All Comments on 'February Sucks - Matter of Fact'

White lowering the gene pool

where is the revenge? as your MC said he didnt go looking for a fight he was just defending his whore

where is the reconciliation as the cuck and slut were already a couple before the start of the story?

where is the cuck tag so people like e wont give you one star for failing to warn us off your cuck stories?

This is like a second or 3rd order removal of the original story. It's not even close to the original story

I just came to give you 1* It's time lit stopped these continuations!

The street fight with Marc was an interesting twist. Dave crippling Marc when he was vulnerable was a nice bit of karmic payback for all the marriages and families he destroyed.

Unfortunately, Jim still reconciled with Linda, so it's an automatic 1*.

After the appalling way she publicly betrayed him in the original, no husband would ever forgive her.

A happy ending (well, for Jim and Linda at least), thank you.

It is not just February Sucks. This one does too! Just happy there won’t be more of these anymore.

Too long to say a little.

Why continue this ? Your first ending was so Bad and wimpy. You just needed to justify your Bad choice. This follow up did nothing for the characters,

Nice and in a bizarre way a logical conclusion to a really overworked original.

5 stars

Some BTB stories are good others not so much, likewise RAAC stories fair about the same, I have no preference for either, but (there’s always a but) the February original and the gamut of derivatives is the one story where reconciliation will never work (no matter how many authors attempt to achieve it), neither does anyone need to go all macho or be burnt, a simple divorce was the only reasonable outcome because for Linda it was never a true marriage, how could it be if she could walk out on Jim that night, the celebrity fling fulfilling a long held fantasy is a poor excuse and no one with an IQ higher than their shoe size would accept that as a valid reason to trash a marriage.

Well written lots of detail with few errors 10/10 for effort but (again a but) all FS stories suffer from the same crippling disadvantage, having the two MC’s defined as the usual LW caricatures, her evil and manipulative him weak willed and ineffectual.

But hey-ho it is a fantasy site after all but whilst the obligatory suspension of disbelief required when delving into the murky world of erotica is a given, sometimes the amount needed is just too high. Such is the case with the FS franchise.

No way this dreadful tale should be allowed to continue, it is an abortion that keeps rising from a dishonorable grave, Stop It It is not worthy of a star.

I'm glad your moving on. At last!

I didn't read it so it wouldn't be right to mark it.

My only comment is that this story, great as it's been, has more than run it's course.

Let it rest.

Please!

February Sucks is like Covid. It won't ever go away. Thanks George

Jim's still a fool for staying with her and she'd still a slut at heart... it is only a matter of time...

overall an average tale but once again for the majority of people I think just having Jim keep Linda ruins any of these rewrites and sequels. Jim again is a pussy and Linda is still a cheating slut of the worst kind because of her letter. A real loving wife, having cheated, would lie and lie again about how bad or average the sex was. Not Linda. What she wrote far outdoes the actual fact of sex.

Thanks, I love all the different twists that writers come up with on February sucks, and both yours.

Normally I really like the FS stories. Usually they grab my attention and draw me in but this one I could only read the first and last pages. Actually I just skimmed the last page.

Bravo!

Flog a horse long enough.

Dee should have been rewarded violently.

Febrary sucks.

third tries and third fiasco.

Go courage for an even worse fourth.

Make us laugh.

what's the point with these GA sequels.

Find the most lamentable and stupid sequel.

Please I can't take any more of the Feb. Sucks shit!

Dude... If I have to read other stories to understand yours, couldn't you at least link them? Or give me a specific title to look for?

As foryour story FEBRUARY SUCKS - MATTER OF FACTIwish I hadnot wasted mytime on reading it. This goes to you Leave the story aloan.

Jim is still a cuckold pussy and your writing still sucks. I had hoped that you might have gotten PASSED all that shitty writing and learned English but it wasn’t to be.

As a matter of fact, she is still a selfish vile human being not to be trusted

The moment I saw this I knew that this story would be feminized, psychobabble slop: "they were stronger now for it. " If you are going to write outside of cuck fetish genre, which is for the mentally ill here, you need to connect with reality. If a woman did what GA's "Linda" character did, there would be no coming back from it, ever.

I agree with others February sucks has been used and drawn out by so many writers it has basically spoiled the original. Time you spent on rewriting a classic you could have thought up your own story, and made something of it. But you didn't you can't like many it seems able to write originals, just like many singers out there yes they can sing but they can't sing their own stuff as they don't know how to.

