All Comments on 'Everything that Glitters'

My only minimal complaint is when the sing-a-long led by Zane, played "I've Been Working on the Railroad". Every Texan knows the song is "The Eyes of Texas"!

An interesting plot, but so overgrown with information about rodeos and a travel log that I skipped whole pages. This doesn’t belong on Literotica. It’s not in the least bit erotic.

A very good story of redemption.

It brings in so many different thoughts on how we shod act when someone asks for forgiveness and shows a repentant heart.

You can sure tell the this author failed his geography lessons in school. Calgary where the Stapede, Canada's biggest rodeo, is held is in ALBERTA, NOT British Columbia. You might want to invest in a decent North American Atlas so you can get places in there correct location.

For the record I do not live in Calgary but have good friends and family there that would be ROTFL at another typical American if the read this story.

Anything is possible. People can learn from their mistakes. We are commanded to forgive 70 * 7 per day. However, that does not mean that you forget about the transgressions. Or even that you will reconcile with the offending party. Plus remember that God only see sin in black and white. Humans on the other hand see things in the shade of grey. Hope that helps.

I love this story. This is my second time reading the story. God's love and forgiveness is for all of us who turn to Him. Being Born Again is the greatest blessing.

I can see this story starting to go down hill from here. I believe it would be a good thing to allow her to earn back a position in her daughters life But, if he takes her back he is most definitely not an alpha! And he has no self respect. And NO she does not love him! Love = Fidelity Loyalty Honesty & Respect. Of which, she did show him any.

If you really are God-fearing, the book Hosea gives the answer to possible forgiveness and reconciliation.

Also, what was with all of the links to definitions for a bunch of common words in the lyrics to The Dance?

Can she turn her life around and be a good mother and wife again? Yes. With her ex-husband? No. With her current daughter? Maybe. Forgiveness is a good thing. Forgetting is a stupid thing.

I was going to call you out on confusing aggregate and average in explaining rodeo scoring, but it turns out that rodeo scoring was designed by somebody who'd been thrown from a few too many bucking broncos, landing on their head each time...

Once a cheater, always a cheater.

Harry, the way you mangled the last sentence of your first paragraph warns me I should just laugh and delete it, but I took long enough to read the **** on your home page and learned how carefully you read and thoughtfully adjudge the writers on here ( which also disclosed you have published a grand total of ZERO stories).

So I took the time to copy the sentence you said was about the Supreme Court and flags. It is not.

... Supreme Court be damned, there was a non-denominational prayer, followed by a moment of silence.

Reading comprehension is hard, but that pretty clearly refers to the prayer decision, not flags.

Wonder which part of Virginia you’re from? Maybe the far western edge.

To show you how pathetically stupid and ignorant is moronic author from Texas is I refer to you his citation about somebody riding around in the beginning of the rodeo with the American Flag and saying this a beam courtby damned.

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The Supreme Court has never outlawed waving the American Flag but this stupid dumb fuck right wing texts and doesn't seem to know that

Apparently the only thing that can defeat the martian slut ray is a cowboy preacher sermon about being born again.

On a sex site. I am literally pissing myself with laughter.

This story is absolutely hilarious

Well, there are whorse and then there are whores.....

This bitch gives two dollar snail trails a bad name.

Glad she stopped but she's a walking butt wart.

The Bible also states that adultery. is a legit reason for divorce. If you enable adultery, it will just repeat and additionally lower respect on both sides. Not a good way to go. This story sounds like all the myriad other where in the wife stepping out is not really her fault, it was hubby, or hormones or drugs or booze, but not really hers fault, after all, a women would not really do that unless she had another reason to blame, right?

Yes people can see the light especially if thry have been drinking a lot.

Nonsense. This level of betrayal? There's no coming back from that to a level of trust.

You can getnto a level.of forgiveness. You can co-parent to raise a child together.

But you an never trust an ex spouse like this ever again.

It's not possible. Especially if you both continue to travel the rodeo circuit. There will be times you cannot be together and the husband would never be able to sleep soundly with his previously slutty wife out there alone at the rodeo in Prescott or Cody or Durango. No way she could ever prove she didn't skank it up again for old times sake again.

