by sueWalksTall
Without question one of the most pathetic excuses for erotica ever posted on Literotica! Leave writing to WRITERS!
great start. deserves a five as long as you continue the story and fill in the historical details of how and why the characters have found themselves in such a torrid situation. don't LET the detractors (funny how they are always anonymous) get to you.
great start. deserves a five as long as you continue the story and fill in the historical details of how and why the characters have found themselves in such a torrid situation. don't LET the detractors (funny how they are always anonymous) get to you.
i agree with the last poster, great start. we want more! as for the other idiot, don't pay any attention. very well written, kept my interest, and i'm looking forward to the next chapter
If you don't have the courage to sign your name or leave your email address, shut up.
albeit, too short,,,, if you had taken more time to develop it would have been more erotic,,,,
as it is, the eroticism's too short, though it's there. but the intensity would have been heightened had you given more background to it,,,, you've already had a good background to it --- that Sally the friend/lover of the story teller --- is believed to be "puritanical" by her husband,,, but she's obviously not,,, as she's been scheming to make love to her son, even though she never said it outloud,,,
so, again, the plot's good. you just needed to give more meat to the bones,,,,
Well written story but room for improvement. The general plot is good but as others have said, you should expand and explain more.
Very promising though. Look forward to reading more.
And the narrator is a true family friend, both to the boy and his mother. Ryan is a big strong lad, a real hunk as they say. He's sporting a fine fat prick and, at his age, a pair of hot young balls that never quit. The family friend knows full well where Ryan'd love to unload those balls of his, and where his mother, deep down, wants her big beautiful boy to shoot his big doses of creamy sperm. It's where plenty of boys want to cream--right up his own mother's cunt. Ryan gives his mother the best gift any son can, a great big twatful of his warm young semen. For the first, not the last time.