The true mark of an inexperienced and timid writer is to latch onto someone else's work and not let go. This was your security blanket. You'll never engage your skills or writing talent by dipping into the same well over and over again.

RAAC can never work for the FS story’s that have this premise. You can’t convince me Jim would ever stay with a woman that.

1 - Has sex with another man

2 - abandons her husband on a very romantic night out.

3 - leaves her friends to tell him that she is going out to get fucked by someone who he will never be able to compare too and that he will just have to accept it. But she still loves him and expects everything to be okay.

4 - has such a lack of awareness that she actually writes about how much better Marc was while she is supposed to be fixing her fuckup

The only way I could ever see them staying together is if Jim were to setup the exact scenario that Linda put him through and not do that stupid wimp out where he doesn’t actually cheat. If you did that in this story then good on you I guess but I’m not reading this storyline for a 19th time if it involves reconciliation.

I am going to take a lot of heat for giving you ⭐⭐⭐⭐ on this one. However, you are brave enough to leave anonymous comments turned on. I have enough to give it a sore that I think it should have.

I did something I do not normally do when writing a comment on a story. I read all 28 on yours this time. I was LOL after I read them. There were 16 of the 28 that were anonymous and 12 that people left their user-id. I want to address the anonymous ones first. All readers have the write to make comments if the writer allows them. You did and got a lot of hate in the story comments. The reason I believe you left the anonymous comments on was you are not afraid of the bad one's/haters and think maybe you get some that will stimulate future Ideas. Good for you if that is what you are hoping to achieve.

Of the remaining 12 comment ran the gambit of bad to great ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ from servant111. But they each left you a point of contact if you wanted to reach out for more feedback.

Now more comments from me. I did not really like the first 2 you wrote as much as this one. The second one was so radical it got over 200 comments. Almost none took off on your writing (read them in August after I commented on it). However, good you’re writing in keeping a story grammatically correct, I do feel you try to please to many of us in your follow-ups. This one is a good example. You delve into and across several scenario's without giving each their due. That is personal opinion, but it did not weigh on my scoring of your story.

The fact that I think you should be able to tell the story you want, and I should read it with the thought is it entertaining me is how I score this one. Yes, your story entertained me to the point I gave it ⭐⭐⭐⭐. When I give ratings, I use my personal rating scale. A good read gets ⭐⭐⭐. An excellent read get ⭐⭐⭐⭐. An outstanding read gets ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐. The ⭐⭐⭐⭐ and ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ are not given very often. It takes a lot for me to want to rate a story that high. The story has to excite my interest for how the story flows during the read. The ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ stories reach inside my intrigue to touch a place or maybe a memory that just moves me.

An excellent read, such as this one, take a story or series to a place that I feel is better than just a good read on a tale. You took a chance to take your version across a whole bunch of places most didn't dare to go with their versions. That made yours unique to me. While I had no problem following the various segments of the tale it did impede the flow. I think most readers would never care for that much shift in the story line. Again, just my opinion nothing more.

I laugh so at the thought of a boxing match between an NFL behemoth and an above average person. My grandfather boxed in the 1930's and I have been around pro boxers a lot in my adult life 75 - present. In the late 80's early 90's I play basketball with Roy Jones Jr on a regular basis while he was in his prime. While read this part of the story I could see Jim taking a boxing stance using Marquis of Queens-bury rules. Now you understand why I was laughing. But even with that image in my mind your story still was able to provide a fight I could see and enjoy from a reader's perspective. That in itself was one of the reasons for your story moving from good to excellent. Another was the slippage into the story of Dave being a bouncer as a second job. Then having him achieve some measure of revenge on Mark. But that was a sidebar in the story not to go unnoticed. The fact you brought to a head by having Dave serve prison time for assault (nice touch).

As for the Story being a RACC, I did not like it not in this story. Just like any other story having parts I don't like, I WILL GET OVER IT. It is your story, and it was an excellent read to me. I hope you keep writing. Like broccoli, just because I don't like something does not mean it is not good. My wife, kids and the grand kids all love broccoli so to them it is good. I don't do the healthy thing (LOL).

Keep Writing

JH4Fun

"We're passed it" just wrong.

"We're past it" ok.

"We've passed it" ok.