Nonsense to even think she could get back together with him.

Here's the thing... I think I know what you are trying to show us

(cough - your more than obvious Bible references).

But this story, and I believe it was "betrayal", are unfortunately just completely OT stories where the woman is a dissolute and eager whore who more than willingly takes the path of adultery.... until... well, until, with an even worse twist of plot, she becomes the poor, poor victim. Unfortunately, the actual victims and those who suffer from the woman's selfishness (husband, children, friends and colleagues) are downplayed in the process.

The fact that they, the oh-so-poor woman, were seduced by oh-so-evil worldly forces makes the whole thing so implausible that it could almost be satire :-/

You can write, but in your effort to write a good absolution story, you go way overboard.

I love this story. I grieve for all those who have promised "you're my first, my last, and my only", and have broken that promise. We are all sinners, and therefore we all need and qualify for God's salvation. All it takes is sincere repentance and belief in Jesus and His saving death and resurrection. He has shed His blood to pay the price of the wages of our sin. Salvation is a free gift. Just tell Him "Lord Jesus, I believe You and I receive You and all you have done for me". It does not mean you will be perfect, but you will be saved and forgiven, free from the guilt and condemnation of your sin.

Whether in fiction or real life “goodness” comes down to character not redemption. Washed of one’s sins is a sop to the weak who get another hall pass to sin again.

So far good, not your best, however I will keep going.

By the way, Calgary Is in Alberta, not Britsh Columbia..

worth 5 stars BUT too much god shit so only a 4

Just ignore the crap comments knowing the minds from which they come. You write great stories and this is one.

Anon - I understand you objection to the religiosity, I guess, but finding religion was the reason she redeemed herself. "Found" people tend to be proudly religious, and so they were portrayed. Thanks for the feedback.

"reborn virgin"?? WTF. Religious people are always such a hoot. How in the world would anybody come up with this XD.

Mixed review: Well-written story, well-developed characters, too much detail about songs, But the religious stuff was an unwelcome distraction. It could have been toned down and would have been supportive of the story, but as told it was too self-congratulatory and lost the story a star. ****

Repentance is nice however it only works if it proves out. We'll see if she walks the walk or it's all hot air.

Definitely 5 stars

Luv it…. Whooping by belt

God is Love. Being Born Again does change a person and we need to forgive those who sincerely repent. I love this story because it tells each of us that being born again is real and all our sins are not just forgiven but forgotten. Jesus shed His blood so that we can be born again.

Thank you for writing this story. I believe that Zane and Cassie will reconcile and remarry.

Once a cheating slut...

Let that slag get her forgiveness from her savior!

Ugh, so he will forgive her because "Jesus". So disappointing.

The Stampede is in Calgary but Calgary is NOT in British Columbia which is the province further to the West. Calgary is actually in Alberta.

Gave it a 4. Liked most of it.

To Err is Human, to forgive is divine!

Why would the main character be troubled? The spoiled little monstrosity showed he true stripes and nothing's going to change that. Get away from her and keep her away from his daughter.

Never forget what a cheater has done, and they should never be forgiven for what they have done either, especially when a child is involved. The prom dance should have been a huge red flag to Zane. They were at least partially involved and she wanted something her boyfriend could not attend, but did anyways? It means that she easily lead, and only thinks of herself, and she should have been dropped permanently at that point.

She can be forgiven, she can be redeemed, she can rebuild a relationship with her daughter and Zane. Doesn't mean he has to take her back as other than the mother if his daughter. I guess what I am saying it doesn't have to be either completely out of Zane and Casey's life or a reconciliation where he married the silly bitch again. It could just be a decent relationship because of their shared past and their daughter

What do I think? I'm 70 years old and I've seen far too many examples of "Once a cheater, always a cheater!" Yet I can't help but recall one of my earliest memories, watching my mother iron clothes. She explained what she was doing and why, concluding with, "Don't ever touch this iron, it's very hot and WILL burn you." Well, it didn't really look all THAT hot. Maybe she was exaggerating a little? About 10 minutes later, when she was distracted, I decided to give it a quick fingertip test. HOLY FREAKING CATS, THAT THING WAS HOT! I've never touched an iron since then. A leopard can't change his spots, but humans CAN change - with enough of the right motivation.

