All Comments on 'Everything for the Career Ch. 02'

This woman is crazy. She needs psychiatric help desparately.

Boyd

Hmmmmmm!

At least the age question has been resolved. So the others who reading experience was marred by the idea that the math was off, this explantion should let them enjoy this exciting story....yeah right.

Like the Sahara, dry, boring and dusty.

For a first effort try something lighter until you gain experience and leave this type of dramas to the experts

What is lost is lost. Why do people say I will make it up to you. How can you go back and erase actions events feelings and replace them? You cant. His limit has been reached. She needs to begin a real life and grow up and hope she finds a man who will accept her mental faults. Her first action should have been to resign her job before walking out the door. Now she begins again with obcessive compulsive actions. Anyone know a good head doctor. Author was to willing to accept continued humiliation from his wife. Years of her putting him last should have been ended the first year, not now. Time for him to find a woman who knows what love is and will love him.

In todays world, too many men and woman are focusing on their career and not their "lives". The story is usually told that the man works too many hours over too many years and the wife leaves or strays. You have turned that on its head. Well done.

I'm glad to see this story continued, especially since this story has gotten more complicated than I thought. BUT I can't understand how a professional woman, a vice president at that, could make a statement that she started working at the bank when she was 14... I guess this vice president never hired an employee or dealt with human resources. Forget about being a professional, any reasonable person would know that this is just wrong, so I guess we are dealing with a heroine with deep emotional problems, ones who started when she was a child. I'm stumped. How could the parents not understand what was happening if this was truly an obssession? And if so, what happened during her childhood that made her this way? I mean why would a child feel the need to fill her life with employees and a bank instead of friends, school activities or a social life? She was 14, why didn't the parents or a concerned friend take control or notice what was happening until 15 years later. And why did Arthur wait 15 years to say something IF he had a problem with her work or feeling abandoned by his wife? Saying that he was waiting 15 years to finish what he started--is quite a criptic remark.

I know this is a twist on the wife--instead of the husband--putting the job above all else. This is not unusual, many people do this - ask the wives or husbands of doctors, policemen, firemen, executives who are climbing the corporate ladder, etc. But I guess in this case it was some kind of obssession which skewed her priorities. So I'm damn curious to see how the author develops this story because right now I am more sympathetic toward the wife than the husband. Her world has crumbled around her. She didn't see it coming. She did not understand that in her need or obssesion, she abandoned the husband which patiently waited beside her. Is it really too late?

Two chapters of rambling along without really saying anything. I've read cookbooks that were more entertaining than this. Stories are supposed to cheer you up or excite but this flies like a lead brick

Too many years of self centered behavior on her part and too many years of the husband letting it slide. This marriage would be toast. His love would be gone and she couldn't even remember hers'

is a second language for you. There are more than a few odd phrases and missing words, but the basic plot is quite good. If this were polished a little bit by an editor, it could be a commanding story.

After many stereotypical stories, this one has a touch of originality to it. I'm not up on the psychology aspects of the story as regards obsessions, but the story is interesting and ,of course, raises the question of why it took the husband so long to react and whether it is possible to reclaim the marital love of 15 years ago. Nicely written and pretty innovative. Congratulations author.

60 year old George

Not only an improvement, in general, but also fleshing out characters. For a website filled with stories by amateurs, this is about average in quality.

The story actually hits close to my life. It is so similar that I have to remember it is your story. Maybe I can see what possibilities are ahead.