But "We're passed it" just NO

Nice

Writing was well done

You made a real path to staying together. Not just a wimp giving in.

The original story caused so much emotion the sequels were inevitable.

I like them. Each explores the story in different ways. Worth while even if don't like the outcome.

5 stars

Believe it or not, this wad of bullshit got a 4 from me because it managed to entertain.

Linda even grew into something more closely resembling a human female instead of the lizard she has been portrayed as in pretty much every other story including, and especially, the original.

This was very silly and often portrayed the characters as too simple but it was actually fun.

A word of advice, get an editor. Your spelling and grammar mistakes really detract from the story.

At one point you have Linda "condone" her sins by humbling herself sexually to service Jim.

There were a great number of mistakes like that.

You earned a fan with this crap foundation so I'm interested in seeing what you might do in the future.

Wow. Just... wow. I've read many BTB versions, RAAC versions, but your two (on top of continuing the OG and The Details Matter, make a complete story. I never liked the original as much as I wanted as I always want a happy ending, and The Details Matter was good, but again, hollow to me in that Linda didn't feel much remorse for her actions. But as a middle chapter, it's great now. And your two chapters put a smile on my face and a perfect bow on the story. Thank you.

Nicely done, and as they say in the movies "That's a wrap".

you forgot a version where Jim would fuck Linda's girlfriends in front of her and their husbands.

Any ending to this story where Jim and Linda wind up happily ever after only gets a 1 from me.

It’s simply unbelievable that any man would accept that level of disrespect and humiliation.

1/5

Nicely done. The best in a seemingly unending line February Sucks sequels. You went full-blown Steve Goodman on this and wrote the perfect FS follow-up. Heck, and you didn't even have to go back and add another verse!! 5+++++++++++++/5!!!

Pretty good. I could easily see Jim taking the assault charge. More people than Linda must have seen the confrontation indoors. Dave was the only witness to the fight. Dee the only witness to Dave’s aggravated assault using a plank. Should have ended the scene with Linda taking Jim away, and Marc’s career ended by the concussion from the knockout. Leave Dave and dee out of it.

But the real point is that even if he’d lost badly, Jim proved to himself that he wouldn’t bow to anyone. And that’s really the message he needed to give Linda - less defending her, more rebuilding self esteem.

For gods sake, let it die and write something original.

Nope! Who would have another baby with woman who has proven that she can't be trusted? Why do authors like this one write stories about men who have no self respect? Negative 5 stars.

4, decent. I wasn't a big fan of the previous chapter with just how loathsome Linda was but she managed to improve considerably in this chapter. Like that Marc got beat up by Jim, might be a first for these FebSucks stories. Still not a fan of the reconciliation though, Linda might have improved but she was still a monster for the longest time.

As done as I am with the FS sequels, the LW category is so bereft of works worth reading that I took an option out on this one. I was pleasantly surprised at the technical quality of the writing, if not always by the execution. There was a unintentionally funny side to the story in all the misused words and expressions. It didn't fit in with the demonstrated writing skill, which leads me to believe that the author is only pretending to have any inkling about sports.

Just a few that made me think of Ricky from the Trailer Park Boys - search Rickyisms

- "pulling your punch" means holding back power on a punch, but in this story it was the opposite.

- "having the guy's six" means you are watching someone's back for them, not that you have them figured out.

- "hitting a touchdown" is something I have never heard said in 50 plus years watching and playing North American football. You can score a touchdown, run, catch or pass for a touchdown, but hitting a touchdown? No.

Since the mangling of metaphors seems mainly sports or combat references, you may want to get a manly Neanderthal to translate your references. Otherwise, I think the style of writing is well above average for this site. I may not be a fan of this subcategory, but there were parts here that I thought were done well.

Speaking of music; Wicked Game by Chris Isaak is the sexiest song of all time. but obviously is nothing like Wicked Games. Tainted Love was by Soft Cell originally and was a monster 80s pop hit, but Broken Peaches kills their cover version.

I liked this one, as it tied up most of the loose ends, and finally closed the open ending.

Waste of good rope, tie that ho down and fuck them 3 holes hard

A well crafted as the mc s reconstruct themselves, their relationship, and as Marc deconstructs. The most poignant part was when Linda asks, "did I hurt you that much, Marc?" Her strength and his frailty surfaced. The way the author wrapped and put a ribbon on it was done pretty well and not an easy task. Well deserving of a 5

Nope, not past the first page. No more wasted time on these wastes of skin.

