All Comments on 'Family Secrets Ch. 01'

Damn, I find this story actually to be very sad. She killed her mother who raised her for over 18 years and maybe grieved for a minute. Only feeling sad but not guilty. And for what? To be the top bitch, wich translates to only have the right to be bred by the top dog. Worth it? Dont know, but I dont think so. Absolutely not worth it.

When a submitter can't get more three words into the actual story without plopping down a misplaced comma, I see no point in continuing, or rating more than 1 star.

Are you really that bad at writing, or are you that bad at proofreading, or are you that lazy? Whichever it is, you need to try something different.

Wolves mate for life and having the daughter kill the mother to be with her father was stupid.

Interesting realignment of a classic tail. Would have gone better in erotic horror but I’m trusting you when claiming the sex will be primarily incest or at least taboo. Definitely not what I expected but a good story. 5* for now but you’ll get a 1 if chapter 2 isn’t brimming with familial lust.

Damn, I wasn't expecting a Magic wolf story!

I love wolves, so I'm definitely going to enjoy this!

Dark but well written.

To cageysea, I hope the author blocks you. These are fictional stories, and, not college, lit papers. People in my own neighborhood, speak, with different verbal, cadences. I can only, imagine the differences of, people, around the world, that are English, As Second Language. You, cagey, are just an arse hole. Try enjoying a story for the diversion of it, For the entertainment of it, or even to put yourself in the story. I think you, would be, a happier, person!

To Cageysea, "LivesToRead" actually nailed your situation. I would have deleted your 'trolling' comment as I have stated in my bio. That being said. I'll leave it up and explain that I not only run my stories through Word's editing program but Grammarly's as well prior to the one provided on this site. After three editing programs say the comma you referred to was ok, it means your opinion is your issue. Stop trying to be an EDIT FASCIST and enjoy the story.

Next the issue of wolves mating for life... yes they "TYPICALLY" do. Except in the case of the alpha. The alpha male quickly chooses a new mate if his first mate dies. Because the alphas are the only members of the pack that has breeding privileges, if the alpha female dies, that would mean the end of the pack otherwise. Plus this story is about WEREWOLVES, NOT WOLVES.

And then we have the issue of readers applying their own morals or social norms to a fictional story that isn't even about humans. That, in my book, is bordering on psychosis. Please seek help if you find yourself too attached to any character or situation you read about in a fictional story.

To EVERYONE ELSE, I hope you enjoyed the story for the work of fictional literature that it is. I hope to have the next installment out by the end of the year, but I am working on several projects as well as working a regular job and with the holidays around the corner it may be after the New Year... Sorry.

Visceral story. More please.

I don't see how killing mom was necessary. Dominating her or her leaving the pack to live in town, whatever, seems like it would've forwarded the plot without the tragedy.. The erotica was just totally drowned out by that tragedy. 3* for an otherwise very well-written story.

Even in werewolves stories they are life MATES not pussy place holders.she should have been looking for a mate of her own not killing her own mother so she can fuck her dad.

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Really intense story. I love the way you allow us to see and feel what she is going through. It made it seem so realistic, so believable. I understand the commenters who have their opinions about "mating for life" and the tragedy being ... well, tragic. But I thought you explained the situation appropriately in the story and backed it up brilliantly in your response to their comments. Along with "Livestoread" I also had no issue with that particular comma use. I am a fan of the written word representing the actual flow of speech. If the person takes a small pause for effect, that requires a comma to represent it. Great job!

Really an enjoyable read!