All Comments on 'February Pay It Forward'

5* Neat and sweet, thank you for posting it.

Great Revival with alternate ending. I Like it.

Could you write a follow up swapping out Dee for Linda, and show how Dee ends up broken, destitute, with nothing left as a result of her wicked ways?

Well, yes, that was a different take on this theme. Interestingly executed. As was Marc, apparently.

Nice to see Dee eat the drama. Thanks.

Simply the most unique take on the story

Never know when you’ll run across a leprechaun. LOL! Fun twist on a classic. 4.6*

Loved it!

I agree with RePhil. one of the most UNIQUE and probably the best. seems the bartenders are a popular wish granters. second or 3rd story i have read lately. But RP is still CORRECT the most unique for this one

I loved this version! Such a Great Episode of a Miracle saving Linda and Jim's Marriage. Dee was always so deserving of the Heart Ache and always pushing Linda to get in trouble. 10 big blazing stars. Great Writing, Great Plot, and Great Results! Very Nice Job! Thanks Buster2U

Very engaging story.

The classic by George Anderson is a modern version of the "no win" situation from Star Trek, aka the "Kobayashi Maru" situation. Heartbreaking and Heart rendering in so many ways. George Anderson was really a genius in writing this story. It is a never-ending puzzle Kirk has to "reprogram" the computers to "win" the combat situation in his final exam. Just like once Linda dances with Marc LaVaillere there is No escape from the Destruction of her marriage and family. This original story was so powerful that it spawned dozens and dozens of alternate endings. Just another example of Love Destroyed by a selfish predator. I always identify with Jim when I read this story. Thanks so much for the effort! Buster2U

Fun alternative, not bad.

Loved the take on FS.

I thought I had read every outcome and then you came.

Great writing.

I liked it. I liked that she tried to save another wife before getting her do over.

Well as much as I want to say she's still cheated in her timeline I always did say the only way to fix it is if the wife got a time machine and didn't cheat.

Linda got it all. She cheated, went back and didn't cheat. But she can still recall screwing Marc. D

Loved the Twilight Zone twist. 5 stars.

she didn't get it all, she suffered for 30 years in her alternate future and got a chance to correct her mistake. Think it would have been more enjoyable had they gone to the club. When Marc asked her to dance, she dropped her husband's hand to stand and take Marc's hand, then say "sorry, I love my husband" as she slapped Marc in the face.

At the sound of the slap she found herself back in 2047, in bed with Jim as he was about to mount her. "As I was saying, I love my husband"

5* This is really a great alternative version of Feb Sucks. Write On!!!!

Not good that she remembers the great sex with asshat. Good that she tried to help the other wife. Better if she’d gone to the club and refused Marc instead of just avoiding him.

Just wish we all got a do-over once in a while.

The one line about Marc getting cut to pieces with a chainsaw by one of the husbands made the story for me! Good job, not completely original but a good twist for this story.

Nice alternative. Thanks. The Tramp approves. 5*.

Oh yeah, alpha sex.....🙄

A unique take on this story. I like it. Much better than Jim being a Secret Squirrel Super Ninja RangerSeal who destroys both Marc and Linda using his Bolivian Kung Fu and connections to the Luxembourg Mafia.

Well done.

Ehhh. I don’t really care for Linda “redeeming” herself stories honestly. Especially this one where she was pretty much still bragging about the sex to the very end.

Fun.

4 stars

great, the cheating whore gets do over and Jim is stuck being forced to love a deceitful slut

Uhm.

I am not into a story that has a time-machine.

Even by fiction it is utterly impossible to go back in time.

Man, I was enjoying the story when I got to the paragraph of the time-travel and

really just made say 'meh' and stopped reading.

That was a refreshing change, well done.

But one thing has never added up for me in all these stories including the original, why the fuck would you risk destroying your marriage for a—wait for it—a FOOTBALL PLAYER, a guy that throws a leather oval thingy (that isn’t actually ball shaped) filled with air, I mean come on I know IQ’s aren’t the highest in the US but surely if you’re gonna cheat, self respect would have had her wait for something better.

The way I read this is that Linda's refusal to enter the club doesn't demonstrate that she's learned anything from her original experience merely that she doesn't trust herself not to repeat it.

All of these versions of FS seem to imbue LaValliere with some sort of supernatural power of seduction that women have no way of resisting but the reality is that if a woman is steadfastly against being seduced she won't be.

I understand that this wasn't meant to be realistic but couldn't shake the feeling that Linda's actions were a bit off.

Wow! It is amazing how many endings there are to this short story.

That is so damned inspired. Incredible. Well done. This is the right no more after this endings.