Commenting as an anon I know comes off as pointless.

But I gotta say, the end if the last story.. felt empty to me. Like Linda STILL won. Had her cake and ate it too. Like she wasn't even sorry at all. She still relished she got to cheat on her husband with him knowing. And to get him back, felt empty

Glad to see u write a story to show she was actually sorry. Many will say this was still a bad ending. She still should suffer typical BTB. But this is a STORY. Whether it follows what u think happens in life or not. It was fine.

This last part brings this overall series from what I would say was 2.5 stars. To 4.5 (no story is perfect).

I wish February would fade away!

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I did not think ld like this, but decided to read it anyway, what’s another ending l thought?

Boy, was l wrong l actually liked this version a lot, it got me in and kept me interested from the start.

This was a good story, very real in it’s telling and end.

Scores 5/5 for a great effort

I loved the story, great ending. I loved your commentation at the end, especially the part directed at the sorry ass hate readers. That was really good.

OK how about this. A new story about a different couple whose lives were screwed up by Asshole Marc, before Jim and Linda’s story.

Well, he may be a cheater, bully and wife stealer but at least he’s a patriot.

This sorry so sought after for folks to continue it, I like this version alot because jim was no longer seen as a wimp.

Still need to proofread and also research rather than just go off what you think based on stereotypes from the popular media...

What could go wrong a 23 yo writing about BDSM... I stopped reading at the pet play comment... smh, no idea... not one that google couldn't help you with at least.

With 4 1/2 pages left I haven't rated it.

Enjoyed this follow up, follow up on "February Suck's" It was a bit different, withy a good out come if one enjoys happy endings. Thanks for your writing.

You must be a masochist to keep coming back to this awful story, seemingly in the hope that if it goes long enough readers will someday overlook Linda's unforgivable treachery. Move on.

Well written, but I still hate Linda. There is no getting past what she did to Jim, even if he did choose to forgive her. Despite the prison time, Dave is my hero for crippling Marc.

What CRAP

Nice surprise you mentioned them.

Great sensible adult finish to a brutal story. If GA’s ridiculous tale of woo was to have an authentic happy ending, this reflects the work and toughening that would have to take place for it to be tral. It’s especially good that in this version Linda actually puts in the real work to make things tight, but that said , she still needs to understand and accept that Jim had to, absolutely had to, fight Marc physically (even if he didn’t prevail) to reclaim his dignity, even though he did nothing to relinquish it in the first place. There are times, as a man, you just MUST fight, no matter the outcome, you just must. Londa got that ball rolling, so she just had to sit back and let it happen — and be glad that in the end her man did fight, even against her wishes, an did win, not unscathed, but did win for all the right reasons, shutting down once and for all dis unrelenting asshole adversary. Simple as that. Woman and manhood reclaimed all with a few punches.

Yeah, you are quite the dick rider. Paying such an ode to the cuckyboy classic and KitDelucas man hating version. I truly hope you didn't break your arm giving yourself a pat on the back.

Anyways, just another beta bitch version of one of the worst rated "classics" on here.

Well told story, but please don’t try to describe any more fight scenes. Your word choices abd phrasing’s were so wrong they were almost comical, like you were intentionally trying to say the wrong thing. Strikikrs in a fight — ounces and kicks are not called “hits,” they’re called punches or kicks, Geez, you sound like mary Poppins, not Howard Cosell. And of you’d going to appropriate boxing phrases, get them right by first understanding what they mean. In fdescrububg Jim’s beat down if Marc you say that Jim finally understood the meaning of them phrase “where the head goes the body will follow.” Wrong! It’sacrtyalkt the opposite. The correct phrase is “where the body goes the head will follow.” Wha it means is that if you work punches (or kicks in MMA) to the body and wear your opponents body out, the head too will start to drop and become a much more vulnerable target to hit. Capisce? No more fight announcing for you.

But good final take on the GA story. Marc gets his ass whipped, realistically, as he should, and Linda finally “gets it” and redeems herself as”accordingly,” as much at least as can be accomplished.

