All Comments on 'Every Schoolboy's Dream Ch. 02'
by TrampsAnThieves
- 51 Comments
Gman196912 months agoWhat a hell of an appropriate title. Really like the story line you have going. Looking forward to see what grandma has stuck in her that she is so far beamy out of shape about. The dynamic of mom and daughter is even better. Looking forward to more of this series. Thank you 5+ ⭐️
Anonymous12 months agoGrandma is probably only about sixty, he should have bent her over her kitchen table and given her the treatment she obviously needed so badly.
Anonymous12 months agoThis is great - I truly hope you get them both pregnant. Hope you write more chapters soon.
Anonymous12 months agoGreat story! I really like the idea of sister wives and hope they can make it work. I can see the love the three of them share and they appear to have fun with each other. Getting past the big GREEN monster will be the trick.
MikeOrMikey12 months agoFuck! Another great, hot, sexy and hilarious story! Please continue all the way! -Mike
Anonymous12 months agoDecent. One definite mistake, & then lost me after he returned to the house at the end.
Anonymous12 months agoGood story. Can't wait for chapter 3 and see if he does breed his gf's mom and his gf when he gets in her pants
Anonymous12 months agoWonderful series,10 stars! When Nick gets Cindy, maybe her dad will get Kasey's mom, and put a bun in her oven. Triplets would be nice!! Please keep it going, it's wonderful!!
Oldbutbold12 months agoWhat a fantastic series you have started , i only hope there is more to come very soon .
JohnSimms12 months agoThese two episodes have been great sexy fun! I'm gonna check your other series now. Thanks for sharing your efforts!
TEXASMADDOG10 months agoSorry...this thing is ALL OVER THE PLACE....
WTF...the story is hard to follow, skipping all over the place, from crazy grandmother, to Kasey is a suffering virgin, but wants to lose her virginity, but has conditions...
And, using a RUBRIC/SPREADSHEET to decide on a potential future assignation/boyfriend/husband...
Mom...gets his spunk, instead of Kasey??!!
Gave this comment...
DID NOT RATE THE STORY...I CANNOT, IN GOOD CONSCIENCE, GIVE A SCORE TO SOMETHING THAT CONFUSES ME SSSOOO MUCH...
BUT I WILL NOT GIVE A LOWER SCORE SO AS TO BRING DOWN THE RATING...BUT WOULD BE A "3" IF I DID!!
CaptainFrostBite10 months agoAbsolutely LOVE where this is going and can't wait to see where you take it!
Anonymous8 months agoNonpayment for an ordered pizza is a civil, not criminal issue. Take it to small claims court.
Anonymous8 months agoOK premise.
Sex again rushed when it happened.
No step-by-step progression.
Three stars.
Anonymous7 months agoThe "electrical engineering" segment was a nice little entremet for the action. Good one.
Anonymous6 months agoI loved it. The sense of humor you include in your writing really spices it up.
Anonymous6 months ago"I love you. I hate you. I adore you. I despise you." Ah yes, well that clears things up. Female logic is fascinating and worthy of intense research.
It's hard to get a solid read on these characters. There's something about them that seems almost, I dunno, comical. Like the dialogue makes sense but in a way it's also like, this isn't how people would speak with each other. It just feels weird. I can't quite put my finger on exactly what's off but there's definitely something iffy. Still, it's interesting and I'm curious to see how this unfolds.
Sniperking5 months agoi'll echo what most of the comments are saying. The story is all over the place. The progression isn't making sense. The story just feels very weird plot-wise. Like I said before its like reading a fever dream
MasterJohn69695 months agoTrouser schnauzer? really? seriously way to funny line, loved it, can I borrow that?
Anonymous5 months agoAside from the always-unnecessary 'get somebody pregnant' angle (why are BABIES sexy ya weirdos?), pretty solid, if far-fetched story line. Perfect title for it though, too.
Good sense of humor.
Don't listen at all to the person that cannot follow the story...that isn't a problem at all, and trust me, some rando on the interwebs, I'd be the firsts one to tell you if it had problems.
For that person that doesn't think people talk like this...some do. It's not like you have ALL of the characters talking like this, it's the protag, the girl and her mom, primarily. Other people talk more normal.
ALSO...some of the best written Tv shows and movies of all time have dialogue very similar to this, stylistically, at least.
So keep on writing, we all want to see where this goes, if your guy gets his girl.
(Don't have him knock up the mom, OR the girlfriend...they are going to college, it will make it stupid hard, and these are supposed to all be very intelligent people.)
Good luck!
WatcherNtheSly4 months agoSad that some are too slow to follow this story line I really enjoyed rereading so far. I read it before and stumbled across it and decided to give it another go. Thanks for sharing.
maddict4 months agoEdging Kasey's mom was cool, edging Kasey was hot I thought her head was going to pop or yous was
Anonymous4 months agoThe story does not make sense. There is no doubt that the boy is living his fantasy. He is having sex with the most beautiful woman he has ever seen and masterbating with her daughter who is simply a younger version of herself. The only way it gets better for him is to have full on sex with the daughter too. However, Cindy's dad exposed the elephant in the room when he told the boy to say hi to his mother. How does this kid just go off on a date and not come home for the weekend without any questions? How does he leave his car parked outside the Mill's house all night and most of the next day without the prying spying grandmother finding out? Also, the idea that the sexually experienced very horny MILF has no clue about birth control and has remained celibate after the death of her husband is laughable. The fantasy is Grand but the details of the story are terrible.
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