<p>On one hand, I liked this story. I thought you did a <i><b>Fantastic</b></i> job of showing mental anguish, pain, and loss in this marriage. I mean, this was written well enough that I could see everything like I was sitting in the room with them, that is pretty skillful. And by the number of comments made here a number of others see it too.</p>

<p>But on the other hand, in the disclaimer you elude to sex happening in part three. And based on the way it "ended" suggest that reconcilation will play a major role in the story. That is something I'm curious how you'll handle it. <b>Most</b> of the stories spend so much time on the setup and conveying of hurt on the part of the main characters, they often don't focus on making the reconcilation belivable. And after pointing out that there were 14 years of her focusing on just <i>her</i> wants and needs, somehow I wonder if this will be balanced out as a quick week or few months worth of "I'm sorry" to make it a happy ending. I really hope not.</p>

<p>This story has started off well, but the problem I'm curious about is whether or not you've written yourself in a hole. I really like what you've done so far. But 14 years of a patterned lifestyle that you've portrayed doesn't go away in a few days, weeks, or even months. And with the husband of the main character waiting 14 years for her to change, and it not happening, I'm just curious where and how this might lead to them staying together, if they do.</p>

<p>But either way, up till now this has been a really good story</p>

-Risq

between being captivated and turned off. How many times and how many ways can she lament that she was so involved in her career that she neglected her husband? I think she (and everyone else) set a record for that. Extreme repetition of what is supposed to be a theme does not excite me all that much, so I hope you've reached your limit on that point. I will read your next part when it comes out if I don't lose interest in the mean time.

I have found the story more a study in self possession then about a marriage or job. She has shown more emotional outburst that definitely are a sign of a disturbance she has no control over. This is a woman who would need definite help in seeing her way to an even keel. I will hold off any other story comment and see if it improves in the next chapter.<P>Thank you for your effort<P>PT

and should it matter? She has a responsibility to her employer and does Arthur. I don't see anyone else blaming the husband for sacrificing his time instead of doting of his wife. Furthermore, the wife is written with the intent of being over-emotional while the husband is shown to be calm and composed. If he is truly that emotionally detached that their kiss was like concrete on marble, then the marriage is ove and she would be better off without him. As for the president of the bank...HE offered her the freaking job! She was the best trained, best equipped and best choice for the position so why would he give a flying fuck about her home life. Further more, if it was a man, noone would bat an eye at the sacrifices he would have made. No, this story has one purpose only, to illustrate why women should be subservient to men. The symbolism is clear. You can't handle women in authority so you emasculate them. That, dear author, is cowardly.

I am an employer myself and I DO "give a flying fuck" about the home life of my employees. I don't want my workers to run themself "ragged" for their projects and forgetting everything else. One does NOT live to work, one works to live!! My attitude is at least partly selfserving. I don't fancy skyhigh bills for healthcare when employees suffers a burnout. Not uncommon in my business.

Regards,

Umberto

You have given a dramatic expression to the cost of living with an obsessive person. In fact you have written a story that could easily switch genders in the primary characters and still work.

I have read and reread this story and I guess in my rereading I have found it intriguing. I hope you write Chapter 3 soon.

Thankyou for what you've done

That I waited for the final chapter to be posted befor investing time into an unfinished story.

Hey there. Anybody home!

I am enjoying the story thus far, looking for to Ch.3. Keep it coming.

I thought that Chapter 2 really provided insight into the principal characters, but I expected that Chapters 3 and 4 would be forthcoming.

Are they written? I hope so and look forward to reading them. Good luck, Bob

out without ruinibg the finish. The instructions said allow to set for two day before use. Now you have sat in tha corner for a month and still nothing. How do you plan to cure a mentally ill woman with a husband who has reached his limit in one chapter. Hey sex is great but it doesnt correct the past. The woman has told him for years she didnt love him by her actions. He has attempted to provde the support for her to chase her dream while waiting on her to fall in love with him. It never happened. They are young and old enough to find new partners to have a fulfilled life. She needs to marry a man as obsessed with his job as she is with hers. Can you imagine her having children. Doctor I can schedule the C section on Friday at 5PM. That should allow me to be at work on Monday. I have hired a wet nurse and 24/7 live in nanny to care for the dhild. My instructions to the nanny, you are totally responsible for the baby, unless it is a real medical emergency dont call me.

This could have been a great story. However, I think Chapter 2 was the ending the author had in mind.