Concur completely with anon below that Jin HAD to fight Marc to .reclaim his dignity that he had no role relinquishing; man’s gotta do what a man’s gotta do; there is ALWAYS that aspect of manhood and life, no matter the desire for civility. Also, what an insecure loser idiot loser EdgeofSundiwn is with his fake tough “cuckboy” and “beta” put downs. My experience is that drooling losers (that appear so frequently in the comments on this website and whose response to everything is to scream for vengeance no matter what and accuse people of being cucks and betas when they simply behave rationally in their own obvious best interests. The Edgies of the world are almost certainly, themselves betas, and the very worst kind of betas — alpha wannbees. They’re so preoccupied with looking tough that in real life they do nothing to actually be tough. Big talkers on the internet, but no way any of those pussies would be trading lunches with anyone in an ally, let alone a pro football player who outweighs them by 80 pounds. Losers.

Well, as the saying goes, if you can’t actually be tough, just keep talking tough and hope no one calls you on it. You feelin me Edgy boy?

I'm a sucker for these dumb stories. This one was entertaining and parts were really good, especially each of their internal struggles highlighted in both of your stories. On the other hand your understanding of American sports is shown to be severely lacking. First and foremost your references to the BLM movement was insulting to football fans and players on both sides of the issue. I'll just leave it at that.

- you don't "hit" touchdowns. Baseball players hit home runs. Basketball players hit shots. Football players score TD's.

- why would he "pull a punch" on a guy he was pummeling? That would have given Marc an opening to throw one of his own.

- Why would Jim have Marc's back? He was intent on beating the shit out of him, not helping him to make off with another guys wife. You could say that Dave had Jim's back but he just piled on to what Jim had already done. Hard to believe no one knew what was happening indoors and a crowd didn't fallow them out to witness it or breaking up.

- Marc's whole PR situation - just doesn't work that way. Everything about it was off.

I thought Dee was a one dimensional character. She was just too evil to actually exist. At the very least Lunda would have sniffed that out and cut ties much sooner......but then she was stupid enough to think that she could walk out the door with another man and expect her husband to be OK with it...

Some entertaining weird fragments but wow the overall plot just escalated like crazy and became sheer chaos. Lot of characters ended up reverting to type like the villain Marc, or Dee, etc. At least Linda finally had remorse.

Yeah. Gigi story but Please stop describing sports and combat situations. You’re clearly not familiar with either. In a fight, you don’t”hold-up” your knee to strike and opponent or to have his head run into your knee. You “ drive” your knee into his head when head is down becaste yiu’ve already struck him and he’s bent over, ir where, as here, the opponent has lowered himself to try and tackle you. Not because you held up your knee and invited him to plant his face on it. Really? Come on man. Have you ever seen. Fight, watched MMA, or even been in one. I’ve never been in one where someone “held” up his knee for me to run my face into it. Geez dude. And finally, “six” is a military or law enforcement term meaning you have their back, or are providing cover. You NEVER have an opponent’s six, unless you’re ambushing them from behind. In other words, “six” USA term of support, not attack. Perhaps visit a gym or watch a combat documentary and look up situation specific terms before using them. Otherwise, you dminish an otherwise good story by misusing terms in a way that’s comical. And finally, Marc’s teammates wouldn’t tell him he couldn’t “run” professionally anymore. Dude, he’s not a track star, he’s a football player. You “play” football, whether American or soccer, you”don’t “run” football. Are you serious, have you even seen sports before at all? You sound like a librarian searching for words to describe a physical world she’s never seen or participated in. But the story and it’s messages are really good. Just stay out of the fight describing business.

Just wanted to add that your favorited stories list is pure gold. We clearly have the same tastes when it comes to what constitutes a great LW tale. Thank you!

Soooooo, you kick Marc's ass and defend a cheating wife. But she says you're not getting any loving tonight. Hahahaha. Because you're a brute. That's hilariously ridiculous.

Take your clothes off and bend over.

Having now read your concluding song list, I see why fighting, sports, and military terms completely elude you. Stop using words and phrases that you don’t have a clear understanding of; sounds ridiculous. I got yer “6” on this.

Good story,but I’ll just add that under the circumstances, Jim absolutely HAD to fight Marc, win or lose. Every man understands that on a core, primal level, and these days, most women do too, including every single one of my five daughters. Hello?

