All Comments on 'Family Vacation Plus 1 - Week 01'

Too many commas. You don't need, to use, so many commas. Lmao.

I loved this story! Hoping to read week 2 soon!

There were a lot of unnecessary commas, but they didn't take away from the story itself. The pacing and descriptions were great!

You, know, that, I/T, stories, are, always, hotter, when, there, are, only, two, people, involved.

Great story... the progression was very good! Looking forward to the next installment(s)!

Love this story. Hot as fuck

One of the best incest stories I've ever read. Thank You. .... Stacy needs to wake up. Kissing lessons.

Very erotic story.

Can't wait for chapter two.

I loved it!!!!!

I hope to see part 2 and/or 3.

Fantastic story. Well written. Looking forward to more chapters👍

Very hot, and very well paced and written.

I'm looking forward to more.

Incredible story. Very believable progression. Whe do we get to read the rest.

Love it!

Awesome story, great punctuation, excellent flow and development!!!!

You DEFINITELY have talent!

Well done. Just stellar.

AMAZING. Thank You

It’s a nice story. Please give us the second part and get the daddy involved. 👌👌

fantastic story. more please

Great carry On ……

Only use “it’s” when you mean “it is”. The correct phrase is “having its way” - no apostrophe should be used.

I haven't actually finished the story yet. I'm going to go back and give it another try, but please, please have someone edit your stories. I get the impression that this one is extremely good (from the comments), but the punctuation is very distracting. Two sentences in a row starting with "Like I said,".

A little editing would really jump this story up to the next level if the comments are any indication.

I absolutely loved this story. Congrats it’s one of the top 5 stories on literotica.

Liked it a lot but I’d rather have a sister teaching them.

I enjoyed it a lot! There development and pace are good. The arc is very hot and sexy. Looking forward to the following chapters.

First. I’m not a grammar nazi, the writing was good. The sex was hot.

However, with the wife having a good loving relationship with the husband and NOT telling him was going on is absurd. He seemed to catch her lead earlier, why won’t she talk to him for 5 minutes? She magically gets so horny that she decides to cuckhold him? Cone on now? This is not a husband in another country, or abusive. He’s 10 feet away!!! If she explained what was going on before, he might have been supportive, but now, can he feel anything else but betrayed? On this family vacation he’s doing alll the work and getting stabbed in the back. By a loving wife.

The incorrect commas are very distracting.

Hot.

As 'payback' Tom has to have some fun with Stacy.

Super Duper Hot.

Loved it all the way.

Can’t wait to read the next chapter. But first I’ve got to take care of some ‘thing’.

Great story, very realistic dialogue, characters interesting and well-defined, but god bless, please learn how commas are used in English.

Strange tale, but somehow enjoyable and erotic. Felt sorry for the husband missing out on the activities. Difficult to read, particularly in the non-dialogue parts, due to the random sprinkling of commas. Forget any grammar rules you were taught, and read the sentence out loud, pausing at each comma. If you need a pause to make it readable, then add one. If there’s no pause, then no comma. Thanks

Amazing story! I loved every second of it

Loved it! Five stars and a favorite point!

Next part Please.......

The last sex scene was so hot. Thanks!

Damn, that was one hot story. Great writing and the pace was perfect. That last scene was probably the hottest of them all. Thanks

Have to agree with IF_L. So very Hot. Can’t wait to read on.

I loved the story. I'm reading everyone bitching about commas and I didn't even notice them. Come on ya wankers just read it and stop criticizing every little thing

Outstanding. More like this please.

I love the interplay with your characters. I wish I could give you ten stars. So I gave five instead.

Amazing work. One of the hottest stories I've read in ages. Bravo!

❤❤🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥

Four star story-it went too slowly...

I am not opposed to detail, this was just...too much...😖😖

And, did Dad see all of them in bed, naked...?? How will this work out??

That is a very exciting and an amazing story!

lololol,,,,mom is such a slut,,,poor dad doesnt know what he's missing! liking it.

Great, fun storyline like others said poor dad lol....