All Comments on 'Finding a Friend Ch. 02'

While the story was erotic and the scene suitably arousing, the complete lack of dialog left me feeling like I was on the other side of the stage instead of with them. Your first chapter was much better because the dialog blended with your good narrative skills, resulting in a much fuller experience as a reader. This was good, don't get me wrong, but only good instead of great like Ch. 01. Thanks for the story.