All Comments on 'Extraordinary Ch. 01'

So far

It will be interesting to see where this goes.

i'd like to see where it goes. i think it needs a bit more editing. There were a number of easily fixed mistakes that slowed down the flow of reading a bit.

I would try to go with a bit more details on stuff. When she left Axle I thought it strange that this man with such power would let her get up hurt and dizzy and get out of the room, club, etc. It may have helped to have him say something about knowing he could find her again and letting her go. She couldn't have escaped him if he didn't want her to.

I am intrigued and look forward to more. I'm glad to see something different, in that the hot alpha guy doesn't take her right away and instead she ends up at this older man's house. I want to see why she is there. And how does it land her in the beginning of the story?

im interested in seeing where this is going; please keep going.

Good start, lets see where we go from here.