All Comments on 'Everyone Loves Vegas Ch. 01'

but u need an editor, he/she could make it easier to read, too many he did she dids. looking forward to read u stories after u get an editor

You need to get your ass back to pakistan or wherever you come from and stop trying to write in english. Since I have no desire to find out what Pakis do for sexual pleasure then I guess you better write Pakistan children stories, What ever you do stop fucking with the english language.

No story, no writing skill, no knowledge of grammar, no use of correct punctuation.

You were home schooled, right?

Everyone loves Las Vegas, especially the whores in these LW stories.