I gave you 5* because of intent, which I rarely do for RAAC, but for me personally, this topic (western) was a rough read.

Very true to life. Yeah, one a cheater always a cheater is often true, but there is redemption available. The Christian faith is not only about piety, but about people who do not deserve mercy, receiving mercy. That is the gospel.

Good story and very strong on the rodeo setting and terminology. I’ll be interested to see how this story evolves and closes.

Incomplete and a rushed close. Very well developed and an interesting insight into the rodeo life.

Thanks

Anxiously looking forward to part 2. Very good and captivating story so far.

Part two is in final edits. Should go for review by tomorrow. Patience is appreciated.

Gone for 4 years plus disrespect... You can't be forgiven with a short speech about what you did and that your sorry. You have to make up for those 4 years of pain and suffering you created. I can't see how any one could do that. You can't have a reconciliation without providing that level of compensation. Maybe taking dad on a TV show telling everyone that he did to the marriage and the daughter, then shoot him in the nuts.

Great story. Hope you continue it in part 2

Great story." The Dance" was a great song for Zane to sing. More stories with a western flavor please.

Okay, I’m blaming that on word and my poor edit seeing pallete. Ha

From author's comment:

"...it employs a rather vivid palate."

Sounds interesting from a health professional's point of view, but I don't think I'm willing to stare into author's mouth to appreciate it.

I’m sorry but blatant plagiarism pisses me off. Dan Seals wrote and recorded the song “Everything That Glitters”. The song begins “Saw your picture on a poster at a cafe out in Phoenix. Guess you’re still the sweetheart of the rodeo,” and features the daughter, “Little Casey.”

You owe Dan Seals royalties. Even the names and the title are the same and not a footnote or even a mention of his name.

I liked this chapter but given the author's comments about his chapter 2, I'm sure I won't like it. Cassie doesn't need to be burned. She burned herself. She should not be taken back. Give her a chance to communicate with her daughter and mother but she forfeited her relationship with her family. She gave up her family for fame. She destroyed her mother's marriage as well as her own. Even after she "was saved" she made no effort to repair the damage she caused. She continued to be the Queen of the Rodeo. She's toxic.

If you wanted to write a reconciliation story, she should have done much less for a shorter time. One affair on a trip with a proper confession. She was gone for four years. She regrets what she did but it is not clear that she understands how badly she hurt others.

I hope in chapter two she has a fatal accident at the rodeo and gets forgiveness after a true admission of her understanding of what she has done before she dies. I don't think that's going to happen. I gave this chapter a 4 and anticipate the next will get a 2 or less. She is not wife material. She went to orgies with her father rather than come home. Jesus.

reasonable man

reasonable man

Teedeedub, I see you have been through sexual harassment training! (Really lol!)

stops being about him and her, everything to do with the daughter. if ur not willing to do anything for ur child dont have them. as for this story has no end so its useless to me. rofl god's gift to mankind huh would ask what god but probably shouldnt get into that here

Wwoody. Perhaps. But it is against company policy.

Preaching, not story telling. This could have been much better, and gotten the point across if you had focused on the story.

FORGIVENESS IS GOD'S GIFT TO MANKIND

My last foray into the “government schools” issue, but, to clarify, I served more than forty years in public schools, which are controlled by locally elected boards of trustees. Three children graduated from such schools: one is a successful businessman with a business degree; one has a master’s and a highly successful career in instructional technology; the other has MIS and Law degrees and works in cyber security for a multi-billion dollar company. Five grandchildren are products of public schools: two are 3.85+ university students, one is an honor grad on a full scholarship at another university, and the other two are top 10% in their respective schools.

In my experience, some who become teachers are poorly equipped emotionally and mentally for the rigors of dealing with teenagers, much less parents whose concern is not how well their children are learning. Teaching is a calling, not a fallback, and classroom management is where the rubber meets the road. Likewise, if you think whether a kid can find the Great Lakes on a map in this digital age is a final measure of learning, you are the one stuck in 1960.

