All Comments on 'Finishing What You Started'

Thus was beautifully written and made my cock hard throughout the story. You have a gift for storytelling, so please keep doing it!

Thank you for the comments. I'm still learning to write erotica well, and I appreciate the feedback.

You are an exciting writer! I love the imagery and the submission. I could feel what she was experiencing as I read your words AND I WANTED to experience it, your story made me want to be where she was. It is a rainy, dreary day here and your story lit up my weekend. Thank you.

perhaps more immediate physical description and less mental, also "nether" is not a great erotic word

"You look up to him, and your glazed eyes meet his. You absent-mindedly allow his cum to follow the rivulets of saliva down your chin, to cascade down the contours of your chest, and to settle in the crease formed at the junction of your legs and abdomen." sounds like reading a road map, maybe too much description