All Comments on 'Finally Hooking Up'

Lol did the author do a line of coke then wrote that terrible ending??

Suggestion: Get a tube, of super glue, and glue the comma, key, on your keyboard, until it no longer, works. Or, find an editor that can correct punctuation. It will make your writing much more readable.

wtf is up with all the damned commas?

The final paragraph earned you and extra star.

There are far too many comas throughout your essay!

Punctuation is a required element of prose as it amplifies the written word(s). Sometime a shorter pair of sentences is more appropriate than extraneous punctuation.

As you proof read your work, watch for the slight pauses that may require comas. Please do not simply dabble comas about like you're seasoning your breakfast eggs.

Your essay has merits and a reasonably decent story line. The line of milfs through university brought a relief to both yourself and we readers. Glad that you hit the younger sister too, wether she was first or second is of little importance.