Like anons below, I just couldn’t wrap my head around your description of the fight between Jim and Marc. The misuse of words and phrases was so absurd it almost seemed intentional. That is until I saw your song list. Viola! Except for Johnny Cash, the song list said it all. Eclectic, nerdy, and new wavey in a way a person familiar with the physical, re: athletic, sports, and combat worlds, never would be. For real?. “Jim held up his knee to

Marc’s face.” Hilarious: “hey, here’s my knee. You wanna place your face on it, you big lug”?

I read half of the first page and couldn't be bothered with the rest, if the loser wants the bitch back after what she did then let him have her.

You can go fuck straight off. See, when you say hate readers it's like you're a whore wife telling a betrayed husband that he's just too prideful and his ego is getting in the way of them being happy. So what if she abandoned him? What does that matter?

Well fuck you and the horse you rode in on. You're a shit writer that romanticises horrendous bebaviour, that makes humiliation and betrayal like some sort of gift from heavens for those on the receiving end.

Not one person in the story is deserving of respect and understanding. They're all bastards that deserve what they get.

But hey, heres hoping you will be on the receiving end of such behaviour.

Let's see you be the all forgiving cuck, and when you have an inkling of self worth and self respect and feel the tinge of regret that you threw those away to accept a whore that abandoned you for a cock tell yourself your just a hate reader and that you should freely accept other mens cum from your partners orifices.

Here is the thing about this version. The wife had two fuck fests and a emotional relationship with asshole Mark. She DOES NOT get to lecture her ex, on fighting said asshole off. SHE is the one that made in necessary for Jim to defend her. All the fallout, including what happened to Dave, is all on Linda. I liked the version of this story overall, but not the ending. Except for the version where she was drugged, he needs to not only divorce her, but kick her out of his life. 3 stars,

I don't love everything you write, nor do I agree with it all, but you do (mostly) write well ! A final proofread before pulling the "publish" trigger would catch most, if not all, of the typos and other mistakes, but there usually aren't THAT many as to detract from the story...

I can see the forest AND the trees, so the little, picayune errors that many will focus on really don't matter to me !

I liked your work through GA's "February Sucks" universe, so between the originality and the determination to come to a settled ending that is in your work, I gave 5 stars for all of the work that went into your stories.

Thanks for writing.

I do like happy endings, ignore the haters if it wasn't this it would be something else

Ignore the haters and write what you want to write. Your thoughts and ideas are important to you to put them in a story. The haters will hate and all others will enjoy your stories. I love your take on KA tale.

How do you "forgive and forget" that kind of betrayal? It would simply eat away at your soul and rot your heart, putting you in an early grave from worrying when she might go off the rails again. There are times for forgiveness and times for BTB. This was one of those times he should have run the other way and dumped her. Bad story ending.

Reading yet another take on a GA story should seem painful at this point. Thank you, I like these 2 characters better as seen through your eyes. Good read.

GREAT extra alternate ending!!!!! THANKS!!!!!

Interesting direction with this second follow-up. Still think basing it (even with two degrees of separation) from the hot mess that was the KitDeLuca variant was a mistake, and one that kind of invalidates the while reconciliation. But ignoring that, taking this story on its won with respect to the author's other prior follow-up, this has some interesting scenes and character development for Linda.

FYI: if you’re ever going I write about a fight again, let’s help you get the terminology right.

First, having a guy’s “six” means to have his back, like the hands on a clock, you’re covering his back as a m ally, not attacking him from the front. Sheer.

In a fight, you don’t old “hold up” your knee so your opponent can run into it. For cripes sake, you jam your knee into a guys’d face who has lowered himself to try and tackle you.

Please, learn fight terms of you’re going to use them. Makes an otherwise good telling of a story suddenly seem foolish.

Good story. Nuanced and credible, except for the usual blood thirsties of course, who are not happy unless everyone is miserable.

Great story, well told except the huge distraction of your obvious complete ignorance of the language of sport and fighting. Your descriptions sound as though you landed from Mars having never seen a football game or fight, nor even heard one fescribed. Have an editor who has next time so weM’re not subjected to the visual of someone in a fight holding his knee in the air for his opponent to run his head into. It made an otherwise excellent story and good telling of it seem absurd at the near climax. Have someone at least minimal my conversant editor your sports dialogue. It would take 5 minutes.

Otherwise, a compelling story and tell. 🤙🏿

Oh boy have I been on a wild ride.

