All Comments on 'Every Man's Fantasy'

There is no flow and a bunch of grammatical errors.

There has to be a sequel to this what with him hand cuffed to the bed. Maybe fucking Monica and all of her friends.

... someone to proof-read, correct the punctuation and grammar and generally act as an Editor!!

Go to "Literotica"; "Index"; "Volunteer Editors"!

As this story stands I'd give it 3*.

If it had been better written it could have earned more!!

The other comments say it all.

My "favorite" was 'indefinitely' instead of 'inevitably'!

Finish it! Please

I gave it a 3 because I did not like the story stopping when it had just begun. When is the rest of it?