Submitted for your approval Linda Blauhauser, a woman of lost causes, who received sage advice while on vacation in The

Twilight Zone.

Silly, but I liked it. Refreshing as well. Five stars for a tale well told.

JPB

The chainsaw.

I loved everything, especially the chainsaw!

"Happy Birthday, Jim."

Yes, you did good! Thank you!

Yeah….that was pretty damn good. Especially liked the chainsaw treatment of Marc 😈

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5 *****

One of the ridiculous aspects of the GA story is the absurd assumption the professional athletes are unusually adept at sex. That's just stupid. The "alpha" male trope is borrowed from an early 20th century paper on sled dogs. The actual personality trait displayed by Marc is narcissistic personality disorder. Narcissists are very effective con men, and the combination of narcissism and celebrity, which unintelligent people are endlessly impressed by, is toxic.

As a die-hard Feb Sux aficionado, I liked it a lot. The only way Linda could redeem herself was to go back in time and change history (it was still a struggle for her to not go to Marc).

Um, did I miss the version where he gets cut up by chainsaws?

2*. At least it’s a new approach

Good story, always like these stories that can go back in time and fix the wrong

>Linda got it all. She cheated, went back and didn't cheat. But she can still recall screwing Marc. D<

Actually no. Reread. She lost all memory of the night except of her loneliness and the hurt she saw in his face. She remembered exactly enough to not fuck up twice. Hence all the parts about the memories fading. She did NOT get to keep the memories of Marc beyond facts needed to avoid a repeat.

Demander- Yes, she got to remember Marc's incredible sexual ability. Did Jim ever measure up this time around?

I really hate these February alternatives, but this one was good.

Nice, but she still did it and why does she get a second chance rather than Jim getting a nice new wife?

You really need to emphase so much Time that mark was her best ever ?

"Linda shook now in terror trying not to go near the club," - She SHOULD go, and have the strength to turn Marc down. Avoiding temptation isn't the answer. Sometime in the future something may tempt her and she's going to have to be strong.

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Heh, I thought about having Dee cheat. She DID say that if Marc had asked her she would have gone.

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@114FSO, we've seen so many variations with Linda, why would one with Dee instead be special?

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@Buster2U, I don't see GA's as a "no-win" scenario. There was no reason she couldn't have refused Marc's offer to dance, or refuse to leave with him.

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@Oatmeal1969, I like your take. You took my idea (independently) and expanded on it beautifully. Either way, going in and resisting Marc is more meaningful than avoiding him.

In spite of using a Supernatural explanation, I actually enjoyed this changed version.

Perhaps a tad "dramatic" given that Linda would have been in her late 60's and alone in a bar at closing time! One would have thought she would be "over it" after 30 years following her divorce.

Still, interesting version. Thanks. Cheers.

The Twilight Zone

You're right, it's silly, but it's still fun.

One deep moment: "I see a pure heart." Well said: Hearts are purified by trial and fire.

All... Linda did not retain the memories of Marc sex. She retained enough memories to not cheat and realize her bleak future if she did. I guess I was not clear enough in mentioning the memories were fading except Jim's sad face and the logistics of her getting up to dance.

Linda paid her price when she gave up those memories and convinced Brittany that cheating would lead to discovery so Brittany backed out of her dalliance. "FUUUUUCK" was Brittany changing her mind and deciding to stay home.

I know everyone wanted Linda to slap Marc. She was TERRIFIED of her weakness the first go around and wanted to stay far far away from Marc.

Besides. I had a chainsaw for Marc and personally, I'd rather be slapped than chainsawed.

Still Bad. She has the memories and Jim is not the best sex of her life. To make it worst, she again proved her love for Jim is nothing in front of the lust with Marc. Marc wins, Jim loose and Linda is a slut.

Well written. But, seemed kind of flat.

5 star

4 for the story

+1 for the chainsaw

Sorry, it was a little too confusing for me...

"A silly February Sucks alternate" is redundant.

I have read many of these. Some pretty good. Most not so hot. That was magnificent.

Five stars.

The kicker is that Linda will live the rest of her life feeling guilty for her actions the first time around. Exactly how she felt after checking herself in the mirror.

GREAT!! That says it all. It took a little bit to follow the plot line (Cat Lady??) But then, it was magnificent. 5 stars, the Bear heartily approves. Keep it up.

The BEAR

Fun take.

Blauhauser! Really? Of all the names in the world you pick that one? I mean if someone is born onto it I would feel sorry for them. But this is fiction and you have every name in the world to choose from, and you come up with that one. Then you followed that with the cat lady club. All of it completely unnecessary and drawing attention away from the point of the story. A night out with friends, a little more detailed conversation with the bartender and the night where she "payed it forward". Also the way she refused to go to the club was weird. She could have told her husband they could spend an evening with their friends anytime but that night was special and she wanted to spend all their time with each other to convince him to not go to the club.

