All Comments on 'Family Movie Nights: The Sex Scene'

Silly move doing it right there. Hope you have more of this story please.

I enjoyed this and it was a nice story idea, but the smell of sex would have outed them. I would like to read more of these four; perhaps, mom and dad knew, but they didn’t care or they were siblings and had done the same.

You do have a issues of word choice, where you use her instead of his; basically, this makes it sound like your referring to Mike as a her:

"his shaft entirely from her (his) sister's..."

“His cock was now fully engulfed inside her (his) sister's pussy...”

“suddenly kissing her (his) sister, while...”

“inside her (his) sister's tight...”

4 Stars, good story, the only take away is the multiple use of the word 'her' instead of 'His'. if it wasn't for the typos, I'd have given you a fifth star. Please have someone you trust reread what you write. Please keep writing.

A story has to be somewhat believable for it to work. Having sex a few feet away from parents without them noticing is ridiculous. Not good. Thumbs down.

Sort of silly and not quite believable, but very hot!

My sister and I were much more discreet and there is nothing more of a turn on than having sex with your own sister.

Slow kiss that lasted less than a second?

@Sparrow69, thanks for pointing the issues out, as a non-native speaker sometimes i get confused about the correct terms (silly, i know). I sent a review to fix the mistakes, so hopefully they're fixed soon :)

Hot fun

Fun and sexy story 🤗

Proof Reading Required !

Still rated this a four ( 4 ) due to amount of risk taken.

More please!!!!

You can't leave us hanging like this!!!! You need to continue the story!

This story pretty much has the same problems with the belief factor that your newest submission has.

"So there she was, her own brother deep inside her pussy, on the couch, with their parents next to them, and only covered by a simple blanket."

I realize that this is fiction and the reader has to suspend reality in order to enjoy the story. But even Superman had his kryptonite. That's what is known as balance. As a writer, you have not yet learned where the line is at to maintain that balance. You keep crossing over the line into the realm of the truly outrageous and it ruins what could otherwise be a five star effort. 3/5

More please!!!

this is literally my favorite story in the app i love it and it's so cute please write more like these if you can 🥺

this is literally my favorite story on the app, I've read it many times! it's so cute, i just love it, write more like these if you can, please🥺