Like what I have read so far. Is there to be a third part?

Waiting with the rest.

if there is a conclusion.

I enjoyed the story so far i was wondering if you were going to complete it.Sometimes the stories here fail to be completed and i think that is a shame.I know people move on to other things but i was just wondering if you will complete it.

Is there an author's ending to this story?

We all blame communism, but few read Karl Marx and as for Russia they used more of his name than his writings.

Can I say the same about Women's Lib? I think I can.

Let's put it this way equality should prevail but equality can only exist in a legal way as it protects everyone to decide the way his/her life is going to be, but humanly there is no such things as equality. Women have the same rights men have except that they don't read it right...

They use men as THEY THINK (or made to believe) men use them thus heading for a gender war, even worse women (some) are acting like men, they're not lesbians it's just so, they (some of them I've seen) walk like football players, talk dirty and have lost their femininity. Women's lib will implode just the same as Soviet Russia, but it'll take time.

This is about my life in the U.S. not where I'm from in Europe - different ball game -

Excellent writing for a rookie and a nicely original plot.

What I keep wondering is why the husband went from an elegant picture of a successful business man to looking like an almost bum in twelve hours. Did he on only catch the wave that day?

Ok, some of my questions were answered, but how did it go from ACB to FCB?

Is a powerful thing. Apparently Jenny didn't realize she devoted all to work and none to her husband, her love. Still interesting. We march on...

She doesn't even know the name of the bank she is committed to

Very engaging.

why did he not pull Jennifer up much earlier?

the spilt milk and sour apple syndrome, TK U MLJ LV NV

Perhaps next chapter you can tell when the name of the bank changed from

" ACB (American Corporation Bank – in short)"

to FCB?

drama sinking deeper, rapidly becoming melodrama.

What does " a year of moving around" mean? And "cabin" in Ch. 1? I thought, initially, the author must be British. But does the U.K. also use 911? So we are going to read about some sex in Ch. 3. Who with whom?

Where is the author from ? (bio says nothing)

In what country do they use the term cabin to mean what an American would refer to as an office ?

The UK uses 999 and has since 1937

AND THAT MEANS, CUCKOLD WIMP MALE CHARACTER, AND A DUMB ASS FEMINIST PLOT ,THE MAN IS TO BLAME PLOT, WITH NO EMOTIONS FROM HIM AND IT WILL BE HIM DOING NOTHING AND HER PUTTING HIM BACK WHERE BRITISH MEN LIKE TO BE, BENT OVER TAKING IT UP THE ASS FROM WOMEN BECAUSE THEY HAVE NO BALLS, EXPLAINS WHY MUSLIMS/FOREIGNERS RUN ENGLAND... CANT PISS ANYONE OFF, CANT TELL WOMEN TO FUCK OFF, AMERICAN ARE PUSHY,CANADIAN'S ARE POLITE, BRITISH ARE SERVILE.

THIS STORY SCREAMS SERVILE, MEN PISS SITTING DOWN,NEVER ANGRY,NEVER UPSET, FEELS LIKE WOMEN WROTE IT PRETENDING TO BE A MAN, LIKE ALOT OF WOMEN DO ON THIS SITE.....WITH OR WITHOUT A DICK. BUT MAYBE I AM WRONG?

Why? Because the company HIRED her to be that cut throat go getter who sacrificed EVERYTHING for them.

That was what they wanted.

Now she is visibly changing the deal. Her promotion should be toast.

The idiot using caps obviously has never met englishmen.

there is a reason so many people/countries speak english and that reason is that the average english man can be very fucking scary and dangerous and because of that they were tough enough to rule a lot of the world.

most men in sweden have a healthy respect for an englishmens ability to not be servile and kick the shit out of guys who disrespect them.

i have personally seen englishmen fight and like fuck would i ever want anything to do with that, they are fucking tough and dangerous.

just a perspective of a swede who knows a bit about them

The English Empire came about because some classes of Englishmen are dedicated thugs who can be lead into battle, or motivated to fight on their own.