Total junk. The whole story is a non-story for a starter but since it is just on page that can be overlooked. However, this writer does know one iota about writing. Dude, find a local community college writing class and try to learn something. " Linda said ... Patrick said ... Linda said ... Brittany said ... " etc., is really on a level of elementary school student.

dark2donut2 and IBTVoyeur why not write your own ending to that fucked up story? Lets see how others cut you down for even trying. Yeah, I tried writing a story once. It isn't easy and if you think you can do it better do it. I am almost certain there are two others that would cut you down like you have this author. Try it I dare you to. Then maybe you'll realize what you do isn't good for anyone. By the way, have a shitty life. As for the story I loved it. Was it real? Is any story on here real? Come on its totally fiction.

A couple of quips aside, I liked the friendly time travel crossover.

Why am I hearing the old Twilight Zone theme? A fun ending. Like it a lot.

I really didn't need this. I've lost count of how many times I've pleaded with writers out there to stop beating that great story to death. This one is sillier than most.

the most dangerous person to cheat with is the person who gives you so much satisfaction, that you can not forget about it and your further sex life will be always in trouble, especially with your own spouse.

I really enjoyed this ending. 5*

Ed

You did a decent job of trying to cover the biggest flaw in the story line, which is her having the memories of sex with Marc despite not actually having sex with him in that timeline. It would have been better if her memories had been a bit more vague, but having them fade quickly was not a completely bad approach. Unfortunately, Jim's memories of what she admitted will not fade so quickly.

So, the bigger problem I have with the story line lies in her refusing to go to the club. She makes it clear that even with foreknowledge of the consequences of her actions, she would still do the same thing again. This does not spell long term happiness for them, despite that being what you appear to be going for, as she very clearly remains just an invite away from infidelity.

You could have still had Marc end up with Dee, as she would have said yes even if she was a rebound to save face after Linda told him no. In fact, I think it would have worked better, as Dee wasn't really described as the second best looking woman there in the original. It definitely would have bode better for Jim and Linda if she had actually been there and told Marc no instead of hiding from the temptation.

I like Patrick the bartender. What a great foil to undo some wrongs. Only for a pure heart. :DD

This is the best! It had me howling with laughter from the first sentence. Linda the cat lady with her cat ladies tour group in the land of the leprechauns! Truly priceless! This was far more imaginative than 99% of the FS follow-ons. But one question: how do leprechauns solve the time-traveler's paradox? 5 stars well deserved!

An interesting twist on the GA classic spin-offs. Gave it 4 stars as it felt….idk, too calm? Well written and paced. DMW aka Sumnut96

Someone finally found how a slut wife can unfuck herself.

Had a brief look at Fixing the Past to see who Patrick was "he said in the stereotypical Irish accent" What on God's earth is a stereotypical Irish accent? More accents in Ireland than you could shake a stick at. As a kid, my local parish priest also taught in the secondary school. He was from county Cork. It was only years later I realised that half the kids couldn't understand a word he was saying.

An American cat fanciers group going to another continent, I can't quite get this bit either.

Too much Sci-fi. Didn't believe or like it for a second.

It was OK, but should be in the Science Fiction/Fantasy category. A major plot fault in this story is that Linda supposedly fucked over her husband because of who seduced her, not due to her own weakness of character, morals, and failure. Marc was just the right person in the right place at the right time. So it could happen again, and Linda would become the eager slut, again. Dream on if you think remorse is a cure for cruelty and selfishness.

Enjoyed the read. Thanks for this version and your writing.

Good story, nice approach and great kinda story-birthday present!

Well done!

5 stars from here!

loved the twist and well written

Really fine story.

i love this ending a happy ending

I don't like sci-fi in LW but this is an exception. 5* for a well done job.

i like it

That you for not doing the whole thing over! I'm rather sick of the "February Sucks" stories. Still I scored it at 5 BIG ones!

I don't buy it. That she had perfect knowledge of what would happen and yet still refused to go to the club really implies that she's a slut that can't control her basic urges. I can understand the original Linda, heat of the moment, alcohol coupled with friends egging her on and a heaping of delusional thinking based upon the untested idea that Jim would forgive her for whatever she did.

But this Linda's refusal to go into the club implies that even knowing the outcome she still can't trust herself to be able to tell Marc to get to F*.

That for Jim has to be so worrying because it basically says, Linda can't control herself and if given the opportunity will have sex with Marc/someone else if she feels no one will ever know.

Well done.

