All Comments on 'Fantasy Pt. 04: Kill Them'

If you have a gun and you need to shoot, then shoot, don't talk.

I am not sure that I understand anything about this story. I don't judge on anyone else's kinks, but the actions of any of these characters make no logical sense. He brings a gun, and then allows Richard to call out to someone else in the house???? The character is too dim to justify being married to the woman in the first place.

Intriguing

should be in the non-erotic category.

Re-posting of previous story, only title has changed. Nothing new

Reads like the last one..what's the difference?

DOL

WTF this story already postes while ago

Hmmm.....another repeat....why??

FTDS

Epilogue: Armand was carrying the gun as he walked toward Henry when he tripped and fell. The gun hit the floor and went off sending around into Richard's stomach. He fell backwards as Armand got up and went to help him. Henry finally grew a pair of balls, and picking up the gun went and stood over the fatally wounded piece of shit. He shot Armand in the leg to incapacitate him and then put his foot on Richard's wound causing him to scream out in pain. He then shot him in several nonlethal places including his nuts. Richard slowly bled out while Henry grinned at him. After putting another round through Armand to do him in, he dialed 911, wiped his prints off the gun and placed it in the hand of Alice who had fainted. He walked out whistling a merry tune as he heard the sirens in the distance.

This story I believe was posted once before it sucked then and that has not changed

Why was this reposted?

Why did Richard want to hurt them?

Why do I feel I already read this. Sounds real familiar

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To those who want to know why this story is reposted -- there were some serious technical and communication issues with the Literotica moderation system. In order to continue with the "Fantasy" series, it was necessary to repost with the "Fantasy Pt. 4" name.

Yes, yes, I know a number of people don't find the story to be their cup of tea. I invite them to not read it. Just a suggestion.

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Fun devious read but i think that given hubbys effort that he is disarmed far too easily, hez is a room with a gun and two goons who he had to know were present somewhere especially after shooting a round off get the jump on him? Too improbable. Personally id have bought a silencer or three, shot richard in the legs, got the whore brought in. Listened for feet, shot thru the wall or something then dealt with Richard. Burnt the remains and house and leave. Maybe take the ho, she ia trained now afterall

What a dumb ass story.

I swear I read this before.

I'm sure I read this before, all the car moves, the sanitation badge, everything.

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greenday, I agree completely, I see it so much on TV, also, the walking within arms length so the intended victim can slap your arm or grab or grab the gun.

Great storytelling--may be unparalleled for this type of storytelling on this site. This writer knows how to get the reader screaming at his/her reading device. This writer knows how to reach inside the reader and twist our viscera. How many times did you want to stop reading but could not? I lost count. Only the best writers can do this.

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Also, contrast Richard with every other bully/evil seducer we read about in these pages. There's a huge difference between the Richard arch-villain and the cookie-cutter, hyperbolic refugees from a failed Marvel Comics super-hero spin-off flick we see elsewhere, isn't there? Richard is a Keyser Söze level of malevolent baddie; he can walk through walls, bite through steel and swim the East River in January without using his hands. Mostly, though, he has villain-grade timing. By that, I mean every time the hero, with whom we all identify, gets the slightest leg-up, boom, Ricard stomps him down. In the end, he destroys Henry's idealized view of Alice, but he twists the knife by giving Henry what he wants, Alice, but it's a woman who is no longer connected to Henry. Ultimately, Richard destroys them both and does it totally because they're neither the people they were before. As they struggle forward, Richard remains their nemesis, albeit unseen, because he changed them; they are his creations. If anything, Richard has become more powerful and more unassailable.

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Don't read this story as you would any other LW betrayal tale. None of the classic Good v. Evil or Black & White struggles. No, this is a psychological thriller and doesn't process in the light of day. I can't wait to see the next chapter, but I'm not holding out hope for a HEA. That's because, like it or not, Richard is in my head and yours.

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Brilliant writing, OP. As much as the story pisses me off, it's brilliant, and I loathe you for waiting more than a day between installments. But I could find peace if I could only stop reading it... More! Now!

What???? I read every word of this story a short time ago. Why is it being touted as a new entry. Did even one word change? So disappointing!! Tell us why you're doing this at the start of the story. Hell, you didn't apologize even at the end. Re-gifting the same gift is never a good idea.

Very glad you’re back in this category, you’re definitely top tier in terms of skill and creativity. Taut and suspenseful

Wrong category. Is this some kind of masochistic story. or just normal cuck shit? Makes no sense and is at least 3 parts too long.

Shoot first, talk later.

The problem was how could Alice respect Henry when he had no self respect?

How could Richard respect Alice when she gave everything up including her dignity?

And if Henry was truly over Alice, he wouldn’t have gone there to kill them, he would have just moved on.

Sorry but this ending was blasé, it was as bland as tofu. And I can’t even be hate Richard. He didn’t take anything, they gave him everything.

Thanks for the invite. I will remember not to read anymore of your crap

Odd. Was there a plot here, somewhere? A bunch of description about a lame attempt at revenge, a bogus take down of a man with an semiautomatic pistol, and ability to shoot straight, by two large strong men who supposedly move faster than a trigger finger, making no sound. Yeah, really cartoon type fantasy. What for?

Henry is really a sicko. When she left he should have sent an hour beating a heavy bad to shreds and filed for abandonment.

Surprise surprise….

I quit reading when I got to the stupid part.

There are times such as this when one wishes one would have given-up and not have gone on reading.....but alas..........

Annnnnd, of course, it got fucking stupid. What else could I expect from a person that get's off on being cucked.

Well, too bad, would have been a good comeback if he'd actually followed through with killing Richard and Alice.