I discovered FS a couple days ago and I think I've felt what most readers seem to have felt about it. An intense dissatisfaction that a story with such an incredible start didn't have the most satisfying conclusion. I've read several of the attempts by other authors to give the story their own treatment. For me personally the BTB plot goes against the original authors intent too much and often strays into the land of fantasy (Marc gets his dick chopped off at least twice).

This take on the story its previous chapter and the one it was spawned from for me represent the best possible RAAC outcome from the original text. I feel the need to have Marc ruined was a bit much. You might ask why? Well for me the intent with FS was to show that real life is messy, that happy endings aren't certain but that two people who love one another can overcome even the worst betrayal, the issue with that text for me was that GA failed to show Linda's own breakdown and regret leaving the reader in the position this sequel picked up. Jim a broken cuckold always haunted by his inadequacy. This edition gives us that closure, the last two chapters show both of them breaking down and growing anew from the wreckage of a failed marriage. Is it perfect? No but hey that's real life. With that said, let's just circle back to that fight... No just no. I don't object to Jim beating Marc but the language and description seriously need work.

I feel like this story has given me the perfect platform to step off the FS train. To feel like a mostly satisfactory ending and resolution has been found to the original text and move onto other stories, and for that alone I am truly grateful.

Love this take on an old story 5*****

You say aiming at the skies but i have some bad news for you.

The brown sky and brown "clouds" you're aming at are not what they seem. They're actually the bottom of a literal shit pit you've hung yourself upside down against.

Blood has pooled in your head and you've inhaled so much methane and shit particles you seem to believe yoy've got integrity.

Big no right there.

All over an arrogant bastard. Dave should have been given an award. Other husband's and boyfriend should have supported him.

This is a good story, an excellent ending, except that your description of the Jim/ Marc fight is cartoonish. Have someone who’s actually faught write your fight sequences. Note that that punches and knees (and elbows, for that matter) are “strikes,” not “hits.” It’s fighting, not baseball. Also, “six” in the military and law enforcement means someone’s back, as in six o’clock, not that you’ve zeroed in on them. I’m delighted the way the fight ended, not withstanding Linda’s foolish objection to it, win or lose, it ended the only way it could have for any real man. That is the aggrieved spouse fighting for his woman, win or lose.arc got his ass licked by a novice boxer. Actually not as surprising as it seems. Just because you’re bug and strong and can deliver blows while fully padded doesn’t translate into being able to actually fight.

Carry on. Good ending that should allow Jim and Linda — and US, test in peace.

Now this version really works on all levels. Plot characters storyline everything. Well written and deserving of 5 stars. One of the better versions. I didn't like your other version but this one just feels right. Great story and I'm glad Linda and Jim got back together in a way that to me was believable. BardnotBard

This around number 90 of the sequels to FS and I have to say I enjoyed the plotline and writing. Congrats on a job well done.

Just a terrible ending.

Saw bondage, ropes etc and figured author was jumping the shark. Might be a good story but I couldn't finish it. There's really no excuse for keeping her without a brutal post nup and then only till the kids leave the house.

No FS story is remotely plausible unless the slut is kicked to the curb. IRL, no marriage would survive what the slut did.

Top ten of all the FS i have read and there have been so many from vampires to forgiving cucks to imposters not sure i would agree to any kind of BDSM, i mean trust and communications are paramount in that kind of relationship i don't see how Jim could ever have that where they were loved the ending you dee dee was interesting i think i would have enjoyed you showing more of her, but that was not this story

And now for the happy ending everybody wants: "And then they all, along with the author, died a horrible, prolonged, intensely painful, excruciating death, the kind deserving of trash. The end."

Here’s the score matrix for February Sucks stories:

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1 Star = if Jim stays with Linda in any form. No matter any other factors. This story is here.

2 Stars = Jim divorces Linda without any punishment.

3 Stars = Divorce plus punishment of some kind.

4 Stars = Divorce, Linda punished and suffers, and Marc dies.

5 Stars = Linda dies, hopefully in a really horrific way, so that other potential sluts decide to remain loyal.

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Omegaman56 wrote the absolute best response to George Anderson’s Evil: https://www.literotica.com/s/february-sucks-my-way

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ZK

Oh, fuck no. Long winded cuck bullsit. I heartily agree with anonymous from 3 days ago regarding scoring for the FS follow ups. Thank goodness there have been some worthy of 5 stars. Not enough though because considering what Linda the cheating cunt did, there could be no other possible result other than a 2 score minimum.