Alpha sex is something that inmates get up to. No such thing as an alpha outside of cages in

That aside, 30 years after, as if you don't get over that by changing name and moving, utter nobshittery. Much like the original crybaby MC. Sure she was a silly cow, that was very disrespectful and divorce was the only real option, but gtf over it. Five years at most.

I've read a lot of the alternate February Sucks stories. I know they just fiction. Some of them are written much better than others. Depending of course on the talent of the writer, I'm not sure what makes one woman or man a slut and another a righteous person with a normal sex drive that gets married settles down and has a long a faithful marriage. These stories seem to always have characters whose only goal in life is to screw as many people as they can. But then you look at news and real life over the years and it shows that there are rich and powerful people, actors, politicians and celebrities that seem to do just that and dam the consequences. Tiger woods comes to mind, then there was Epstein and all those associated with him. So, in a sense, and in reality the stories here on LIT in this genre are pretty much a snapshot of real life, scary, huh? 4 stars

Well done! I don't know why so many people want to analyze and critique the idea of a back-to-the-future event. That's called creativity and, if it took you back to 2016 when it was clearly 2047 (get the sarcasm?) maybe you should think twice before posting 200 words about your disappointment. The author delivered what he promised and me? I enjoyed it!

Good alternative 5*****

Interesting but what exactly is Alpha sex. Generally alpha characteristics consist of risk taking to the point of recklessness, aggression, dominance, of anyone weaker, arrogance and objectification of women as inferior trophies.

So Alpha sex would consist of Linda taking it up the ass without her consent and having to clean her shit off his cock with her tongue while he recorded it on his phone to share with his friends then he would fuck her pussy till he came no worries about her as he'd hold her arms above her head to deny her access to her clit. Call her a frigid cunt if she didn't manage to orgasm 5hrough his cock alone. Send her home covered in his come to exalt in her walk of shame and a life long dose of genital warts which will invariably lead to cervical cancer by the time she hits middle age.

At least you thought this story needed some more even though it seems it still did not end it just prolonged the mess you both have written. maybe someone will pick it up and give a real Ending. Maybe next time.

RE Alpha sex. Real world I have never heard a story like Feb Sucks. Real-world, I think it would be a tiny minority that would do what Linda did in the story. A large minority would quietly get Marc's contact info and act on the offer that way, but IMHO very few would cheat in such a direct manner.

I've known well two real-world extreme sex-seeking alpha men in my life. Their pull was astounding. Neither sought out married women specifically though one was a roommate in college and he did bring home a married woman once. I know because he came back 3 hours later scared, "Her husband is looking for me!" He had stashed his motorcycle elsewhere and then hid in his room.

The other alpha sex god I know had Wilt Chamblain high numbers. He was so good looking, I could tell he was good looking and I am straight. I saw him turn down two women who had to be solid 8's then go out with a true model and she was paying for the movie.

Yes, both were narcissists though the latter one was also a ninja skill-level schmooze.

Interesting take. Like how after going back while she had her memories, she wouldn't even go downstairs. That counts for something. One critique is that the specifics of our best remembered sexyal encounters fade with time and details get blurred. We don't have orgasm meters in our brain like an android or sexbot. We remember new places, special events, special times, vacations, exotic locales, new positions, special people, exotic circumstances, new sexual acts, etc. Yes she would apparently still remember thr best "alpha" sex of her life (whatever that me!ns beyond, forceful f$cking) but lose almost all the details. And the guilt and the pain for.most people would color that encounter as negative with time..because the emotional pain, disrespect, loss of her marriage, her painful divorce, and her subsequent loneliness would be vividly remembered years even decades later. But not the details of the sex. That fades...

Great little story, with a relatively fresh take.

Kind of different take on the story, but it ended up pretty good. Picturing Marc being carved up by a chainsaw is great.

Ok I looked it and I live Dee got screwed this time but if have preferred she went in and turned him down. What happens next time if she still isn't strong enough to say fuck off?

But nice switch up on the story line...

I gethe feeling she though she couldn't say know to asswipe but if she loved husband she could no one has the power to bespell a woman even a star she always has choice woul hav liked it I sh tol him no and stayed with husband

Ahhh... The twilight zone. My favorite was the movie. Vic Morrow( of combat fame) was a big racist. He went through being a Jew in a Ghetto during WW2, and a Black guy getting hung by the clan down south. I have read a lot of these endings. This one gets a “5”, for the twilight zone, type ending. Another good one, is “ driving Carrie home”. Check it out, if you haven’t read it.

Was a little confused at first, perhaps another lead-in sentence would have been helpful. However, once I got past the confusion, this fresh take was great! Thanks. Still amazing how much traction the original story has.