Never assume that all of them are like the weaklings in the upper classes.

Inbred, and bred into weak bloodlines from other countries.

To an extent it's the English heritage that is why so many think Americans are so violent.(well, that and the Germans, oh and the Scots, the Irish.......)

Thanks for the offering.

I wish you were still writing nowdays.

Very well written. BUT, anyone this driven and obsessed to succeed would have no problem dumping their spouse.

Very well written? Uhmmm, no.

There's more histrionics in this story than a bad telenovela.

Random CAPITALIZATION. An abundance of extra question and exclamation marks??!!!! Screaming, shouting and yelling. Insanely dense characters.

At least she has a cabin at work she can retreat to.

I'm still enjoying it. Just reading, not obsessing over every mistake. Still an interesting story.

Poor BeBop3, obsessing over this story when he should be more focused on cleaning up his own crap stories.

Commenting on a story to bash the stories of another author? How immature. While I can’t get into this story, I love Bebop’s stories and look forward to reading more.

Yeah good story but WTF is a "primitive" ego? To quote the movie, "I don't think that word means what you think it means."

Sounds like her husband married a husband with a vagina. Why the hell anyone is that dedicated to their job I'll never know. If you have that much fire in your belly, start your own damn business.

Touchy subject, eh? Women in the workplace...muddling the miracle of male management into a seething cauldron of dark emotions...turning the touchstone of triumphant teamwork into a competitive nightmare of dating games, fashion shows, and hookups…providing the perfect incubator for cheating wives, sexual predators, and marital malfunction. If females were excluded from the workplace, opportunities for cheating would decline by 80%.

LWurker

Gotta agree with the Bebopper. Too many exclamation points. Just because they are on the keyboard doesn’t mean they are required. Let me try that again. Gotta agree with he Bebopper! Too many exclamation points! Just because they are on the keyboard doesn’t mean they are required!

Hmmm, does give it some punch. Useless, but definitely makes the sentence have a distracting zing. I would still suggest a parsimonious approach to use of exclamation points.

I found the author's tactic of using the first person for Jennifer’s story, then not having her explain how she could work for 18 years at 32, a bit of a cheat. She was so proud of it, she certainly would have bragged about how she started at 14 to the audience she is ostensibly speaking to, the reader. And what, is she psychotic? She doesn’t remember that at 14 she wasn’t working full time? I understand that the author was trying to make clear that she didn’t have a realistic view of her 14 year old work life when as he spoke to her boss. But come on, she isn’t obsessed, that is simply psychotic, and that conversation should’ve resulted in her termination. Yes, she should’ve said, I worked at 14, full time! Uhhh, no she doesn’t say that, she instead insists on the 18 years. So, was she denying she was working two hours a day? Did she believe she was working full time? It is a very thin premise that was presented as the bete noire of her character.

The characters in this story were like a single wire framework of people, whose speeches and motivations were hung on the characters like clothes on a scarecrow. They simply don’t sound or act as people do. They’re either complete morons or just poorly conceived and written, I suspect the latter.

Anyhow, I will continue to slog through the story, despite my increasing lack of interest, because I am a simulacrum, a bot, not an actual reader. My programming insists I state, "that bitch should be burned!" No way a real man would put up with that shit. Wait, she hasn’t fucked around yet. I expostulated prematurely. But it rubbed me the wrong way, and I came.

I do not know what to think.

I am just turned off by all of the SCREAMING!

She is so fucking stupid.

Clearly he's too patient.

What an eccentric Femdom agitprop performance!

I stopped reading once the woman called her dad "dada." Because what adult female, who is also a Vice President of a company, uses infant terms? Also, the dude acts like a chick. All like "I shouldn't have to say anything, you should already know. If you don't I can't tell you anything to explain it." Communication, fuck face.