man.

One of my favorite reads. I have read this story at least 3 times and love it more every time I read it. I wish you would submit more stories on this site.

This is my third time reading this story. It continues to be one of the best I've ever read anywhere! I am grateful that the author shares her talents with us. Thank You.

Nice build up. Good bro/sis story filled with love.?

Thanks for sharing.

What a beautiful story of such a special love! One of my new favorites! Keep writing!

Beautiful!

One of the best and a new favorites. This one rang all of my bells - best friend sibs that are respectful of each other, love each other deeply finally overcome taboos to share all aspects of their love. I love the slow burn build up and the deep love between twins.

I hate all of the disrespectful, non-consensual, especially non-consensual or sneaky impregnation stories on Literotica. You are the antidote, one of those few to give me a reason to keep reading. Five stars out of five. Please keep writing these sib love stories.

The writting is great.

The story ... is normal.

Can' feel funny, hot, cute.

The writting is great. About circumstance, about mind description... ...

I am hooked on your style. You are a good writer, and I would love to read a published work some day!

What I wouldn't give to feel that desired again... that wild tidal wave of untamed passion and love. Thank you for helping me to remember.

just an absolutely great story. A lot of authors on this site don't always get the conversation interplay between characters right. You have got it perfect in this story, the conversation between Shan and Olly is just so real it brings the characters to life.

Loved the story

Wow!!!!! Best Ever!!!! Awesome!!!!

Thanks

And it's reeled me in completely. I hope you find time and the inclination to entertain us with another tale.

I felt my body, and it was hers. I felt his hands on my breasts, his fingers on my clit, his heavy body pressing me down, his cock deep inside me... All this following an amazingly erotic tale that was both exhilarating and comfortable, familiar. Agree with another poster that this is literature. You set a scene, a moment in time, a perfect place... Thanks for the many orgasms. A+

-a straight male

THIS is literature. This is ART!

Delicious. I could eat three more bowls of this one.

Mmm, this is a slow burning singalong, if you take my meaning, heh. Sensuous, sexy, hot, needy, aching desire fulfilled. Scoop up my sister, buy a nice used sailboat, see the world, alone, together...mmm.... Think I'll reread the juicy parts later tonight when I'm wound up again! ;)

What a wonderful story. So delightful to read from the female perspetive.

Had me wet, drooling, and ever so ready for my climax. The intimacy was well felt.

Thank you very much for the effort. Very nice read, I really enjoyed it.

One thing though: Tirol is part of Austria. South Tirol is part of Italy.

This is important to the people living there, there had been some very blood wars in that part of the Alps.

Since most of the American people don't even know where Austria is located, just take it as an unfamiliar chance to learn sth.

Couldn't help but join in and masturbate as I pictured Olly and Shan and their sexual escapades. Plenty of lead up...teasing...foreplay...just the way I like it.

One of your best Onehit.........I especially like the fact it was written from a females perspective. I love knowing how females feel and what turns them on.

Great story, well written. Sexy.

Beautiful story , strong realistic characters , Hot steamy sex! Perfect! 10 stars if I could!

That was the most intense orgasm I've had in years. The building climax was simply amazing.

Perfect ! Thank you!

That was so provocative, some parts had me smirking, followed by a big smile oand not least but last had me so turned on it was buzzing.

Thanks for such an unequivocally one of the horniest stories i ever did read 👍🏾👍🏾

Hope to see more. 5*

The highest praise I can give is the deep desperate want for More!

J

Very good!

Thank you for amazing mental visuals!

WoW....just wow ,This story was fucking AMAZING ^_^!!!!!!!!!!!

Love how u built up the character's and kept us on our toes driving our minds crazy thinking a 100 times "When will they fuck" then I kept telling myself have patience for only the best comes after a long wait.....And I was absolutely right . .....The scene keeps repeating rapidly in my head like a live show . *_*....5 star...heck this deserves 50,000 stars ;)

I have been reading stories on this site for well over 10 years, but this is the first time I've read one of your stories. I can't recall ever having enjoyed the prose of a Literotica story as much as I enjoyed yours in this one. Beautifully written. Well paced. The relationship was believable and the characters were well developed. And very erotic, too. Bravo.

Wonderful!

Hard to continue, but please write more about siblings and twins. J.

You have given this 87 year old great grand father memories of the wonders of youth.

"Those were the years my friend, we thought they would never end"...

You are a fine writer.

..., much more!

Because you really know how to build up, slowly, steadily, and with an absolutely incredible finish.

I love your style, and would love to see a lot more of it.

A well earned 5 Stars, and another instant Favorite.

Thank you, very much.

You, my friend, have a gift. The story telling was exquisite, from the build up to the detail to the characterisation to the small teases half way through to keep the reader intrigued... This is fantastic as a story, masterfully written. I simply cannot praise you Enough for you his. 5 stars!