If your locally controlled schools can be left-leaning in this mandate-laden age in which legislators and a SBOE composed of reactionaries dictate curriculum and assessment, you are either so far right that everything seems left, or you need to elect a new board of trustees.

Anyone I know will attest that I’m far from out of touch with public education ca 2020. In fact, I serve as a consultant to several districts of distinction.

Okay, back to the story - part two is coming. Fair warning: it will satisfy few whose vision is limited to black and white, because it employs a rather vivid palate.

Disappointed. Your story, your choice -- pick a lane and floor it. Well written, compelling characters, but it needs an ending. For my money, I can't see him trusting a woman who ran out on their young daughter, no matter how much she says she's changed. Forgiveness can be a half remedy -- amicable to acknowledge her repentance, but separate to acknowledge the betrayal.

Despite the high quality of the story, the comment thread is hilarious. The Anon is correct about the proper use of pronouns. They need to match their antecedents in number. The tard Anon is right about "style guides", but I was around when feminists (male and female) got the power to make the style guides their ideological playground. I assume that the latest ignorant, woketard assaults on "style" - for example, eliminating references to women menstruating in favor of "menstruating people" - is "O'tay" with that Anon. What morons we have here. And why go after the author's injection of Christian repentance? It's a belief system that is not shared by all, but it is the majority in Texas and among the demographic in the story. I was left wondering how the author might have played it out. I wish he had gone further with his theme.

I liked a lot of the story. The end raises also interesting issues. Nevertheless,Texican knows nothing about the state of "public" or "government schools" over the last two generations. The overwhelmingly negative data match the responsible teachers' experiences, and, contrary to what he says, the schools are firmly in the hands of the left and have been for a very long time. We teachers aren't leaving because there's too much discipline in the schools or because the academic standards are too high (actually, there's NO student accountability. For example, we can't give a grade lower than 50, even if the student turns in nothing, and the literacy level of the students would be unrecognizable to Texican. Classes are chaotic, too, because of the lack of discipline. It's state wide in Texas, and the high SES suburban districts are only slightly better than the rest...but not enough to matter. The data show this across the country, but the ED special interests work hard to cover up the problems. Most parents really don't want to know how poorly their children are doing because they have become education welfare queens.). I teach in a government/public school, but we homeschool because, unlike the author, we know what's going on. In most parts of the country teachers homeschool at a higher rate than the public at large (at least until this covid thing hit and parents began to see how low the intellectual standards in the schools are.) I don't want t take anything away from Texican as a writer. On the whole he is one of the best writers here. Still, I agree with the Anon - nothing says "out of touch" like claiming that government/public schools provide a better education than independent homeschooling (This excludes government/public school at home, which in one Idaho study turned out to be the worst education option available).

Let her move on ,you cannot reconcile with this reformed whore. She screwed every Tom dick and Harry. You should move on to. There are so many good women for you. Okay if she sees her daughter but you two are over. End of story. It looks like you are going to write her back in.

Zane is a simple dumb ass. So, his wife takes a break from their marriage and finds god and he is all okay with it. Not so fast folks. Something in the water, oh wait a minute...it is Texas! Tent revival or rodeo, what is it? There are no other good faithful women in the west, or is Zane drawn to losers. Sad story.

I challenge her final statements: nobody abandoned her. She pushed them far enough, that it was too painful to think about her. Zane is a solid guy. His only concern is his daughter. Whether he believes Cassie or not, he’ll decide based on what he thinks is best for Casey. The real question, is: how much is Cassie willing to do, and for how long?

Zane is right to be troubled. He has to be prepared to ask Cassie to stay far away, the first time he hears of the slightest misstep.

3 stars, tale not finished

Well, as a story it's interesting. An Ode to Garth Brooks, I guess. 'The Dance' is a great song, as is 'The River'. And 'Ain't goin down til the sun comes up' is a kick. You got most of the roping terms right, but really, hooey? Just stick with a half-hitch. You don't speak or write the vernacular so it all comes off as phony. Cowboy churches are real and people are reborn every minute of every day all over the world. So what was the point of the story? Perhaps you could round out your Country and Western music background with a little Marty Robbins 'Gunfighter Ballads'. Most particularly, 'El Paso', if you really are a Texas boy.

