All Comments on 'Fall From Grace Ch. 01: A Mother's Story'

I like the story. Maybe another chapter or 2. AAA+++

Loved the story cant wait till the next one!

I was impressed with your first effort. Please continue the story line. Did note some missing letters to words Better proofreading would catch theses. I can’t suggest plot line till I see if you are going soft or hard BDSM. Thanks for the story?

Interesting start, looking forward to the next installment.

Good story don't turn it weird by sharing her let it stay between them

I'm fine with these kind of stories but at least try to write something to build on. I came home and she ranted about the internet so I decided to fuck her?

This was low effort besides the sexual stuff.

Awesome start! Hopefully mom will be shared with others while son joins in.

There are those of us in this genre with mommy issues; and then there are those of us with mommy issues. Interesting first story. Keep it up.

Keep it going.

Make her a true whore and have men including black men with huge cock DP.her while she screams in pain.

Put her on a St Andrews cross as a tool with her training.

Keep degrading her until she is just big tits and a sloppy cunt.

Then take her to the bad side of town and drop her there. Let the local BBC devour her freely for awhile.

It is an interesting start just wish it was a bit longer . I for one would like to read more about this relationship and see where it goes . As for improvement of this story some more editing is needed there are a few places where one has to stop and figure out what is going on that disrupts the flow of the story but overall it was an enjoyable read keep going .

Wrong category! Should have been in BDSM.

part 2 please

A great start! I hope you give us additional chapters very soon. I would like to see the son further control his mother by the way he dresses her and maybe even tattoos her!

After she blows him, he needs to fuck her in the ass........ hard....... make her beg for it..........

I would like to thank everyone for their candid feedback. Since this was my first attempt, it is probably more raw than it could be. I cringed after it was published and I saw all of my typos. I will try to do better. Thank you all for taking the time to read my story and comment.

I’m into S&M and domination and with-it being it your mother makes it so much hotter. Thanks for the read BUT you better not leave me hanging. I expect so much more. Don’t worry you are going to get criticized for a few things in the composer but F**k them . I never see their stories or their handle here so forget them and write away

Great start. More please.

Good start. This has all the possibilities of being a really good tale, a heady mixture of incest, and BDSM. I'm interested in seeing how this develops.

I agree with a previous comment. This is in the wrong category. Should be BDSM.

I like the premise of an unloved son getting revenge on his cold, bitchy mother with sex. But I don't like the BSDM/violence.

Please, waiting for Part 2

Great start. Can't wait for more. Please don't leave us hanging.

Some spelling errors...proofread, and learn how to use the ellipse...in a sentence and at the end....

Great start - doesn't feel complete enough for a full story though

Its a good beginning. Keep going,

Good story, she is about to understand what she has done and will have to pay for pass action. Keep the story going.

great start.please keep it going

The backstory is painted using very broad strokes... too broad. It amounts to telling instead of showing. Even as a stroke story, it just kinda feels empty.

I don't want to leave you with just negative criticism. The premise of the story about a man resentful of his mother taking control of her in a dominant fashion was done very well in this story:

https://storiesonline.net/s/49595:51046/adverse-conditioning-chapter-1

Now I know it's a long story and not the kind of stroke story you're aiming for, but you can learn a few things about setting up a convincing emotional backdrop for the sex that follows to be actually good.

have him give her a facial next!

I don’t really like BDSM but this is an interesting story. I enjoyed it and hope to read part 2 soon. Thanks.

Nothing has hit home like this one. My mother and I never got along and she was emotionally very abusive. Still, over the years, I had the same fantasies. Unfortunately, they never came true. She is still alive, but I’ve 100. My vicarious experience through your stories is quite cathartic

I like the start. Has a lot of potential. Training, bondage, caning, submission, anal, on and on.

This is number three - 3 - yet reads as if number one ? ?

A rehash if nothing else.

Inordinate number of textual blips here. Perhaps a dictation to type programme or, perhaps you get to excited while creating the text.

Sorry, after the original One and Two, there is nothing new here.

Rated as Average. . .

great fantasy. i would not want this in real life but its kind of liberating.

Hot beginning.

It has the making of a good long sexual adventure. The humiliation and the domination are as important to the story as the sexual acts. Looking forward to more.

Liked your story, do not let the bad comments discourage you, at least you had thd guts to erite and post her. Being a mother I find this topic stirs all kinds of emotions in me both good and bad. Since that is the purpose of stories, well done.

Pretty effing good, seems the narcissist mom is looking at life like the hi-heel is SO on another foot,

the foot that's gonna go up her ass if she doesn't get it together and do what he wants. 2 thumbs up

Taking control as you did, the manner of which, denotes a Master with experience. You allude to past BDSM, but at the same time state the limited relationships. All and still, it does get ones blood to flowing wanting that power. 5*

Great domination and submission story and I love the incest twist.

That mother is SUCH a bitch. I am glad she got what was coming to her.

Interesting enough premise, but why so violent and mean. Even if this is here because the BDSM category would reject it because of the incest component, this incest category (and the whole site) is supoosed to be about erotica. Yes, I see there is sex here, but that does not make it erotic. The potentially erotic element comes from the premise. Let me quote.

"It was strange to have a woman in my house who I should have a close relationship with, but who I really only saw as a physical person. It gave me the chance to see her as a woman and not my mother."

Add to that the ingredients of past discontent, present reversal of fortunes and power balance and the physical, you say "She was petite in a very feminine way, but had nice big tits and a lush ass ...".

A great set up with a foreboding tension and reams of possibilities.

Just to refine the point, I am not saying that power play, dominance dynamics and even non-consent are the problem. The connections of anger, sex, love are as genuine as they are mysterious and can be as erotic as a low-cut dress.

While it is clear from other comments that my disappointment in the outcome is not the general view, I wonder that the praise seems to focus on the hurt done rather than any erotic stimulation? Seriously, I am clueless and do not understand.

- Perhaps someone can point me in the direction of a story with the same tense and fertile premise but without the violence.

Like my mommy used to say, "No hitting!"