That's the hottest, most sensuous stories I've ever read: tt made me ache for my late wife. Thank you, thank you, thank you. More, please...

Such a nice read, and such nicely formed characters. I really do like reading pieces where I feel like I'm falling a little bit in love with the characters, and I did here. Five stars for sure.

Usually I read something that quick into the sex and what not but this... this was something else. I didn't want this to end. The build up was awesome and the story line was beautiful. You have an amazing talent for writing. I sincerely hope you write another story about Shan and olly :)

The intensity was amazing! Well done.

Very nicely done. Intelligent and erotic. I liked the slow buildup to the very explicit sex at the end. I'll think of this for the next story I write.

What a wonderful well done piece of work you have give us. Loved it and can't wait to read more of your work. Thanks a bunch

Incredibly well-written. Amazing character and relationship development, seamless story flow, delicious love scenes, and just the right touch of emotion. Well done. I'm a fan of your writing.

Great story! I loved the slow and intense build up. I could see everythimh perfectly in my minds eye. Best line of it all for me was: "I'm going to make love to you." This described the relationship and love between them perfectly. Thanx!

Have to re-read to savor the intensity and the climax. Hemmingwayish!

If I could only have a twin and be as close as they were. This story is so hot! If only I had a brother.

I had my girlfriend read this and she claimed that at the end, when the main character asks her brother to stop and he responded with a simple "no" that it is just like what I do in the situation.

Furthermore I will now look for a part 2 on your profile, I haven't looked yet. And I will be disappointed if there is not a second part to this story.

And the part when he says that he wouldn't have sex with her, then she starts feeling bad, his response hit this whole story to home for me.

This literally had me going all night. Best story!!!

I got so lost in the words and content of the story. Very vivid, very hot. Shall be checking out your other work. Hope for another chapter to this!

I just loved it.you have great style.keep up the good work.

I loved it. You do amazing work. Please expand on the story. I would love to see the relationship develope.9

If this author isn't aware that he/she is in the #1 spot in the hall of fame. Congrats!

A love story delightfully presented

Love all your stories. They really are emotional and vivid.

Don't get off watching two lesbos. they get off seeing two women naked to possibly fuck. IF they reject him, as for me, I will gladly leave the two to their mental illness. Do what ever knocks you out skanks.... shaved pussy??? I prefer a woman not a 12 year old. No hair in my teeth means I haven't had a real pussy...LOL!

Beautifully written. Sensuous and delicious. Thanks for sharing your wonderful talent.

It's very well written, as always, but it's basically a rehash of Elysium, with only the names, setting and point of view changed. If you want to improve, try something really different.

This is the second story of yours I've read and I am going to read all of them! Perfect and beautiful! Incest in the natural way it occurs! Again, thank you so much!

...& I can't wait for the 10th & the 11th & the 12th... & the 100th! :) Just keep 'em comin'...

~MD

As always, very well written. Shelter in an intimate relationship from sometimes uncontrollable forces outside. Keep them coming.

It is exceedingly rare that I leave feedback, but felt compelled to do so with this story. The depth and build up of this story, long and slow, makes for an engaging read, and the characters involved were brought to vivid life with real world and deeply felt relateable problems. Everything about this story felt right to me, and engaged me like very few stories ever have. Look forward to reading more from this author.

Easy to follow, but you need to put more in for the girl as it is written from her perspective. If it had been done as 3rd person POV then I would have said it was great.

So well written! It gave enough to be relatable and still wonderfully erotica. It was very eloquently drafted.

Among the very best.

Thanks for your submission!

I will now have to look into the other stuff you've posted.

Brilliant writing! Another few chapters would be most welcome.

the feels...thank you for another great story from one of literoticas best...keep writing...

Far and away the best story I have read on this site, as well as any other site of this type. I look forward to reading more.

I am amazed at your skill. Character, sentence construction, believable interactions. Always a delight to read one of your tales. Thank you for sharing! 5*

The fantastic build up, the obvious close connection of twins that are such good friends and being so close when growing up, then the long separation, the return of Olly, slowly raised the tension be tween the two who were in reality were one; the build up to the realism of becoming one physically, the completion of the natural realm of life!!!!!!!!!

Wonderful....best twin story id read....

thank you for this 5 star story.....

One of the best I've read, and I read this genre a LOT. It belongs in the Hall Of Fame now!!!!!

Thanks for sharing.

Excellent story. Definitely not too long; but then, I have a strong preference for relationships with my stories over having just a quickie :)

Dialogue, story, heat. This story has it all and is exceptionally well written. It was hot and sensitive and it's not all that easy to have both when writing. 5*

This is the best description of love/sex between twins that I never read in LIT!

The relationship of Shanon and Olly as described in crescendo until they arrives to the climax, and the way than is described is lovely, fulfill of feelings. If they no are twins, this story can be in Romance section.

Waiting more chapters of this story, I really liked.

5* for you!

I apologize for my English, is not my native language.