Kudos on bringing to the LW category a fresh, well-observed setting. And the possibility of redemption is one of the most powerful themes in storytelling. If you can sell Cassie's bid for redemption with sufficient dramatic emotion, we readers will buy it.

Great story! 5 stars and a BIG thank you!

I don't see them ever getting back what they had, but I'd like to think she can end up in their lives somehow. If she can avoid turning back into the drug-crazed slut, her daughter deserves to get her mom back, even if that mom can't be Daddy's wife again. I know a couple who have divorced each other twice and are now on marriage number three, so anything's possible. I do know drugs were involved for them, and cleaning up (and leaning heavily on Jesus) has made their reconciliation possible.

Great story, I loved the entire six pages and the promise of more. I've seen terrible people turn their lives around and become model citizens after divine intervention. I've also seen some sorry bastards turn it around after having their attitudes physically adjusted , like Ricky in your story. I like redemption and reconciliation when it is earned. Cassie may just be a great candidate for that reconciliation. If Daddy is still around, he has a lot to answer for. Its your masterpiece, and I can't wait to see how you finish it.

I hope he gets to move on... She may of changed but what she did doesnt deserve his love again. Yes, Cassie deserves a chance to be a mother again but not his wife, so I hope it doesnt end up a raac story. Its the authors story so I'd imagine he/she probably has an idea of how the story will turn out regardless of what the commenters like myself say.

Any autor asking for help how is story must end, shows e has lost his characters. Only he knows tem. If he doesn't know how they will react, nobody else knows. 3*

I hope a reconciliation can be reached. Despite Cassie's horrible actions, I do believe Zane is her true and only romantic love and that she's still in love with him. The toxic substances she took and toxic people she was around clouded her judgment. But once that was out of her system and she could think clearly, she knew she had taken the wrong path. Plus that little girl has suffered a lot. She deserves to have both parents with her and gain reassurance of Cassie's love for her and their love for each other. Cassie does have to prove she's changed and sorry though. I hope she can and will!

I would vote separate lives, with the daughter being the only connection between the two. Any other final outcome is just wishful thinking. Just my two cents, based on my RL experiences.

Outstanding!! You are a very good writer. Stay true to your voice, know you have the talent to put forth good work, and by all means keep writing. We look forward to reading more from you.

i couldn't trust her

You are either going to finish your story or not. As for your sanctimony, you're just being a prick in disguise.

The prom debacle is less of a red flag than her completely abandoning her daughter for the past two years after her conversion experience, not even sending a birthday card. Her thinking that’s some kind of personal penance shows she’s still thinking only of herself, with no consideration for how it hurt the little girl.

The overlooked aspect of this story is that Hubby is, even during his sabbatical from the rodeo tours, still a part of the rodeo community. He raises horses that are used for a number of the competitions and also for the ceremonies. Those clients/friends would be keeping him aware of Sweetie’s ‘Miracle of Rebirth’! Or at least her reversal of her barrel-racing downslide, separation from the influence of Asshole Daddy, and increased acceptance by rodeo leaders.

The missing ending is very implicit. Hubby is a Christian. Despite being depicted as surprised by his Ex’s Rebirth (ironically, at about the time of the divorce), he has compelling evidence from his friends, her friends and Sweetie’s claims, plus her actions during (and after) her seeing her daughter two years older, he cannot NOT forgive and remarry her. Otherwise, he is a Christian Of Convenience - which is contrary to every depiction of him in the story. (Yeah, even though he and his cohort did THREATEN to murder Rick & Rick’s cohort! But We-The-Readers know they may have followed through with some of the threat, but would not have seriously harmed the assholes.)

4*

This may be your best story yet. Five stars

The prodigal...

Who cares what everybody else thinks should happen. It's YOUR story....finish it how you see it. Some people will love it, some will hate it and everyone else will fall somewhere between the two. Great authors live by the phrase, "to thine own self be true". Call 'em like you see 'em and if people don't like it they can write their own damn story!

So, for some of you, a decision by a fifteen year old girl to go to the biggest event of the year with someone eligible to go, is predictive of a future as a cheating slut? Wow! Must not have spent much time around 14-15 yo girls, or 16-7 yo boys. Maturity ain’t exactly a straight line.

Anonymous, and nothing clarifies your position like saying “government schools” and claiming home school is superior. In fact, you definitely don’t want to go there, because my experience, expertise, and data are far beyond yours.

Interesting that teachers, who used to stay for forty years, are “running for the exit” now, when those who call public schools “government schools” have been in charge for the better part of three decades. You’d think…

Nope. No reconciliation. Let her see her daughter but don't trust her. IRL have seen more reconciliations fail because the disrespect and trust never truly can be repaired. Glad she got clean and found what was right but Zane deserves better. Just be friends. Zane go back to Jo

Wrote a decent story then turned it into a tent meeting. 2stars.

How did the comments section in Loving Wives become a soap box for uneducated, pompous, angry right wing idiots trying to prove points by showing their pathetic ignorance? "They" can be used as a singular pronoun under most style guides when the gender identity of the of the person referred to is unknown. This is because English long ago dropped singular gender neutral pronouns so they is properly used when that pronoun is required. I know the idiots would rather get angry about shit they don't understand than try to critically examine language usage. But blast the world by showing your stupidity. It only helps those you despise.

Just stop.

Excellent writing and a great many details on rodeo. Thanks for the education in C&W songs

Now what? Nothing. He must keep staying away from her.

Reconciliation or Burn the Bitch....its not just one option or the other.....the third obvious option is they each move on with their separate lives. While the reconciliation camp clamor for Cassie to have a second chance and there's no reason she can't have one but doesn't Zane deserve a second chance at life as well with someone who hasn't betrayed, abandoned and deserted him.

Their best chance at having a better and deserving life is with someone other than each other. Each gets to start with a fresh slate and a chance at full life filled with happiness...just not with each other. Sure, they'll always have a connection because of their daughter but it doesn't mean they need to be shackled together with no other options or choices for a better life.

Leave husband and daughter. Because her dad said so.

Sleep around as much as you want

Suddenly believe in the imaginary magic man in the sky

Say you are sorry

Expect everything to be forgotten just because you are pretty

That about sum it up?

Awful.

This went completely off the stupid rails around the born again section with the imaginary sky daddy. Otherwise, a solid story, if not a tad heavy on meandering details.

Would have given it a Four +, but you have bottled out and not finished it. Two stars only

Reminds me of the quote from Jeffrey R. Holland, "God doesn't care nearly as much about where you have been as He does about where you are and, with His help, where you are willing to go."

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This story has a clear and natural trajectory, that will make it a helluva compelling romance, if you forget about the rabid foaming from the mouth vocal LW fringe and trust your gut.

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Thanks for the story. Born and raised in the Southwest, I enjoy the PRC angle.

I'm a reconciliation type of person and would prefer a happy ending for this couple. But I do wonder, what kind of woman allows her father to make fun of her husband and ESPECIALLY her daughter! I understand she was taking drugs but come on! She should have shut him down right then and returned home if he didn't stop. I can handle a wife betraying her husband. It's not right but at least they are both adults. But to betray one's own child and abandon one's responsibilities as a mother, is a bridge too far for me. Still, I look forward to seeing if Cassie can redeem herself. Not just repent, but redeem.

I mean, the bible is also full of absolute psychopaths, and entire cities that are wiped from the face of the planet because they wouldn't change their ways. Even your god literally gives up on humanity itself and decides that global genocide is better than dealing with their shit. And is supposedly ready to do it again at some point.

So yeah, not the best thing to base your tale of redemption on. But yes, people can and do change for the better. There are plenty who have seen the darkness, broken free and have no desire to go back. But then there are just as many others who saw it, liked it and keep it as their summer home. Unfortunately the only real way to find out who's who is to role the dice and wait for something to test their mettle.

Allso agree with Oldsage_1